Darkchild130 Posted September 10, 2011 Author Share Posted September 10, 2011 They are calm, they calmly killed their pdf support. :devil: Plus, if you remember from the start, the rules of engagement were to kill everyone, as no intel could say who was enemy or friend. Darkchild EDIT: this has had 50 more views since I put up the latest part, if you read it i'd appreciate feedback, positive or otherwise :) Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2872034 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gree Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 EDIT: this has had 50 more views since I put up the latest part, if you read it i'd appreciate feedback, positive or otherwise :) Darkchild Ask and ye shall recieve. I'm glad you got a new laptop. I'm quite impressed with this wrok so far. You show an admirably ruthless side to the Flesh Tearers that I like. Please do keep up. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2878345 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted September 18, 2011 Author Share Posted September 18, 2011 Thankyou, I will endeavour to keep it nasty til the end! If you read my other story id appreciate feedback on that too, its quite a bit different to this and im not sure I can pull it off. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2878367 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gree Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 Thankyou, I will endeavour to keep it nasty til the end! If you read my other story id appreciate feedback on that too, its quite a bit different to this and im not sure I can pull it off. Darkchild I've also taken the liberty of reviewing your story on Fanfiction.net as well. It's a rather slow site for reviewing to be honest. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2878372 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted September 18, 2011 Author Share Posted September 18, 2011 Yeah I noticed that. I need feedback to improve, so its nice to get any review at all! Thanks for putting the effort in. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2878379 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gree Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 Yeah I noticed that. I need feedback to improve, so its nice to get any review at all! Thanks for putting the effort in. Darkchild If you want to get reviews then write crossovers. I got 53 reviews just from posting two chapters of Switch. People love crossovers on that site. I remember in my early days of writing over forty thousand words in a story and getting not a single review. Just keep writing. Anyway I'll take a look at your assassin story on the same site. If you could go look at Sons of Orpheus at FF.net and review that. (Or any of my other 40k works) that would be helpful. I've been trying to get more feedback on that site. I don't really need it on my crossover stories or anime fanfics though. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2878387 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted September 18, 2011 Author Share Posted September 18, 2011 Will do mate, but its 0150 and im going to bed. Will read your stories tomorrow. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2878392 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whitefireinferno Posted September 20, 2011 Share Posted September 20, 2011 Darkchild I hate you for 2 reasons #1, You did not PM me that you had started writing again #2, And that I do not remember where I was Up too. And a small demi hate for reminding me my Drafts died with the old Computer. Oh and what's with the Smurf huh huh ^_^. Geeze has it been a year...already. I have read the Latest entry and it is grand. Will Start over and skim read until I hit parts I do not recall Keep it up. PS I do not want another year before the next update. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2880555 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted September 20, 2011 Author Share Posted September 20, 2011 Lol, I was unaware I had to pm people of my updates! Just read it from the start its better that way. Read my other story to, its new! Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2880748 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pulse Posted September 21, 2011 Share Posted September 21, 2011 Fantastic read as always, great to see your Flesh Tearers back from the dead, looking forward to more!! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2881452 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted September 22, 2011 Author Share Posted September 22, 2011 Glad you liked it. It might take me a couple of weeks to write the next bit as I'm going to be busy getting out of the army for a while, moving house, doing personal admin etc. but I will continue to write. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2882135 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pulse Posted September 30, 2011 Share Posted September 30, 2011 Glad you liked it. It might take me a couple of weeks to write the next bit as I'm going to be busy getting out of the army for a while, moving house, doing personal admin etc. but I will continue to write. Getting out the army, why? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2890090 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted October 1, 2011 Author Share Posted October 1, 2011 Anti piracy work pays better. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2890321 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pulse Posted October 4, 2011 Share Posted October 4, 2011 Anti piracy work pays better. :huh: Next part of the Flesh Tearers please, you have had long enough! :devil: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2892375 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted October 4, 2011 Author Share Posted October 4, 2011 sorry dude, i've written about 2 lines. Real life is getting in the way atm. I'm going to finish my Assassin story first because that is becoming really popular on Fanfiction.net for some reason, then I'll get back to the Flesh Tearers before starting my next "Ryanthis" story. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2892396 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ufthak Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 After months of absence, I got to read the latest part. Amazing as always Darkchild! Keep up the good work and don't leave us waiting so long! ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-2907970 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted February 28, 2012 Author Share Posted February 28, 2012 So my life has taken over from writing recently, but the battle for Ryanthis will continue, just not from the Flesh Tearer's point of view. I'm currently sitting in Srilanka at work, and have typed up a bit of the ongoing battle for Ryanthis which I will post as a new story. I will eventually get round to finishing this battle, but it's not top of my list of priorities atm. All I can say is, if you liked this, read my next story ATTRITION. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-3003336 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andrew J Posted March 1, 2012 Share Posted March 1, 2012 Darkchild love this story. You do a great job of description and action, as well as getting a great sense for the characters and their inner struggles. I will wait eagerly for next installment! Read Attrition too. I like the back story. Be safe over there! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-3005310 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkchild130 Posted March 9, 2012 Author Share Posted March 9, 2012 thankyou. I am thinking up ideas to end this story arc in a suitable fashion before moving onto other characters. Not sure what to do yet, but whatever happens its going to be bloody. Darkchild Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-3011958 Share on other sites More sharing options...
spu00sed Posted March 11, 2012 Share Posted March 11, 2012 Reread the whole thing and I love it. I like the description of the sang guard, reminds me of custodies. Fighting in perfect unison. The only part that reduced the immersion was the buddy pair part. I know it is a military term, but it doesn’t seem to fit the space marines (in my mind), something like brother pairs fits the brotherhood aspect better. Anyway, amazing read and highly descriptive and enjoyable. Write more! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/202113-flesh-tearers-assault-of-ryanthis/page/5/#findComment-3012852 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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