Blazing suns

[Lenios]

My DIY chapter is the blazing suns.

Their homeworld is blackreach, and they therefore have a low recruitment rate and have no active 6th, 7th or 9th companys because of this.

Their 8th company is all land speeder mounted apart for 1 assault squad. And they have an 11th company wich is comprised of all the chapter's dreadnoughts.

 

I cannot yet supply pictures of models, but here are some B&C SM Painter schemes.

http://i44.tinypic.com/2yoo2uh.jpg

Tactical marine

http://i44.tinypic.com/263x1tf.jpg

Tactical sarge

 

Thanks.

[Espada Azul]

Welcome to Liber! Let's see what you have for us today...

 

Hmm, you have a Chapter Name and Homeworld, but there's no real explanation what ties the Homeworld to the Chapter's supposed low numbers. Are they like the Crimson Fists, and were nearly annihilated recently? Or has the low numbers been always been endemic to them, much like DA Successor the Angels of Vengeance, due to battlefield attrition? Also, what is behind the extreme specialization of the 8th Company? Do they battle fast-moving enemies all of the time, like the Eldar?

 

A minor note -- Dreadnoughts are outside a Chapter's structure (though they do stay within the Companies they served with pre-internment), it would be odd to have a whole Company dedicated to them, especially when one considers that they spend most of their time in Stasis.

[Ferrata]

Depending on what you mean by a company of dreadnoughts, that seems like a massive number. I think 10 is about as high as you could go before you start thinking a chapter might be having a few too many. However, this could link nicely with low active numbers if the chapter has recently had some massive loses. A lot of their heroes died and have been dreadnoughted, however they haven't yet recruited Marines to replace them.

[Espada Azul]

Ferrata: That still would not explain the massive amount of Dreadnought chassis the Chapter would have had standing by to accept the 'massive casualties' you propose. :rolleyes:

[Ferrata]

True, but with what little information we have it could be easily worked into the story. How does any chapter have a spare dreadnought to place new dead heroes in? Do they replace older ones who have been deemed less important? Have older ones gone crazy and need replacing? Have older ones been killed and now been repaired and replaced? It could be the chapter has always had a larger number of dreadnoughts than average (say 10), but in the near destruction of the chapter, the ten got togethe and made a heroic last stand. They died to a man, but allowed enough time for the chapter to gather itself and win the day. Recovering the dreadnoughts, they have painstackingly repaired them and kept alive ten heroes for entombment within them (some medical machines required). In honour of the dreadnoughts last stand, they now call them a company :rolleyes:

[Octavulg]

Why do they have black booties?

[Espada Azul]

Octavulg: Chaos Black primer? :rolleyes:

 

*coughs*

 

In all seriousness though, we've only received the barest of information on the Chapter. We need more details really, before any of us can give observations to improve the Chapter.

[Ferrata]

Why do they have black booties?

Because they are made for walking :D I was actually going to ask the same question, feet should never be a different colour to the leg armour.

[Lenios]

After the assault on black reach, most of the human colonies were wiped out, so they have few operational companys.

It is chapter tradition to keep the dreads seperate from the main companys, but it is rare for them all to be sent out to battle together.

Boots: that's just the way I like the colours. :huh:

[Ferrata]

First up, I just clicked by Blackreach you mean the actual Blackreach from the starter set. That means you can't focus your chapter on that planet. This is an easy change, just call it anything else you want (Whitereach, Redreach, Black-out-of-reach).

 

They could recruit from else where unless they didn't want to.

 

Why is it a tradition? You can't just say "Oh, it is a tradition", it needs to be explained. Where did this tradition come from?

[Grey Hunter Ydalir]

The name used here is highly familliar...Blazing Sons

[ChaplainMathreyn]

I didnt read anything as to Why they have the name that they do, either...

 

Do they like fire? ... I think a speedy Chapter called the Blazing Sons, would be kinda cool... Blazing fast... For the Emperor, of course.... Ahem!

 

I also think it's Black Reach... Not Blackreach... But yeah, using a planet from the boxed set is kinda iffy.

 

Plus, I always imagined Dreadnaughts are still assigned to their Companies, because of the amount fo stuff that they can pass on, too... Not only do they have crazy power, but crazy experience, essentially... How is the best way to train the newly created Tactical squad? Lump them in with Veterans, who can not only teach them the Litany of Complaining About Them Youngins, but also how to fight, where to move, combat doctrine, 'You stick your head up now, you aren't going to have a head, son', sorta thing...

[moi_a_mania]

I've been blasted on other websites about my Marines that has caused me to rewrite them numerous times. The biggest challenge I've had is that my chapter is alot like yours in number - limited. So other players have suggested that how could I have so many dreadnaughts and not enough marines to fill out my companies.

 

Just scale back on the Dreads. I like your background fluff and anjoyed reading it. Take what we have to say to heart and make the necessary changes. We are actually trying to help you and not force you from the game. I have to admit that receiving constructive criticism whether it's in my painting, modelling, strategy or DIY chapters does make me a better player and I enjoy seeing others progress as well.

 

We are all learning from each other and that's what makes this hobby alot more fun than any thing else.

 

My two cents for what it's worth.

[Lenios]

A bit more Background is in order:

After the defeat of warbos Zanzag, Blackreach was liberated fron the orks.

Many gaurdsmen had earned the right to become part of the Astarates and so, sicarius left behind Scout Veteran Telion and a tactical Squad; The Thunderbolts. After the gaurd were inducted, the thunderbolts and Telion left, Leaving a force of battle ready Astarates in their wake, all under the command of Blazing suns Chapter Master Lenios. ;)

 

The high influx of Casualties from the ork assaults left many dreadnoughts, without enough thunderhawks to carry them all back to the strike cruisers :), they two were left with Lenios.

 

More soon ;)

[THE GHOMA]

A bit more Background is in order:

After the defeat of warbos Zanzag, Blackreach was liberated fron the orks.

Many gaurdsmen had earned the right to become part of the Astarates and so, sicarius left behind Scout Veteran Telion and a tactical Squad; The Thunderbolts. After the gaurd were inducted, the thunderbolts and Telion left, Leaving a force of battle ready Astarates in their wake, all under the command of Blazing suns Chapter Master Lenios. ;)

 

The high influx of Casualties from the ork assaults left many dreadnoughts, without enough thunderhawks to carry them all back to the strike cruisers :woot:, they two were left with Lenios.

 

More soon ;)

There are some slight problems with this statement. Firstly, you shouldn't base your chapter off of official events that happened, such as black reach. second, you should look into the creation of an Astartes because Guardsmen are a bit too old to become space marines. Some spell checking also helps.

 

My only opinion on the fluff itself is lack of creativity. Try to make your own home worlds, characters, origins, ect. Don't use official fluff as a crutch to base your chapter on.