Dosjetka Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 Hello all, Just a quick draft with the basic ideas I have for my DIY Chapter. I know that there isn't much to comment on but any C&C would be great :huh: Cheers, Ludovic ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Gene-seed: Ultramarine. Founding: 5th Founding (around 400.M32) Guardians of the Kalathite Flaw, a smal area in the Segmentum Pacificus. Were sent there to purge of the taint of Chaos and xenos, along with other Chapters and some IG regiments. When the Flaw was purged, the Iron Sentinels claimed the area as their own domain. The request was granted, the Sentinels swearing that they would protect their domain, no matter what. Recruit from within the Flaw, though the aspirants have to pass many tests to check their strength of body, mind and soul and to make sure that they are uncorrupted in any form. They do not posess a home planet. Instead The Custodian, one of the Chapter's two Battle-Barges, acts as their Fortress-Monastery. Their belief in Guilliman's teachings (Codex Astartes) is incredibly strong, believing Guilliman to be the greatest of Primarchs and his teachings to be sacred (this is due to their parent Chapter's own beliefs, which were passed down to the Iron Sentinels during the recruitment and training of the first batch of recruits). Their hate towards Chaos, especially the Emperor's Children Legion (their Primarch killed Guilliman), has no bounds and they will imediately investigate any rumour talking of the presence of Chaos forces in their vincity, be they in the Kalathite Flaw or in the far reaches of the Halo Stars in the Ultima Segmentum (this stems from the fact that their parent Chapter was utterly destroyed by a Chaos raiding force). They know that they are not able to destroy all Chaos forces, so usually only concentrate on utterly destroying one warband, before moving on to the next. The Chapter is roughly split into 4 parts, each having at it's core a Battle Company. The rest of the force is drawn from the 1st and 10th Company, the Chapter Arsenal and the Reserve Companies. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
SpecialIssue Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 Hmmm... needs more flavor, a bit bland, but hey, its early days yet. What is this chapter's theme? Overarching theme that identifies/sets them apart from every other traitor, daemon and xenos hating chapter? Their mood, outlook and collective choler? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2748874 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ecritter Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 Where to start <_< Geneseed: I say make your own UM successor to be and offshoot from .... there are hundreds of them after all. And it gives you more freedom. Founding: How early is early? The name "Kalathite Flaw" just doesn't sound right to me ... but that's just opinion. SM Chapter created to clear one area of space seems a bit off too. Fortress Monastery ... in a fleet chapter isn't it normally a single Battlebarge? Guilliman isn't dead !! Don't really like the color scheme too. So lets see that leaves .... the name Iron Sentinels, sounds good to me. :rolleyes: Hope that helps at least a little. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2748983 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dosjetka Posted May 6, 2011 Author Share Posted May 6, 2011 Hope that helps at least a little. Well, it has, as always Ecritter :) Cheers for poping by! To be honest, I just threw the stuff down without much thought and so the refining process will begin on Monday! Ludovic Edit: @ Special Ammo: Thanks for the comments. And yes they are a bit bland, but they're Vanilla Marines! What more do you want? :D Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2749089 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ecritter Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 Always remember, tis easier to tear someone else's ideas apart then to have ideas of your own. If that isn't quoatable I don't know what is. :D Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2749092 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heru Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 On the colour scheme, if you are going to do a split scheme commit to either quartered or halved, don't try to do both it looks haphazard. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2749604 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother-Sergeant Bohemond Posted May 7, 2011 Share Posted May 7, 2011 Yea, the Fortress-Monastery is on one Battle-barge for Fleet based chapters, except for a few that happen to have giant space vessels in their fleet (see: DA and IF) Why do they rever Guilliman so much?? Is it due to their first Chapter-Master? or a vision their chplain had or what? I understand why they hate the EC, but why is their so much more reverence for Gulliman than someofhis other descenedents. And what caused this incurable hatred for Chaos and traitor legions, most loyalists hate Chaos, but these guys seem to hate them more, like Ecritters sons hat Orks. Name: I like it. Soooo, are they Gulliman lineage through Nova's or some other chjapter, like, say the Praetors, genesis, Black Consuls, or have they somehow misplaced their documents?? And I also agree with the blandness, what sets them out (if anything), do they have a dirty secret? Any mass betrayels to Chaos?? Cheers, Boh Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2749744 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ace