IA: Forgotten Sons

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At the time of its founding, the Angels of Healing chapter was zealous defenders of the Imperum like hundreds of other Unforgiven chapters. And when the Curse of 21st founding showed it?s face, Angels of Healing managed to conduct a series of measures to protect their gene-seed from degenerating . Two most effective of them was The Blood Chains Tradition and reforming chapters 2nd company (company whith most pure gene-seed) into the Puritywing. Puritywing was ordered to keep crystal purity of their gene-seed by all the costs.
Chapters Homeworld was in the huge system named Golgotha, that is located on the border between Segmentum Pacificus and Segmentum Tempestus. In addition to their Homeworld system included Sanctuary-world with own force of Adepta Sorroritas, 6 inhabited Imperial worlds and 4 uninhabited.

War of White and Black Hand

The Blood Chains

This mysterious tradition is the inheritance of the purest killed battle-brother\'s organs by his successor, like it happens with astartes armour. Later experiments showd that without it ritual percent Forgotten Sons mutations begins to grow in extreme progression, but also causes Forgotten Sons strongest mutation ? so called ?Voices of Forgotten?

3 years after the Hive-Fleet Behemoth attacked Imperium Golgotha system was invaded by Chaos coalition (several small half-independent Chaos Space Marines Warbands, Howling Widows cult and army of smaller cults) known as the ?Black Fingers? (named after Alliance base - space hulk ?Black Fist?).
This coalition was leaded by tree arch-heretics: Fallen Angels apothecarian Methuselah, Warsmith Le?Bierge and Alpha Legion Sorcerer Feiro.
All chapter forces were called for protection the system... But it was to late. Half of the system already was conquered by Black Fingers. Sanctuary-World has fallen under enemy attack and was sacked. During the siege of the Golgotha 5 (Homeworld) Black Fingers unleashed their last secret weapon ? virus. Virus that made real the worst Angels of Healing nightmare ? gene-seed destabilization. Most Battle-Brothers began mutate, right on the battlefield. Only at the last moment the order was saved from absolute destruction - in the system came last Battle-Company of the Order, has not participated in the defense of the planet, 5th Battle-Company. During it?s attacks, it also has been exposed to the virus, but was able to break the siege of the planet. With monstrous losses Angels could drive out the enemy from the system.

After the War

Forgotten Sons colour scheme

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The price of victory was terrible. 3 Battle-Companies was completely annihilated. 1st, 2nd, 3rd, 5th and 8th (reserve devastator Battle-Company) lost more than half of their battle brothers. 16 scouts was saved after war and only 5 marines survived in 4th Battle-Company. Mutations spreaded between marines. But Puritywing long ago transformed in ?Chapter in Chapter? completed it?s task ? their gene-seed was absolutely pure.
Chapters Inner Circle decided to keep in secret destabilization of their gene-seed, but as a sign of mourning for their past them changed Chapters name to ?Forgotten Sons? (in honour hundreds of died marines whose names was lost when their Chapter was crushed), changed Chapter?s symbol and re-painted armour of all Chapters Marines. Edited July 22, 2011 by гR.I.B.

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Editing is real headache

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The Forgotten Sons

I like the name, very Unforgiven. The IA could do with some grammar mistakes like the "its" as possessive so "the Curse of the 21st Founding showed its (not it's face)"

Perhaps a small little fact file about the Chapter, tell which Unforgiven chapter they are from

• Dark Angels
  
• Angels of Absolution
  
• Angels of Absolution
  
• Angels of Vengeance
  
• Disciples of Caliban
  
• Guardians of the Covenant
  
• Consecrators
  

Explain why they are called the Angels of Healing (Many Apothecaries?)

Chose from the list as to the parent Chapter, do a little research on the chapter, see which one suits you, which one has similar colour scheme (TBH I think that the colour scheme is a bit bland)

Explain more about the curse, even if it just rumors of howls at night, some indication of the Curse. The Blood Chains ritual sound very VERY Khorne like, it looks like either a) The Inquisition come along and declare them Traitoris or they turn to Khorne. I would suggest finding a little bit less extreme ritual

The idea of Puritywing is interesting, but I think that it should be that a small core of Pure Brothers taken from the companies to overseer the purity of the Chapter (a bit like Brother Corbulo). They should hunt down any information about how they could reverse the curse.

Golgotha, I like the name, but the idea of Sisters next door could involve conflict because of the curse. The Sisters could have some intrest about the Chapter after hearing of the rituals.

The Big Battle

A coalition of Chaos Marines attack them system (Reasons why? Maybe they heard of the curse and were trying to convert them over to the Dark Side) I think that maybe you should have only one renegade band attack them, as large as the coalition so you can have a nemesis for the Chapter. Fallen Angels in the force attacking the planet seems good, keep that one.

The name also is bugging me "Black Fingers". Stick with the "Black Fists", seems better.

As for the battles, maybe there had been smaller battles on other planets, getting bigger and bigger and then onto Golgotha. Explain the virus, where did they get it from? Ancient world? Research Planet? Explain the mutations that took place, did it create new ones or build upon existing ones. Maybe have stories of how this turned the battle (to either side). What about the Sister in the system. Did they fight against the Black Fingers/Fists or did they refuse to fight with the Chapter as a result of the mutations.

Overall a good idea (Writing a 21st Founding Chapter is very difficult) with some rough edges that can be smoothed out

Edited July 30, 2011 by Tomlev40

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grammar mistakes

I'm really weak in English grammar.

And I have to use google translator.

 

Perhaps a small little fact file about the Chapter, tell which Unforgiven chapter they are from

I always liked the guard of the covenant, but I still think about it.

 

Explain why they are called the Angels of Healing (Many Apothecaries?)

