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The Ebony Skulls Chapter


ChaosKen60

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Hello here.

 

Disclaimer: The following is not, I repeat NOt personal attack of some sort, but a honest advice.

 

I have been trying to come-up with my own DIY Chapter, my 1st attempt – Eternity’s Angels – did not seem to bring much response – yes I know I am a lurker, but that is habit that is hard to break.

You didn't get much response, because your article(s) look, and unfortunately read, like list of inventory. I was bored out of my skull by the time of Tattooing and Head-Hunting and that's not even one third of article.

 

Mind you, I'm not saying that what you have here is boring or outright wrong, but the representation is bad. You're drowning the reader in huge amount of (unnecessarily) detailed informations.

 

My advice would be, save this version and write down a summary; short, brief and straight to the point.

 

 

Cheers, NightrawenII.

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