Xaviers Art Entry

[Captin Xavier]

Hey guys n girls

 

Its me again, but this time ive got somethin worth while to show ya :P

 

This year I figured that im not good enough to enter the other golden demon catagories except young bloods, which im to old for now ;) .

 

So I thought 'Hmm what else am I good at that the hobby involves?' then I realised games day is coming up.

I added this all up n got 7 :P n thought I should enter the art comp this year.

 

So here it is:

 

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e136/Toad860/The%20Bolter%20And%20Chainsword/GamesDayArtCompEntry.jpg

 

My questions to you B&C are:

 

1) what do you think?

2) what needs to be done (apart from the obvious)?

3) Do you think I stand a change in the 15's and under catagory??

 

 

C&C needed ;)

 

 

 

Cpt X :)

[Hubernator]

1) that looks pretty good so far :)

 

2) What Chapter is he from?? That's about all I can of.

 

3) if you somehow look younger than you are then maybe :P

[Captin Xavier]

I haven't a clue what chapter he is from yet, I was gunna wait for some more replies before I asked that :P

 

and unfortunatly I had an arguement with one of the entry people last year because they thought I was older than I was :)

 

Thanks for the reply, I would like an idea for a back ground. I was thinking of a few drop pods coming down behind him. Or maybe a a thunder hawk.

[Mal]

Ok my comments, since its a comp entry, im going to be a little harsh, so I apologise inadvance for that.

 

The backpack is sitting at an angle that makes it look far too 2d, and the exhaust is too small.

The leading foot has no heel.

The body should have a step where the chest plate is situtated, atm it flows too smoothly.

The boltpistol arm shoulder pad needs to be angled a little, it wouldn't be facing the viewer perfectly face on from that view point.

The powersword arm shoulder pad needs to flare out more, they are BIG and dont grip in quite that way.

The chest/head scale is off (chest either too big or head too small, cant decide which, not much to be changed there however, just a slight scale).

Make the bolt pistol 3d, its a block weapon so it will be easy to do, just rememver your perspectives when doing a viewpoint.

 

Other than that, its comming along well.

[Captin Xavier]

Thanks guys

 

This is my first try at a marine, and i am only 15, so this feed back is a great way for me to learn.

Also you do have to remeber im not looking to win i just want to stand a good chance.

 

 

Thank you for being honset.

 

Cpt X