Loken of the 10th Posted December 16, 2010 Share Posted December 16, 2010 I will actually use the Space Wolves Codex for them. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Access Code____________**************72726355390 Access Granted Search Code: Bushi ..... ....... ..... ....Search Completed. File Found. The Bushi Bushi Daimyo Founding The Bushi is a older Chapter, part of the 11th Founding. They are proud Sons of Dorn being able to trace their heritage back to Primarch Rogal Dorn. But they like there Brothers in the Black Templars are Codex Divergent. Their homeworld is a feudal world known Homyasha in the Galactic North near the Ghoul Stars. They were created in response to all the Ork infested planets in the sector. The Imperial Fists gave the honour of a founding to the 4th company Captain, who took a strike cruiser with a training cadre to a small planet just outside the Ghoul Stars. Stopping on the word of the Librarian. The planets inhabitants are not the most physically intimidating in fact they are quite small the average height being listed at a 1.65 meters and an average weight of 54 kilograms. At first Captain Johan Steppen was reluctant to use the population of Homyasha. But Codicier Hankin told him that The Emperors Tarot showed great and promising warriors defending this planet. So when Johan, Hankin and Chaplain Restan went to meet with the Lords of the planet they saw a proud people that carried weapons with them at almost all times though the weapons looked flimsy. When the arrived at the Emperors palace the Emperor bowed before the Imperial Fists Captain, Pledging fealty to the Imperium. Upon hearing this the Imperial Fists made planetfall to begin finding suitable candidates and learning about the culture. The warriors of Homyasha had a warriors code known as Bushi. They also quickly learned the teachings Rhetoricus. The Fists also learned some of the warriors customs that they called themselves saburai. How they adopted names as to never bring shame or sadness to there families. The Fists adopted many of these customs as they changed from Imperial Fists into The Bushi. Johan became Shogun Aramisu Yokanatsu the 1st. There were many title changes Captains became Daimyos, Chaplains Ruroni and Librarians became known as Kannushi. Planet W.I.P. Organization The Bushi follow the standard 10 Company Codex layout 1st company being all veterans but all other companies are considered battle companies as they all maintain there own armoury and recruitment. Squads will often have up to 15 men when they start out but as they go into battle and lose brothers they do not become replaced the brothers progress in ranks. If almost a whole squad is eliminated with only one brother surviving the become Ronin attempting to regain the honor of the squad. Combat Doctirine With each Company being autonomous they all have there own tactics. Beliefs W.I.P. Gene-seed The Bushi are of Imperial Fist gene-seed thus they suffer the same gene problems as the Fists. Battle-Cry Often the the battle cries are in the native language How does it look so far? Nothing that makes them seem overpowered? I probably haven't given enough info yet but just incase. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
StGene Posted December 16, 2010 Share Posted December 16, 2010 Nothing seems out of place to me besides the name and the color scheme. It's not a good idea to name a Loyalist Chapter, "X Legion", or even, "Legion of X", because; 1. It brings back memories of the time before the Horus Heresy (and the Heresy itself). The Space Marine Legions were broken up into Chapters specifically to prevent such a terrible event from ever happening again; all that power and loyalty concentrated onto one man made the results of corruption all the more devastating. If a Chapter started calling itself a Legion, the Administratum, Ecclesiarchy, and Ordo Hereticus would suddenly become very concerned/angry/inquisitive. 2. The First Founding Chapters (i.e., the Ultramarines, Blood Angels, Salamanders, Iron Hands, Imperial Fists, Dark Angels, Space Wolves, Raven Guard, and the White Scars) would probably also take offense. And having all of the above angry at you would result in your Chapter getting fvcked up in a very bad way. As far as the color scheme is concerned, keep it simple. You have nine different colors on one poor Marine. That aside, good work! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2591447 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chapter Master Ignis Domus Posted December 16, 2010 Share Posted December 16, 2010 Founding The Imperial Fists gave the honour of a founding to the 4th company Captain, who took a battle barge and strike cruiser with some equipment to A small planet just outside the Ghoul Stars. Stoppingon the word of the Librarian. Two things. The captain wouldn't bring his whole company and a strike cruiser. He, and a small cadre of veterans would be sent to train the marines of the new chapter. Mars would provide the equipment for the new chapter. And what do you mean by the librarian's planet? I assume you don'tmean the planet of the sorcerers. <_< They quickly learned that the culture is quite similar to an ancient Terran culture in Asia. Skip this. Johan became Shogun Aramisu Yokanatsu the 1st. Nice idea. I like it. The Bushi follow the standard 10 Company Codex layout 1st company being all veterans but all other companies are considered battle companies as they all maintain there own armoury and recruitment. Squads will often have up to 15 men when they start out but as they go into battle and lose brothers they do not become replaced the brothers progress in ranks. If almost a whole squad is eliminated with only one brother surviving the become Ronin attempting to regain the honor of the squad. THis doesn't seem divergent enough to truly be called codex divergent. Combat Doctirine With each Company being autonomous they all have there own tactics. If so, then go into detail about those tactics. Gene-seed The Bushi are of Imperial Fist gene-seed thus they suffer the same gene problems as the Fists. Maybe explain those. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2591489 Share on other sites More sharing options...
