Emperor's Indignation Posted June 8, 2008 Share Posted June 8, 2008 Origins Night Lords war band, seperated from legion shortly after Horus Heresy Archion clad in ancient, beaten and tainted terminator armour. A robustly built warrior even those loyal to him would'nt even argue with his final word, thus Midnights Edge came to be.Home world No confirmed base of operation, for the most part to be fleet based many ships dating back millenia. Beliefs undivided but tend to side with tzneetch, Title utilizing a crusader pattern land raider obtained on a terror raid of a forge world, it has since then been adorned with nasty looking spikes and any trophies that have been aquired during raids and skirmishes, the trophies are mostly that of champions from other warbands and the odd skmish with loyalist marine companies as well as heads and iconography from other races and anything deemed fit for display is then put on the spikes Combat techniques terror raids and skirmishes just a little different to parent legion Gene-seed Direct link to the Night Lords, despite being chaos the Apotecharies keep an eye out for mutational devience those that show the smallest signs are instantly annihilated as a chaos warband they still value be whole without anything other than what goes into making them into intsruments of destructionby means of their original conditioning. Battle cry At the Edge of Midnight we strikeWe keep the crypt Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hubernator Posted June 8, 2008 Share Posted June 8, 2008 Concept seems good. You do know you have a dud half-header? :o The one spelt "choas legion" Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1593226 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted June 8, 2008 Author Share Posted June 8, 2008 yep meant to be Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1593240 Share on other sites More sharing options...
kil78 Posted June 8, 2008 Share Posted June 8, 2008 interesting idea, though I would like to see it more fleshed out. Â also why would they use dreadnaughts to guard dreadnaughts, or rather who watches the dreads that watch the dreds? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1593265 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 1, 2008 Author Share Posted October 1, 2008 need inspiration please help Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1712498 Share on other sites More sharing options...
flintlocklaser Posted October 1, 2008 Share Posted October 1, 2008 need inspiration please help  Have you changed anything since last time? This is your DIY, not ours - you need to flesh out what you have a bit more. At the moment there's no specific feel to this legion, so it's hard to make recommendations.  I can say this: their stated purpose of guarding the Night Lords dreadnought supply seems odd. Night Lords are all about hit-and-run terror raids - making a subunit of the NLs whose job is to just sit in one place seems weird. And even if you want a chaos warband that primarily operates in a rear-guard function, your organizational choices seem to reflect a raiding force more than a stationary garrison.  What do you want these guys to do? If you were going to game with this army list, what kinds of 'stories' would your games be trying to tell? I think by giving them such a static mission, you've really limited yourself as to the group's possible activities, both in the past and in the future.  Maybe this will help inspire you: think about what armies you'd like for your chapter to have fought against. Come up with some history for this group, think of ways you could have come in contact with the adversaries (or allies!) you'd like for them to have had. And at the risk of beating a dead horse, seriously reconsider changing this chapter's overall mission - I think it's the biggest hurdle you'll have to coming up with an interesting history for them. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1712731 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted February 25, 2009 Author Share Posted February 25, 2009 currently working on Crypt Keepers models, i hope to get some pictures posted shortly, trying to work on AI but not getting on anywhere fast same with Knights Indignant Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1896965 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted May 6, 2009 Author Share Posted May 6, 2009 i've changed the crit in Origins, Homeworld and combat techniques. Would like feed back please Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1979296 Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJmug Posted May 7, 2009 Share Posted May 7, 2009 need inspiration please help pic related http://i209.photobucket.com/albums/bb167/JJmug/cryptkeeper.jpg Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1979830 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The 13th Goat Posted May 7, 2009 Share Posted May 7, 2009 They won't be a legion, for a start. They'll be a chapter. Also, they look VERY similar to the Night Lords (which you need to spell correctly in your sidebar). If you really want to make them your own, mix up the colour scheme a bit. Otherwise you might as well play NL. I'm still confused as to why they are different from the NL and why they are considered seperate from the rest of the legion. :) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1979947 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grey Hunter Ydalir Posted May 7, 2009 Share Posted May 7, 2009 JJmug this is not 4chan. :lol: Â I hope to god it never becomes like it either. Â I'm still confused as to why they are different from the NL and why they are considered seperate from the rest of the legion. Â 13th Goat and I share the same confusion, just what makes these guys different to the rest of the Night Lords legion? More explanation and, perhaps, a re-imagining of ideas would be a good thing. Re-evaluate your inspiration and see what about makes the Crypt Keepers special to you, and perhaps seperate it from the Night Lords stuff, so that it is much clearer to us on how to help you. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1980264 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted May 7, 2009 Author Share Posted May 7, 2009 thanks all for the feedback, I will consider a different approach to the hiostory and other parts of the IA Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1980462 Share on other sites More sharing options...
