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Pandora's End


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Hooray! Death to the Xenos!

 

Although one mistake:

Then they are a hybrid of Xenos and Malleus.

Malleus means hammer, though I think I see where the problem is:

Ordo Hereticus: Order of the Heretics, kills Heretics

Ordo Xenos: Order of the Sliens, kills Aliens

Ordo Malleus: Order of the Hammer, kills Daemons

 

Also, did you really have to destroy Terra?

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Malleus means hammer, though I think I see where the problem is:

Ordo Hereticus: Order of the Heretics, kills Heretics

Ordo Xenos: Order of the Sliens, kills Aliens

Ordo Malleus: Order of the Hammer, kills Daemons

 

Also, did you really have to destroy Terra?

 

Ah, never did quite understand the name. What's the High Imperial name for Daemon?

 

Also, Earth is just the Earth from the Avatar universe, it's mentioned later on as sharing Terra's ancestral name, nothing more.

 

Glad you both enjoyed it though

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I admit I felt a sadistic glee at reading the story. (Goddamn Hollywood liberals who think the lives of plants and animals, are more valuable than that of human beings.) I advise you to proofread your work before posting, to avoid errors like this:

The great clans had scattered before them, the greatest of their warriors effortlessly slain the automata.

I think you meant "The great clans had scattered before them, the greatest of their warriors effortlessly slain by the automata."

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I admit I felt a sadistic glee at reading the story. (Goddamn Hollywood liberals who think the lives of plants and animals, are more valuable than that of human beings.) I advise you to proofread your work before posting, to avoid errors like this:
The great clans had scattered before them, the greatest of their warriors effortlessly slain the automata.

I think you meant "The great clans had scattered before them, the greatest of their warriors effortlessly slain by the automata."

 

I do every chance I get, but proof reading has always been a long time weakness. Thanks for pointing the error out though, let me know if you see any more.

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