Yep

 

(TBH I think that the colour scheme is a bit bland)

Maybe,but i already using it.

 

Explain more about the curse

I'm working on it. I'm just a little lazy.

The main mutation in the Chapter is that because of "the blood chains" souls of the dead Marines move into the bodies of those who are transplanted their organs. Or that just voices in their heads.

 

The idea of Puritywing is interesting, but I think that it should be that a small core of Pure Brothers taken from the companies to overseer the purity of the Chapter (a bit like Brother Corbulo). They should hunt down any information about how they could reverse the curse.

In the Puritywing join the veterans many years remained genetically pure. Scouts can not join them immediately after the initiation in the Marines.

The problem with them is that they are very spiritually removed from the rest of the Chapter. For example, unlike the rest of the Chapter they have a strong cult of fire.

Plus, they always in conflict with Doomwing, which is a something like a large death сompany, under the supervision of terminators of the Chapterы Inner Circle.

 

Sisters next door could involve conflict because of the curse.

All Sisters are killed. Sanctuary-world was vanquished during the war.

Planet still exists, but its population is 0.

I just forgot to write about it.

 

Maybe they heard of the curse

Yep

 

that maybe you should have only one renegade band attack them

Lets say tat Black Fists is a single warband with several leaders from Big bands.

 

"Black Fists", seems better.

No problem

 

As for the battles, maybe there had been smaller battles on other planets, getting bigger and bigger and then onto Golgotha.

I'm just was too lazy to write about it.

 

Explain the virus, where did they get it from?

apothecarian Methuselah.

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Explain the virus, where did they get it from?

Apothecarian Methuselah.

Maybe he had something to do with Fabius Bile

He's the man you want if you want biological warfare. He roams the stars giving Enhanced Warriors and anything else nasty to renegades for protection. It would be a nice tie in to the universe

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Maybe he had something to do with Fabius Bile

He is my favorite Chaotican, but....

I really don't believe that he is the only one who can do this in all Chaos Legions.

There must be some more clever guys.

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From what I know, he might be the only one who could be able to manufacture such a thing. Or somebody in the coalition could come and find it on a old world, full of lightning and arcane ruins.

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Maybe they found it on Golgotha 5 itself...

Planet is a Forgeworld destroyed and abandoned during the Horus Heresy and full of secrets.

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Homeworld

In the times before the Horus Heresy Golgotha 5 was known as 454467 an average Imperium Forgeworld. But when heresy began, Mechanicums of this planet took the side of the Emperor and the planet has undergone nuclear bombing by the Chorus forces. Polar ice caps melted, the whole surface of the planet was flooded. Planets Mechanicum cult was destroyed and forgotten. Survivors of the planet gradually coming out its underground bunker in search of food until 90% of the population did not live permanently on the "surface" of the planet. This surface is a mix of mud swamps and toxic seas on which drifting the huge islands of floating garbage. The largest of these islands turned into a sort of floating cities, each of which is populated by separate tribe.
Fortress-Monastery of the Chapter is located in what used to be the capital of the world, and now hidden under tons of mud and water. Monstrous industrial complex, of this place goes for miles under the earth hiding hundreds of secrets, forgotten there by Adeptus Mechanicus. No one knows why the Adeptus Mechanicus never claim their rights on the planet and did not try to restore it.

The Unknown

One of the first Chapters discoveries in the depths of the planet was The Unknown - a mysterious machine-sarcophagus very similar with dreadnought. Perhaps this was a new dreadnought pattern, developed on Golgotha, but did not finished. Either way the machine was repaired and completed by Chapters Techmarines. But years later, all the information about the The Unknown kept by Chapters Inner Circle in the strictest secrecy. Nobody did not know how the Order was able to restore machine, is there in dungeons of Golgotha similar sarcophagus, and most importantly - who is inside it? On this issue there are many versions and rumors: that is the last of the surviving Marines battle the sixth company that is missing at war the Grand Master Chapter that the sarcophagus was unable to open and there is still a pilot placed there before the Horus Heresy (probably Space Marine of the Dark Angels, or perhaps even of the Traitor-Legions) ...

Gene-Seed

Forgotten Sons share Gene-Seed of Lion ElJonson, that horribly degenerated because of the virus. Except for the battle brothers consisting of Puritywing over time, all the Space Marine appears one or several unique mutations to Chapter. But if these mutations are too many or a marine begin to show signs of "Votes of Forgotten" he immediately will be transferred to the Doomwing, where he is under the care of veteran-brothers serve until his death.
The most common mutations:
"Voices of the Forgotten" - A mutation in Omofag because of which Marines hear voices of their killed brothers, organs of which they are transplanted. The state is close to multiple personality. These warriors could hardly control themselves and forced a long time to rebuild their consciousness by "choir" of personalities, but reached a "unanimous persons" even the youngest brother Marines fighting with the experience and skills of veterans.
"Tears of the Emperor" - Gland Mutation Bletcher, which resulted in the eyes, mouth and sometimes nose Marines begin to continuously oozing blood-red liquid
"Ghosts of Golgotha" - a Makranoid mutation which makes the skin Marines absolutely clear.
"Look of Cursed" - mutation of Okulob causing eyes chemical luminescence.
"The Curse of Damocles" - Gemastom mutation. All in all a few weeks marine "getting old" to the state of a walking mummy ... On the combat qualities it has almost no effect, but very demoralizing to the mutant.
"No sleep without forgiveness" - Mutation of cataleptic site. Marine can not really relax, permanently being in the state of severe stress, the absolute attentiveness and concentration. Almost all soon go mad. Edited August 2, 2011 by гR.I.B.

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What if change Angels of Healing on Angels of Knowledge (and change big number of apothecaries on big number of Imperium secrets known?)