The_son_of_Dorn Posted June 21, 2011 Share Posted June 21, 2011 Hey Guys I write little Stories on the side when I get bored (have wrote a few but have never posted because of fear they will get torn to shreds, I know this is how you get better at writing but meh I always get bored and side tracked and never finish them off) so here is my solid attempt to try and write a novel and not FAIL after the first few days Colour schemes for the 5 chapters involved http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/StoneWatchers-IF.jpg Stone Sentinels (Imperial Fist Gene seed) http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/SteelMasks-IH.jpg Steel Masks (Iron hands Gene seed but actually branch from the Sons of Medusa faction) http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/ScionsofJupiter-UM.jpg Scions of Jupiter (Ultrmarines Gene Seed) http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/KnightsWatch-DA.jpg Knights Watch (Dark Angel Gene Seed) http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/JadedBloods-BA.jpg last but not least the Jaded Bloods (Blood Angels Gene Seed) I have yet to decide if I shall make my chapters successors of the original Legions (apart from the steel masks) more like successors of successor chapters. But there are the coloru schemes, hope you like em. ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_son_of_Dorn Posted June 22, 2011 Author Share Posted June 22, 2011 no comments, awww ;) oh well :( Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800022 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arkangilos Posted June 22, 2011 Share Posted June 22, 2011 Looks good :D Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800176 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinzaren Posted June 22, 2011 Share Posted June 22, 2011 It depends on what you want comments on. It's hard for people to comment when they don't know anything about the Chapter. All we can say is whether we like a color scheme or not, and that doesn't real do anything for anyone. If you'd like more feedback, we need to see some of these short stories, or an IA for the Chapters, or something. Otherwise they just look like marines :D I have yet to decide if I shall make my chapters successors of the original Legions (apart from the steel masks) more like successors of successor chapters. It is more common and more likely that they would be successors of successors, since the First Founding guys have already all made a bunch of chapters. They are probably getting sick of having to constantly send off their veterans to train new chapters. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800179 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Octavulg Posted June 22, 2011 Share Posted June 22, 2011 The Stone Watchers: so they watch stone, eh? Sounds riveting. ;) Steel Masks: nice enough. Scions of Jupiter: having feet that are brighter than the legs tends to look weird. I'd recommend picking either the green or the brown. Knights Watch: first, don't you mean Knight's or Knights'? Second, there's already an official chapter called the Night Watch. Third, the gold collar really detracts from the scheme, IMO. Jaded Bloods: nice scheme, terrible name. At best, they sound like extras in Planescape Torment or a mid-nineteenth century crime film. At worst, they sound like they should involve black pudding. Other than recommending some new names, the schemes aren't too bad (though I really think you should reconsider that gold collar). What're you going to need five chapters for, though? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800213 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_son_of_Dorn Posted June 22, 2011 Author Share Posted June 22, 2011 Suppose i could change legs to green, and no they are the Knights watch, and lol didn’t think jaded bloods were to bad, but that’s what happens when you let your little nephew name them ;) (will most likely rename them but to what i don’t know, suggestions fitting their colour scheme would be nice, and change collar gotcha ;)) and as for stone watchers they are meant to be as a solid as stones observing all around them (not literally of course) just very diligent in their duties and being sons of dorn very hard to move in defence (like a normal man moving a boulder ;)) And as for my story i was going to base it over a long stage of novels (Kinda like the Horus Heresy) though there may be 5 chapters only company elements from each one will be present (to have a full 5000 sm's in a system feels to much to me) maybe a few companies from each. The main idea i have is for 5 fleet based chapters respond to a distress call from a giant mining/hive city planet orbited by forge moons on the edge of the north east of the imperium. (It would have to be a planet of huge proportions and importance to qualify for the combined might of 5 individual chapters) Now I’d introduce the chapters in sections, revealing hero’s and their chapter traits, beliefs, disciples etc. whilst the story progresses. The main idea i had for a plot involves houses of nobility on the planet/moons (some natives some imperial officials who moved there hundreds of years ago who then had families on the planet so they see it as there’s too, and other officials of the imperium sent there recently, these 'noble' houses would either have a big say in the military/forges/ mining operations as to denote there importance but are warring with each other as too which house should rule the planet as a whole in the name of the imperium, this leads to internal conflict on the planet civil wars and such but with the imperial guard besieged