The Second Burning

[Luy22]

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A lone great ship drifted through space. It was a stolen Ultramarines vessel. But not a single Ultramarine stood upon it. The Strike Cruiser floated into the Ith sector. Aboard the bridge was a single entity. A librarian dressed in Ultramarines gear, a fur cloak wrapped about him. His hands were behind his back. "This is the system." He said as a second man dressed in Ultramarines armor wandered up beside him.

 

"The Brazen Fists?" The second figure said, looking down at the burning, tortured volcanic planet of Ith below.

 

"Yes, brother. The Brazen Fists. They are on the edge of destruction. There is not much keeping them from joining us." Said the librarian quietly.

 

"How do you know they will not fire upon us on site?" The other said. "Evzimus, have you gone mad?"

 

"If that is what you call it... yes..." He turned, smiling. "Brother Turnius, go ready the Thunderhawks. We will bomb the city from orbit, and fly in ourselves. We are only a single squad. We need to do this quickly. The first objective is to crack open their fortress monastery. After that, we must kill the chapter master. Then, we offer to lead them to salvation. They deserve more then a destroyed planet..."

 

"Yes, lord..." Said Turnius, turning on his heel to go to the docking bays. The librarian, Evzimus, turned his gaze back to the planet. "I need soldiers." The renegade smiled.

[cherrboh]

the idea is there mate, but its too stoppy. youve put full stops in far too often, and so its very blocky to read.

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