hummus Posted May 8, 2009 Share Posted May 8, 2009 the battle cry should be the monster mash song just for the line "...with there vocal group the crypt kicker five...." Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1981176 Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJmug Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 JJmug this is not 4chan. <_< Â Hey the name is Crypt Keepers so i thought it would help. Could you imagine i daemon prince that looks like that. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1982854 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted May 10, 2009 Author Share Posted May 10, 2009 that would be quite amusing to have a deamon prince looking like that, Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1983370 Share on other sites More sharing options...
De4thAnge1 Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 that would be quite amusing to have a deamon prince looking like that, Yup... quite possibly your last lol Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1985301 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 last what, anyway have you read through the Crypt Keepers AI and the changes to the whole article Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-1985626 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 7, 2009 Author Share Posted October 7, 2009 i've been tweeking little bits of the IA trying to make it flow better, thinking how i can describe it to the best of my ability. If any parts still confuse please say or if any thoughts come to mind (cause i'm struggling to come up with much else) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2141431 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ace Debonair Posted October 7, 2009 Share Posted October 7, 2009 Right then, to work. :P Â Homeworld section: So you have a homeworld, eh? Good! Tell us about it. Is it a barren, weather-worn wasteland, where great, dangerous creatures roam? Is it a lush, tropical paradise that hides the true horrors of the chaos legion who call it home? Does it have a name? Â Origins: To my mind this is the most important part of a chaos legion - I'd seriously consider writing more detail for this section. What's the deal with these guys? Are they a traitor chapter, disenchanted with the dying, corrupted Imperium? Are they an ambitious warband, seeking to break away from the misguided leadership of anotehr chaos lord? Â Your beliefs talk more about the Crypt's defences than your marines' beliefs. What motivates them, what keeps them fighting? Â Presumably, what with all the links to the legion, your gene-seed is Night Lords. You might as well say so, having mystery geneseed only adds one more question to the list. Â The colours could also do with something a little more... unique. Try adding some black or purple, or something crazy like white or bronze, see what you think. Â There's your criticism. :P Enjoy. :P Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2141725 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 8, 2009 Author Share Posted October 8, 2009 thanks for the crit trying to incorperate it into the sections that require that extra bit, but i'm still struggling on the Beliefs section trying to think how i could make it scan. But just thinking what to put would be a start. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2143028 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 15, 2009 Author Share Posted October 15, 2009 there's now a little story as such Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2153144 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ferrus Manus Posted October 15, 2009 Share Posted October 15, 2009 No offence but please check your coding during and after you post. It's a bit messy. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2153362 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 16, 2009 Author Share Posted October 16, 2009 is this better Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2154470 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 23, 2009 Author Share Posted October 23, 2009 is it ok to use pictures sourced from relavent sites to use in the IA's to illistrate things Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2160652 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emperor's Indignation Posted October 30, 2009 Author Share Posted October 30, 2009 does the story flow or does it ramble Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/138095-midnights-edge/#findComment-2169508 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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