New Chapter Idea

[Jimmydafrog]

Son’s of Thor Chapter

 

Chapter Name: Son’s of Thor chapter

Chapter Founding: Founded as part of the 6th founding

Original founding chapter: unknown

Home world: Jotnar, in the Segmentum Obscurus

Main colours: dark grey/ black camouflage with purple trim

Speciality: assault of enemy strong points and dug-in positions

Battle cry: Bring The Thunder / For the Ancestors

Estimated strength: 1,000 active marines 500 marines in hibernation (stasis)

Fortress monastery: mobile asteroid base Odin

 

Combat doctrine

 

The son’s of Thor chapter focus on the art of forcing enemy strong points and dug-in positions, using a larger than average number of dreadnoughts (ironclad) and infantry support.

 

Background

 

Originally designated to be an imperial guard regiment named in honour of Sebastian Thor a mistake at the Sortaminium on high terra caused by a malfunctioning servitor which was supposed to be recording theoretical designs for an eye of terror sentinel base, caused the construction of a new mobile space fortress and chapter of space marines.

 

The space fortress called Odin was constructed from a mostly hollowed out asteroid orbiting Saturn and give ten plasma-warp cores as well as a devastating arsenal of lance banks and torpedo tubes also the vessel has its own repair and ammunition factoriums onboard which keeps the marines onboard fully supplied, the fortress was also equipped with a rare machine spirit that is more akin to an AI, and when the base was completed it measured some six kilometres in length. The chapter was created and then led by Vladimir of Valhalla whom given the extent of the new fortress was entrusted with fifty dreadnought variants as well as large numbers of transport vehicles and battle tanks, because of the large number of vehicles at his disposal Vladimir recruited a further five-hundred marine scouts to be used as vehicle crew, but when the Mechanicum learned that there precious machines were being operated by chapter noobites they informed the Inquisition of the Son’s of Thor’s disregard for the Codex Astartes.

 

The chapter was already under watch from the Inquisition due to the chapters dubious founding and unknown Gene-seed, so the entire chapter was ordered to return to Holy Terra and answer to the High Lords, it was here that the Son’s of Thor convinced the High Lords and Inquisition of their innocence and lack of corruption and therefore came to the arrangement that five hundred of the battle brothers would be interned in the stasis chamber Sokvabek onboard Odin and released from stasis only as chapter brothers fell or if the Inquisition called upon them.

 

Many chapter brothers including Vladimir believed that the Mechanicum was simply hoping that the chapter would be dissolved so that they could examine Odin and its automated factoriums and other rare systems this is why the chapter now has an agitated relationship with the Mechanicum, and as such the chapter now only has the Dreadnoughts and heavy armour it has in Odin to call upon in battle, hence the chapters preferred infantry tactics.

 

 

ok peoples what do you think for my first effort at a creation story :)

[Shinzaren]

The space fortress called Odin was constructed from a mostly hollowed out asteroid orbiting Saturn and give ten plasma-warp cores as well as a devastating arsenal of lance banks and torpedo tubes also the vessel has its own repair and ammunition factoriums onboard which keeps the marines onboard fully supplied, the fortress was also equipped with a rare machine spirit that is more akin to an AI, and when the base was completed it measured some six kilometres in length. The chapter was created and then led by Vladimir of Valhalla whom given the extent of the new fortress was entrusted with fifty dreadnought variants as well as large numbers of transport vehicles and battle tanks, because of the large number of vehicles at his disposal Vladimir recruited a further five-hundred marine scouts to be used as vehicle crew, but when the Mechanicum learned that there precious machines were being operated by chapter noobites they informed the Inquisition of the Son’s of Thor’s disregard for the Codex Astartes

 

This entire paragraph reads as a very clear and unvarnished version of M.I.S.S. (Me? I'm So Super.) The whole idea of them having such a ridiculously awesome fortress and all the Dreadnoughts and all the extra marines, etc etc. Too cool for this school I say.