NightrawenII Posted December 17, 2010 Share Posted December 17, 2010 *Listening to the Octavulg's delicious cries of agony* ;) Founding ... who took a battle barge and strike cruiser with some equipment to A small planet just outside the Ghoul Stars. Battle Barge is very valuable asset, it is unlikely that Imperial Fists will give it to the fledgeling Chapter. When the arrived at the Emperors palace the Emperor bowed before the Imperial Fists Captain, Pledging fealty to the Imperium. I would leave the word "Emperor" out of this. It's confusing. +++ To be honest, I'm not great fan of theme-hammer into reader's face. Subtle hints work far better, imho. The Imperial Fists gave the honour of a founding to the 4th company Captain, who took a battle barge and strike cruiser with some equipment to A small planet just outside the Ghoul Stars. Stoppingon the word of the Librarian. Two things. The captain wouldn't bring his whole company and a strike cruiser. He, and a small cadre of veterans would be sent to train the marines of the new chapter. Mars would provide the equipment for the new chapter. And what do you mean by the librarian's planet? I assume you don'tmean the planet of the sorcerers. :) If I understand it correctly, the captain was stopped by the Librarian. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2591803 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chapter Master Ignis Domus Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 Sorry, I read that wrong. Where did I get Librarian's Planet from? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2592476 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loken of the 10th Posted December 18, 2010 Author Share Posted December 18, 2010 Founding The Imperial Fists gave the honour of a founding to the 4th company Captain, who took a battle barge and strike cruiser with some equipment to A small planet just outside the Ghoul Stars. Stoppingon the word of the Librarian. Two things. The captain wouldn't bring his whole company and a strike cruiser. He, and a small cadre of veterans would be sent to train the marines of the new chapter. Mars would provide the equipment for the new chapter. And what do you mean by the librarian's planet? I assume you don'tmean the planet of the sorcerers. They quickly learned that the culture is quite similar to an ancient Terran culture in Asia. Skip this. Johan became Shogun Aramisu Yokanatsu the 1st. Nice idea. I like it. The Bushi follow the standard 10 Company Codex layout 1st company being all veterans but all other companies are considered battle companies as they all maintain there own armoury and recruitment. Squads will often have up to 15 men when they start out but as they go into battle and lose brothers they do not become replaced the brothers progress in ranks. If almost a whole squad is eliminated with only one brother surviving the become Ronin attempting to regain the honor of the squad. THis doesn't seem divergent enough to truly be called codex divergent. Combat Doctirine With each Company being autonomous they all have there own tactics. If so, then go into detail about those tactics. Gene-seed The Bushi are of Imperial Fist gene-seed thus they suffer the same gene problems as the Fists. Maybe explain those. 1. I didnt mean to imply he took the whole company i figured more along the lines of one of each squad other then Tacs i figured like 2-3 tac squads 2. No what I intended was the Captain wanted to find a different planet but the Librarian said to stop there 3. done 4. Thanks I actually got that from the Samurai as they often did actually change there names. 5. There is more I'm not completely done with this 6 I definitely well once i figure them out 7 I will I just couldn't remember them at the time Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2592524 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grey Hunter Ydalir Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 1. I didnt mean to imply he took the whole company i figured more along the lines of one of each squad other then Tacs i figured like 2-3 tac squads 3 tactical squads is 30% of an entire company, which is a rather heavy hit to a numerically small special forces group like the Astartes. Perhaps ten to fifteen marines selected by the captain at top whack would be my opinion. That said, in all honesty you don't need to mention how many of them there are, that's like naming each company captain, it's needless, boring and clogs the IA with useless info. Just say 'the training cadre'. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2592755 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinzaren Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 **WHABAM!!!** The sledgehammer of over theming strikes a decisive critical blow! Kidding aside, perhaps a BIT more subtlety. The Bushi, the Asian influences, the names; everything screams: "I AM SAMURAI!!!" Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2592917 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Firenze Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 Hmm. A good first start, but as said above, the Samurai theme is very exaggerated. Tone it down a little I would say, and maybe add in other subtle hints of other cultures. The other niggle is the amount of recourses given to them at their founding. Only about one squads worth is really needed. Other than that, I do like this IA idea, and the very brave, yet awesome, colour scheme :). Keep it up! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2592930 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loken of the 10th Posted December 18, 2010 Author Share Posted December 18, 2010 Well the thing with the blue robe and cape thats not really be that its gonna be like strips of cloth over the armour Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/217279-ia-the-bushi/#findComment-2592990 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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