Newtype Posted March 26, 2010 Author Share Posted March 26, 2010 Thank you Vash113 . I didn't know that. I'll make the changes to reflect that new information. Newtype Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2335097 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Newtype Posted April 11, 2010 Author Share Posted April 11, 2010 Good day all. I have added in an image of the Black Razor colour scheme, and edited some of the sections. I think I have everything covered, so I would like to ask is the IA ready for the Library? C&C most wanted. For now, Newtype Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2356893 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grand Master Tyrak Posted April 11, 2010 Share Posted April 11, 2010 Armoured domes emerged from the ground and began to cycle slowly open. Revealed within were the black cyclopean spheres of warp gate generators. Just as the main drive engines on the Domus reached full power, the gates unleashed a vast null energy beam that targeted the planetoid. Firstly, it doesn't seem feasible for warp gate generators to produce a null beam - the two are opposites. Secondly, these enemies you are describing look very much like Necrons - if so, they will not use warp technology. It is anathema to them. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2357042 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Newtype Posted April 14, 2010 Author Share Posted April 14, 2010 Thank you for catching that Tyrak. I've made a change to better reflect Necron technology, and have gone throught it again for grammer. I hope I got everything. Till the next post. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2362257 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Newtype Posted April 1, 2011 Author Share Posted April 1, 2011 Good day all. Well it has been almost a year since I first posted my attampt at an IA. I have refined it more and even worked out what would be a detailed timeline of events in the history of my Chapter. I have now edited the IA by adding some new events and names to create a better narative flow. At least I hope so. Anyway for your consideration and evaluation. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2708533 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Newtype Posted April 9, 2011 Author Share Posted April 9, 2011 Good day all. I have edited my IA a little more and posted it bck at the start of the thread. Enjoy. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2717896 Share on other sites More sharing options...
JaM_TW Posted April 10, 2011 Share Posted April 10, 2011 Hi, Just red the whole thing (well, the first post) and I like it. For what it's worth: good job ! Probably too long for most though. :P Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2719479 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinzaren Posted April 13, 2011 Share Posted April 13, 2011 Just a quick note. This IA clocks in at just under 8,000 words, which is sadly too much for me to able to go over tonight. I will try to hit it tomorrow, but it is a big one. Quick skimming of it suggests that you could perhaps trim down some of the story elements and focus more about giving us more insight into what they are like. That said, I will try my hardest to read and give a thorough overview tomorrow. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/193375-it-black-razor-renegade-free-chapter/page/2/#findComment-2722312 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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