ItSeWiNg Posted November 25, 2008 Share Posted November 25, 2008 "Commander Were In Position" The Voice Came In Over The Vox, "Ok Boys Move Up" Called The Commander, The Marines Pelted Along The Snow Landscape. " Taking Aim Sir " Called The Scout, Hes Scope Rested On The Chaos Lords Head, He Squeezed The Trigger. " Take Cover " Came The Screams From The Chaos Marines On The Far Side Of The Plain. Suddenly Krak Grenades Came In " Move Up Boys GRENADES!! " Screamed The Commander Young Wolf Brin Stood Up And Ran Straight Acrosse The Plain, Raising Up His Chainsaw Hit To Hack Down The First Chaos In Sight. Bolter Fire Raged On as The Young Warrior Hacked His Way Through The Enemy " Charge Forward " Came The Call From The Marines Side. Every Wolf Insite Dashed Fowards Throwing All There Fire Into The Chaos Lines. Brin Continued His Onslaught Until Tackling A Khorne Berserker Who Snapped His Chainsaw In Half With One Blow Froma Chain Ace # Thats All For Now C&C Welcome - Steve Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/153216-a-short-story-on-space-wolves/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wolf89 Posted November 25, 2008 Share Posted November 25, 2008 Aside from Space Wolves referring to their HQ's as 'commanders', the lack of fluff consideration for combat tactics, and the general haphazard combination of words that described the battlefield; it was a good attempt. :P This seems more like ultramarines than Space Wolves. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/153216-a-short-story-on-space-wolves/#findComment-1785630 Share on other sites More sharing options...
ItSeWiNg Posted November 26, 2008 Author Share Posted November 26, 2008 HAha true true ill improve it some time :D:D Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/153216-a-short-story-on-space-wolves/#findComment-1786264 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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