Debonair Posted May 7, 2011 Share Posted May 7, 2011 Hello all, Just a quick draft with the basic ideas I have for my DIY Chapter. I know that there isn't much to comment on but any C&C would be great Right then. Let's see what we have here. :D Founding: Early Founding (?) I reccomend the fifth founding, just because I can't think of any DIY 5th founding chapters off the top of my head. :P Guardians of the Kalathite Flaw, a smal area in the Segmentum Pacificus. Were sent there to purge of the taint of Chaos and xenos, along with other Chapters and some IG regiments. When the Flaw was purged, the Iron Sentinels claimed the area as their own domain. The request was granted, the Sentinels swearing that they would protect their domain, no matter what. Recruit from within the Flaw, though the aspirants have to pass many tests to check their strength of body, mind and soul and to make sure that they are uncorrupted in any form. Interesting name for an area of space. I take it it's a pretty unusual place. What sort of enemies do your Chapter come up against there? Their hate towards Chaos, especially the Emperor's Children Legion (their Primarch killed Guilliman), has no bounds and they will imediately investigate any rumour talking of the presence of Chaos forces in their vincity, be they in the Kalathite Flaw or in the far reaches of the Halo Stars in the Ultima Segmentum. Fair enough. Well, overall, it's not a bad start. I don't really get a sense of personality from the Chapter, though. What are their marines like? How do the IS view other Imperial Factions - do they have any problems with Inquisitors or AdMech, or even other Chapters? The colour scheme would be fine if the backpack colours were switched around, I think. ^_^ Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2750084 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dosjetka Posted May 8, 2011 Author Share Posted May 8, 2011 Ecritter: Very true ;) Heru: Cheers for the colour scheme! I'll keep that in mind :) Bohemond: Cheers for the C&C! I'll have a proper reply for you tomorrow! :) Ace: Cheers for popping by Ace :) As for the Founding, I think that's a great idea :tu: (I'll develop on that more tomorrow) Again, thank you all for your help! Ludovic Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2750896 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dosjetka Posted May 9, 2011 Author Share Posted May 9, 2011 Hi all, Well, just before I rush off to class, I've been able to add/change a few things above. Any C&C on it would be great :lol: Ludovic Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2751764 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yaj Posted May 9, 2011 Share Posted May 9, 2011 Well since you were kind enough to comment on my IA. 'Kalathite Flaw' is a fantastic name. I get the sense that this particular region of space has always been full of primitive beliefs and generally superstious populaces and if this is the case I would like to know how it got like this. Is it possible as with old medival maps 'here be dragons' that the area has always had that reputation and that most nearby systems decided to keep to there ignorance rather than seek the truth and allow it to become a den of scum. I am very interested in what you come up with for this, I say again, fanstasticaly named region. I'm not certain on the hatred of the Emperors Children being solely due to the fact that Fulgrim slew Guiliman (or did he?). I would suggest that you could have a number of Iron Sentinels being captured by a warband of the Emperors Children and horribly mutliated before being rescued/avenged. That's all I've got for now. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2752259 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dosjetka Posted May 10, 2011 Author Share Posted May 10, 2011 Hum.. Ok, well the whole "We hate EC's" thing is being dropped for the moment. I'm kind of "meh" about the idea now, but it may be re-introduced later on. As for the Kalathite Flaw, I'll be writing something up about it later on today. Cheers for the C&C Yaj :D Ludovic Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2753042 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Captain Forcystus Posted May 10, 2011 Share Posted May 10, 2011 Not a whole lot to say just yet as there isnt alot there just yet but I like what I see so far especially the colorscheme. Say what they will about black and white, but they just work well together. Not to mention it's always cool to see more proud sons of Guilliman. I'll be keeping an eye on this one and say more once there is more for me to comment on Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2753052 Share on other sites More sharing options...
NightrawenII Posted May 10, 2011 Share Posted May 10, 2011 I'm just passing nearby... :lol: The Chapter is roughly split into 5 parts, each having at it's core a Battle Company. I'm not sure, the codex Chapter has 4 Battle Companies. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2753123 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dosjetka Posted May 10, 2011 Author Share Posted May 10, 2011 The Chapter is roughly split into 5 parts, each having at it's core a Battle Company. I'm not sure, the codex Chapter has 4 Battle Companies. Woops! I thought that I'd corrected that :) Anyway, thanks for pointing it out :P Ludovic Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/229170-iron-sentinels/#findComment-2753177 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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