[Chapter Master Ignis Domus]

Where did the scouts come from? Also, if I remember correctly, stasis is an incredibly rare technology. I don't think the battle-brothers would let the inquisition use the scouts as their personal death brigade. The idea sounds good, although scouts pilot vehicles all the time(LS Storm, thunderhawks, starships, etc.). Maybe a bit more detail on the regular marines. I might blame the error on an munitorum scribe. They seem more likely to make mistakes(read fifteen hours in the guard omnibus).

 

Edit: Not even the First Founding Chapters have that many dreadnoughts. I would expand on the reason they have sommany vehicles.

[Myxx]

Hollow asteroid is more of a DA idea...

[Thor Lokiago]

Definately very Dark Angels. The Rock (Dark Angel's HQ) is also an asteroid, but you've made it sound as though the Odin could out gun The Rock in lmost every way. That shouldn't happen. If you've got more of something than a Liegon chapter, you'd better have a very good reason. I personally love Norse mythos and though Thor is all kinds of badass, you gotta limit emin this universe. Generally, dreadnaughts are hero es that are mortally wounded beyond the ability to survive or fight on their own. Having that many right from the chapter's inception is just a bit much. I would also choose on wether or not you want to be a footslogging chapter (focusing on your actual marines) or a more mechanicaly inclined chapter (focusing on Drednaughts, tanks, bikes and whatnot). As far as throwing 500 marines into stasis, thats a lot of stasis pods. More likely the chapter just wouldn't be able to recuit until the numbers were properly balanced out.

 

Just a few thoughts.

[soddinnutter]

It would take more than one servitor with its head screwed on backwards to cause this sort of screw up.

 

For one thing the only people who can train a space marine are other space marine. Who else is going to have the experience of sending them selves into a coma as an act of will? who else can train someone to use a brain implant to go for 6 months with out sleep? who else can train someone to brethe under water?

 

The chapter brought in to train would notice something ammiss. The Mecahnicus does not just hand out warp-drives and plasma reactors without tripple checking with Mars (or nearest major Forge World).

 

If they were destined to be a Guard Regiment then Vladimir of Valhalla would be as human as the day he was born and as a mere mortal could never command the respect of a near immortal Astartes.

 

An A.I. is a big Techno-heresy. one of the big commandments of the Mechanicus since well before the Age of Strife has always been 'Suffer not the machine that thinks like a man'. It harkens beck to the days when the 'Men of Iron (Robots)' did war upon the 'Men of Stone (humans)' and all creation was burned.

 

stasis is a no. the machanicus build stasis toumbs about as quickly as they build Dreadnaughts. cryogenic coffins are more likely. not frozen in time, just frozen in ice.

 

Also the Inquisition would not drag suspected heretics to Holy Terra or anywhere near for trial. quite the reverse. the whole point of the Sol system being the most fortified place in the galaxy is to keep the heretics out.

[Argon]

Chapter Name: Son’s of Thor chapter

 

 

This is a major pet peeve of mine.

 

Apostrophes do not work that way. You must cease your errant ways, or the Ordo Grammaticus will pay you a visit. Trust me, you don't want us at your doorstep.

 

 

 

Estimated strength: 1,000 active marines 500 marines in hibernation (stasis)

 

Chapters are powerful entities. If you told someone "Yeah, we've got like half a Chapter on standby", you'd have an Inquisitor in your face.

 

 

Originally designated to be an imperial guard regiment named in honour of Sebastian Thor a mistake at the Sortaminium on high terra caused by a malfunctioning servitor which was supposed to be recording theoretical designs for an eye of terror sentinel base, caused the construction of a new mobile space fortress and chapter of space marines.

 

The Administratum might be big and prone to mistakes, but this just wouldn't happen.

 

 

The space fortress called Odin was constructed from a mostly hollowed out asteroid orbiting Saturn and give ten plasma-warp cores as well as a devastating arsenal of lance banks and torpedo tubes also the vessel has its own repair and ammunition factoriums onboard which keeps the marines onboard fully supplied

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So they're more heavily armed than an Imperial Navy patrol (which is a huge no) and can self-repair and generate ammunition. Also, it's full of Astartes, which are amazingly good at boarding actions.