on all sides by private armies fighting for the 'noble houses' each claiming there wars to be in the name of service to the imperium a dilemma arises, who is loyalist and who is simply warring to control the planet for their own agenda. And im currently working on the plot from there on, aka justifying the presence of the companies of the chapters, character and back grounds, if chaos will be involved, orks, tau etc. annnd http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/KnightsWatch-DA-1.jpg http://i1005.photobucket.com/albums/af180/spacemarine777/ScionsofJupiter-UM-1.jpg Edit: and have changed stone watchers to stone sentinels Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800249 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Octavulg Posted June 22, 2011 Share Posted June 22, 2011 Suppose i could change legs to green, and no they are the Knights watch, and lol didn’t think jaded bloods were to bad, but that’s what happens when you let your little nephew name them biggrin.gif (will most likely rename them but to what i don’t know, suggestions fitting their colour scheme would be nice, and change collar gotcha msn-wink.gif) The thing is, I'm pretty sure Knights Watch doesn't mean anything (or at least, not anything regarding a name). It's not "the watch belonging to the Knights" or "the watch made up of knights". It's "The multiple knights look at something". Which I wouldn't have thought was what you meant... and as for stone watchers they are meant to be as a solid as stones observing all around them (not literally of course) just very diligent in their duties and being sons of dorn very hard to move in defence (like a normal man moving a boulder msn-wink.gif) Sentinels was a good choice, then. Makes it sound more like they are stone, less like they watch stone. And as for my story i was going to base it over a long stage of novels (Kinda like the Horus Heresy) though there may be 5 chapters only company elements from each one will be present (to have a full 5000 sm's in a system feels to much to me) maybe a few companies from each. The main idea i have is for 5 fleet based chapters respond to a distress call from a giant mining/hive city planet orbited by forge moons on the edge of the north east of the imperium. (It would have to be a planet of huge proportions and importance to qualify for the combined might of 5 individual chapters) That's still a lot of responses - chapters are spread pretty thin, after all. There's only about one company per hundred worlds. Now I’d introduce the chapters in sections, revealing hero’s and their chapter traits, beliefs, disciples etc. whilst the story progresses. The main idea i had for a plot involves houses of nobility on the planet/moons (some natives some imperial officials who moved there hundreds of years ago who then had families on the planet so they see it as there’s too, and other officials of the imperium sent there recently, these 'noble' houses would either have a big say in the military/forges/ mining operations as to denote there importance but are warring with each other as too which house should rule the planet as a whole in the name of the imperium, this leads to internal conflict on the planet civil wars and such but with the imperial guard besieged on all sides by private armies fighting for the 'noble houses' each claiming there wars to be in the name of service to the imperium a dilemma arises, who is loyalist and who is simply warring to control the planet for their own agenda. And im currently working on the plot from there on, aka justifying the presence of the companies of the chapters, character and back grounds, if chaos will be involved, orks, tau etc. I would have expected the Marines to just kill everyone who resisted. If other people didn't resist but were fighting each other...well, that's an internal political matter. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800325 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_son_of_Dorn Posted June 22, 2011 Author Share Posted June 22, 2011 I know, still working out the kinks ;) annddddd how about knights of the watch? (could say they are hunting a member of the fallen, gives means to their name as they are currentley the knights of the dark angels looking for the fallen & a one company strong task force is tracing a lead) lends a little strength to at least one element of a sm force being there, Steel masks i want them there as they the planets minining division has uncoverd something under the planets surface and true to there roots the steel masks want to see what it is. (want this to be a major part of a novel)........but like i say its ..........kinky..........at best :P -I would have expected the Marines to just kill everyone who resisted. If other people didn't resist but were fighting each other...well, that's an internal political matter.- As its humans on humans and each 'noble house' has a part to play, (understands the complex ancient mining equipment whilst another has a streak of victories in defending the planet from xeno attackers and lends mssive ammounts of its well trained private armies to the imperial guard, or another house which operates the trade routes) all will have importance so they can not just be written of in an instance without causing great civil unrest) so its a tricky situation not just DAKKA DAKKA DAKKA WAAAGHHH will be some smexy twists and suprises along solid political debate and war. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/232682-sm-colour-schemes-for-my-stories/#findComment-2800348 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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