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Hi, I've been a lurker for quite awhile but never posted. Anyway I have been putting together a special character to lead my Space Marine Company or Chaos Warband (Khorne can just be so fun. ) and was just looking for some input.

 

 

 

Captain Atomos leads(or led) the first company of the Obsidian Shields chapter, which specializes in city fights and other close range encounters like ship bording. The crown jewel of the chapter is it's force of 50 elite terminator armored marines, armed with thunder hammers, storm shields and a fierce loyalty to their Captain.

 

When the time came to choose a new chapter master, Atomos was overlooked due to his hotheaded and reckless nature. This enraged him, causing him to give in to the violent temptations of Khorne and murder the new master. With the aid of his loyal terminators and several veteran and tactical marine squads Atomos quickly eliminated the other two companies present on the battle barge and plunged the ship into the warp.

 

 

 

Captain Atomos (Marine): 250 points

 

Stats: WS 6, BS 5, S4, T5, W3, I5, A3, L10, Sv 2+

 

Wargear: Terminator Armor, Relic Blade, Bulwark of Eternity.

 

Bulwark of Eternity: An ancient Storm Shield that dates back to the dark age of technology. Functions like a normal storm shield but at the start of each of the controlling player's turn Atomos has the option to overcharge the shield and take a defensive stance, boosting the shields effectiveness to 2++ until the beginning of his next turn. While defensive Atomos moves as if in difficult terrain and acts in close combat at I1 and -1A.

 

Unbreakable: When charged Atomos will plant his feet and raise his shield in defiance. Models charging Atomos gain no bonus for charging, as if he had defensive grenades.

 

Fearless: Atomos is fearless.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Atomos the Unbreakable (Chaos): 300 points

 

Stats: WS 7, BS 5, S4, T5, W3, I5, A4, L10, Sv 2+

 

Wargear: Terminator Armor, Bloodforged Blade (counts as Relic Blade that re-rolls failed to wound rolls), Bulwark of Eternity, Mark of Khorne (included).

 

Bulwark of Eternity: An ancient Storm Shield that dates back to the dark age of technology. Functions like a normal storm shield but at the start of each of the controlling player's turn Atomos has the option to overcharge the shield and take a defensive stance, boosting the shields effectiveness to 2++ until the beginning of his next turn. While defensive Atomos moves as if in difficult terrain and acts in close combat at I1 and -1A.

 

Unbreakable: When charged Atomos will plant his feet and raise his shield in defiance. Models charging Atomos gain no bonus for charging, as if he had defensive grenades.

 

Champion of Khorne: If a squad is wiped out or falls back due to losses inflicted by Atomos alone roll for a sweeping advance. If a sweeping advance roll is won Atomos has done well enough in combat to earn the favor of Khorne, granting him +1 wound (to a max of 10). However if combat is lost Khorne punishes him for his failure and deals him 1 wound after combat has been resolved. (Note that even if a unit that has lost combat against Atomos is fearless, roll a morale test and (if failed) a fall back roll, but do not actualy move the models. Also note that even if Atomos rolls high enough to make a sweeping advance, it is never made. Atomos can only consolidate due to his terminator armor.)

 

Solo Fighter: Atomos may not join a squad under any circumstances. He wishes that the glory be his and his alone.

 

Fearless: Atomos is Fearless.

 

 

I'm sorry that the back story isn't exactly detailed, I haven't worked it out fully yet. But please, post any comments of questions you might have and lastly, thanks for reading!