 

the fortress was also equipped with a rare machine spirit that is more akin to an AI

and when the base was completed it measured some six kilometres in length. The chapter was created and then led by Vladimir of Valhalla whom given the extent of the new fortress was entrusted with fifty dreadnought variants as well as large numbers of transport vehicles and battle tanks, because of the large number of vehicles at his disposal

Vladimir recruited a further five-hundred marine scouts to be used as vehicle crew

 

Yeah, the Mechanicus would have you killed for having an AI.

 

when the Mechanicum learned that there precious machines were being operated by chapter noobites they informed the Inquisition of the Son’s of Thor’s disregard for the Codex Astartes.

 

It's "neophytes".

 

Also, only full Space Marines can crew vehicles, so the Mechanicus would have a bit of a point. While they were at it, the Odin would probably be mentioned here.

 

The chapter was already under watch from the Inquisition due to the chapters dubious founding and unknown Gene-seed, so the entire chapter was ordered to return to Holy Terra and answer to the High Lords

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You don't testify to the High Lords of Terra, you testify to the Inquisitor.

 

 

Many chapter brothers including Vladimir believed that the Mechanicum was simply hoping that the chapter would be dissolved so that they could examine Odin and its automated factoriums and other rare systems this is why the chapter now has an agitated relationship with the Mechanicum, and as such the chapter now only has the Dreadnoughts and heavy armour it has in Odin to call upon in battle, hence the chapters preferred infantry tactics.

 

The cogboys could just stop supplying you, you know. There's 999 other chapters out there, and they need supplies just as badly, if not more so, than your guys do.

[Shinzaren]

Many chapter brothers including Vladimir believed that the Mechanicum was simply hoping that the chapter would be dissolved so that they could examine Odin and its automated factoriums and other rare systems this is why the chapter now has an agitated relationship with the Mechanicum, and as such the chapter now only has the Dreadnoughts and heavy armour it has in Odin to call upon in battle, hence the chapters preferred infantry tactics.

 

Sooo, the AM didn't build the Odin? Who the heck did? Where did this fledgling chapter, who doesn't have the might and history of the Legions, gain control of this magnificent star fortress of punishment and destruction? Also, why is the Odin so central to your ideas? It tells me nothing of WHO your marines are, just that they have a big OP fortress.

[Shadey]

For what it's worth, i never got the impression that his Odin was a bigger badder version of the Dark Angels homebase. It does help however, that the Rock has never really been quantified, and neither has Odin for the most, it was just described as 'devastating arsenal of lance banks and torpedo tubes' which is eminently acceptable, well apart from the AI which is another issue.

 

The Ultramarines have 26 dreadnoughts. In theory a chapter could perhaps have more but only if they really focused on dreads at the expense of other vehicles. I would say 26 and ideally a few less would be your upper limit.

 

Jimmy, your article isn't bad but it does have a few inconsistencies with the background that have been mentioned. It just requires a bit more work.

[Argon]

For what it's worth, i never got the impression that his Odin was a bigger badder version of the Dark Angels homebase. It does help however, that the Rock has never really been quantified, and neither has Odin for the most, it was just described as 'devastating arsenal of lance banks and torpedo tubes' which is eminently acceptable, well apart from the AI which is another issue.

 

The Ultramarines have 26 dreadnoughts. In theory a chapter could perhaps have more but only if they really focused on dreads at the expense of other vehicles. I would say 26 and ideally a few less would be your upper limit.

 

Jimmy, your article isn't bad but it does have a few inconsistencies with the background that have been mentioned. It just requires a bit more work.

 

The lances are actually a problem. The reason Astartes ships don't have them is that it upsets the balance of power. If we did have lances on our ships, then we could take out capital ships like they were nothing. If a chapter went traitor, then, the Imperium would be hard pressed to stop them.