The return of a Predator

[Uprising]

Recently I have been working on my DIY chapter(The Carnivore) and woulds love to expand their fluff. The problem is, i can`t figure out what to add. I have hundreds of ideas but i don`t want to bog down my IA with anything unnecessary. I would love to hear your answer on the following questions

1. What do you like about the IA?
   
2. What do you dislike about the IA?
   
3. Is anything over the top/unbelievable?
   
4. What would you like to see add?
   

 

The link for my IA is in my Sig and would like to hear some opinions before i start version three. Thank you for your time. ^_^

[Shinzaren]

Well, for starters, post this question in your IA thread, instead of making a new thread. You'll get better responses, and people will be more willing to read and answer your questions when they don't have to jump between threads. Otherwise, I will answer these questions in your IA thread when I get a chance (not tonight, about to nod off). Whenever you are stuck and have too many ideas, try rereading the article out loud (Octavulg's fantastic advice) and eliminating/changing anything that sounds wrong. Once you have done this 3-4 times all the way through, try reading other IAs to get a feel for what you like/dislike about them and then take this knowledge and examine your own IA with it. Eliminate/change any ideas you don't like and then look at adding any ideas you do like. Make changes on your own as much possible, and then when you feel like you have a good draft three, four, or more, bump your thread and explain in broad details the changes you made. I think you'll find the responses much more positive this way, and you will feel less bogged down with a million ideas. That is the advice I received and I thought it helped a lot. I can only pass it on and hope it works for you.

 

TL;DR: I'll look over you IA tomorrow and try and post some comments for you, in the IA thread. Not here.