Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted December 18, 2004 Share Posted December 18, 2004 The Knights of Kudra were formed to combat the growing threat of an Ork Waaagh! from the Urdus Sector. Originally named the Scar Titans, they did thwart the green-skinned menace on multiple fronts. Eventually, and reduced to under half their original strength by their constant crusade, they did stumble on to the feudal death world of Kudra. Kudra, its inhabitants constantly harassed by the giant lizards known locally as Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
SCC Posted December 18, 2004 Share Posted December 18, 2004 The Knights of Kudra were formed to combat the growing threat of an Ork Waaagh! from the Urdus Sector. Originally named the Wehateultramarines Marines, And there's your first problem, I'm having a hard time taking this Chapter seriously for the simple reason that you've used a gag name in place of something more believable. It looks like you've put a bit of effort and thought into the rest of the IA but frankly, you've wasted it with the gag name at the start, it took me 3 goes to get past 'Wehateultramarines Marines' and each time I see it I quit reading - if you aren't going to take it seriously why should I? This might seem harsh but I think you'll get a better response if you change the Chapter's former name to something sensible :P Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-689725 Share on other sites More sharing options...
5t3 Posted December 18, 2004 Share Posted December 18, 2004 lol i think the former name is well funny :P and as a former name not many people are going to care about it BUT It does make the rest of the fluff be taken as a joke Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-689966 Share on other sites More sharing options...
angel of darkness Posted December 18, 2004 Share Posted December 18, 2004 wehateultramarines... wazzisphaci... niiiice... :P but yeah, it does make the rest of it seem like a joke. and smurfs aren't that bad... ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-689971 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted December 18, 2004 Author Share Posted December 18, 2004 Truth be told, Wehateultramarines Marines was a placeholder name, used because a friend of mine suggested that I have something there while I work on the rest. So if you can think of something to have them be called then feel free to shout it out, I'm currently working on other areas of the fluff. And Wazzisphaci should be pronounced Wa-zeez-fah-sigh, not whatshisfacey, as I can tell you're thinking. Yes, Angel of Darkness, I am looking at you. I'll blank out the early name for now, see if that helps readability. And add the description of the fleet. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-689988 Share on other sites More sharing options...
angel of darkness Posted December 18, 2004 Share Posted December 18, 2004 errr... no one can look at me! I shall infiltrate, and you shall have no line of sight... (runs and hides) a voice comes from somewhere (but no one can tell where) saying: "yes, add stuff about the fleet... good idea... me like..." Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-689994 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted December 18, 2004 Author Share Posted December 18, 2004 Edited to show a new "former name", and describe some of the fleet. More will come later... probably. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-690108 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Race Bannon Posted December 18, 2004 Share Posted December 18, 2004 Scar Titans?! Heck yeah that is a MUCH better name!! Now I am reading it as "whatshisfacey" :P I like this a lot! ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-690115 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted December 19, 2004 Author Share Posted December 19, 2004 New fleet description added, and background on the current chapter master Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-690935 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted January 24, 2005 Author Share Posted January 24, 2005 More stuff added/rewritten, I just keep editing it into the first post. I promise, as soon as I get round to figuring out paint shop pro I'll put up some heraldry images. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-734504 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted March 13, 2005 Author Share Posted March 13, 2005 'nother update, and a shameless bump: I think that it's about finished, but there's something about it that just doesn't seem right. I'd love it if one of the fluff-meisters from the Ordo Literatus could have another read-through, maybe point out what it is thats bugging me. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792066 Share on other sites More sharing options...
ironloki Posted March 13, 2005 Share Posted March 13, 2005 Well If SCC didn't like it I doubt other OL people will read it. Perhaps it you removed the silly-ness then you might get a better response ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792106 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurelius Rex Posted March 13, 2005 Share Posted March 13, 2005 Printed off, and will get back to you. I see that most of the 'silliness' is gone but I did notice that the infamous 'WhatsHisFace' was still there... a name corrupted by the frater from it's intended meaning? Feedback tomorrow, Alasseo. ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792232 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hemal Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 Also a chapter wouldn't be founded simply to hem in an Ork horde - make their founding reason a little deeper - perhaps to help local guard units reconquer lost systems as a part of a crusade that would be the chapter's aptism of fire at the dawn of the 26th founding? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792375 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hemal Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 Just out of interest, is this based at all on the Dragonriders of Pern by Anne Mccaffrey? I ask because if the use of the word "wher" which is like an ancestor of the dragons in the aforementioned books.... And by the way, great background and definitely want to see how the army looks - perhaps a squad of Legio B&C would be appropriate (effectively use DW kill team rules?). And perhaps a veteran Dreadnaught for Wazzipachi - after all, he survived an Axe of Khonre (albeit a little shorter for it!) so I would assume that he would be entombed in a Dread. And scratch the 26th founding I suggested, make it a founding just after the Age of Apostasy instead.. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792728 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanguinius Chosen Wing Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 yea it does have the same ring to it as the dragonriders out of intrest does anything fall from the sky? enough of me being an ;) great fluuf im looking forward to going over it again Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792779 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted March 14, 2005 Author Share Posted March 14, 2005 As it happens, I haven't read any of the Dragonrider series. The word "wher" was simply pulled out of a bestiary at my old school library; from the description it sounded a lot like the new GW cold ones. @Hemal: Perhaps you're right, an Ork Waagh does sound a bit of a weak reason for a founding. On the other hand, look at what happened on Rynn's World... Wazzisphaci is not a character I intend to use in a game, but if he was then he would get a venerable dreadnaught. Unless you think its more plausible to have him interred in a dreadnaught directly after his fight with Magon Sherr, but with that I refer you to Tobias Maxilla, augmetic from the chest down. And if I made a unit of Legio B&C marines for these guys I'd have trouble telling them apart from the rest of the army, as the main colour scheme is very similar. @Aurelius: cheers, I look forward to hearing your comments. Wazzisphaci is here to stay, although I'm half surprised no-one spotted the other "derivative" names (just try reading them with a different emPHAsis, which is how I came up with most of them) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792805 Share on other sites More sharing options...
ironloki Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 Well im not sure. I think that orks are enough of a threat for a chapter to be created to keep them at bay. After all look what they did at armaggedon ;) . I suppose more marines are created primarily to fend of chaos but orks are a force that shouldn't be underestimated. One idea could be have their reason for foundation unknown but have their primary targets at the moment orks? :lol: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792855 Share on other sites More sharing options...
utilityzero Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 in my fluff my chapter was created in anticipation of a Orc Warlord's rise, but the guy can't hold his boyz together and the whole thing sort of peters out, but my chapter's founding has already begun and when they finally move out... there's really no crusade to launch. orks are actually like the imperium's number one enemy i thought. they're everywhere and the imps spend way mroe time fighting them than they do the traitors. but chaos gets top billing anyhow. i think it's all the spikey bits. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-792898 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurelius Rex Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 PM sent... long, and hopefully helpful. I especially loved the robots and the really big chainsword. B) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-793397 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted March 14, 2005 Author Share Posted March 14, 2005 Cheers for that Aurelius, I'll go through the text during a free at college tomorrow. I think it was probably the stylistic thing that was bugging me, thanks for pointing that out. Unfortunately, the big chainsword guy was built before I joined B&C, so no Golgotha homage there. And for those of you who didn't spot it: Vindei Sell=Vin Diesel. I had him burnt at the stake because he annoyed me at the time Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-793452 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurelius Rex Posted March 14, 2005 Share Posted March 14, 2005 No problem. :) Vin Diesel! Makes more sense than my idea for what you were aiming for, Window Sill. B) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-793495 Share on other sites More sharing options...
utilityzero Posted March 15, 2005 Share Posted March 15, 2005 i do hate to be this off topic... but why are the only likable movies with vin diesel the ones where he dies? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-793698 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Sergeant Alasseo Posted May 11, 2005 Author Share Posted May 11, 2005 Ok, this is the absolute last update. The next time you hear about the KoK it will be in a fluff story (Aurelius may be able to guess what about). I'm just going to shove in the link to the chapter symbol here, and a pic of the rest of the armour heraldry here. Sorry to drag this thread up from the archives, but this is be the last time. I am in the process of putting together a website for these guys, and you may see a link for that soon, but until then, the history is being hosted and posted here. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-851536 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurelius Rex Posted May 11, 2005 Share Posted May 11, 2005 Fluff story sounds good, but I can't think what it might be about... give us a clue? The two links don't work for me - I just get a 'Bebo session expired' page in each case. <_< I hope that you have had luck at solving the knotty stylistic problems with the Knights... until the website goes live don't forget us, and give us some updates here, why don't you? ^_^ Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/61219-knights-of-kudra/#findComment-851934 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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