Uprising Posted December 15, 2011 Share Posted December 15, 2011 Access Granted. Loading File: Crypt Keeper Name: Crypt Keepers Founding Chapter: Ultramarine Founding: 13th Chapter Master: Isaac (rest pending) Homeworld: (Destroyed) Fortress-Monastery: (Name pending) Main colours: Bone White armor with Golden Trim, Shoulders pads and Helmets Specialty: Codex Chapter Battle Cry: In life we serve him, in death we rest Estimated strength: Destroyed (epidemic outbreaks on Homeworld) The Crypt Keepers were a chapter to contain the dangerous inhabits of the Ghoul Stars to prevent them from threatening the Imperium with their brother chapter: The Death Spectres. The Crypt Keepers were identical to their parent chapter the Mortifactors in belief and tactics. They serve in countless battle and save many worlds in the Emperor`s name. Their end occurs on their home world: (Name pending) when epidemic outbreaks occur. Reports from the planet were few and quarantine protocol was follow even with the disagreement of the Death Spectres. With no contract from the planet, a squad of Death Spectres 6th company was drop pod in. Contact was lost within one hours of the reconnaissance operation. This event led to Inquisitor Yersin Alexandre deciding extermination of the planet. The Crypt Keepers will not be forgotten for their great deeds serve in the name of the Emperor. Their demise and epidemic outbreak is being investigated by Inquisitor Yersin Alexandre with the aid of the Ordo Sepulturum. A Crypt Keeper Access Denied. Password Require Password: ****** ** **** Welcome Inquisitor Yersin Alexandre, Access Granted. Loading File: Dead Space Their fall The home world of the Crypt Keepers became under siege by an unknown infection that transform people into twisted version of the dead. After several months of warfare the planet population is transform and the Crypt keepers remaining force withdraw to their fortress monestray. Learning of the infection the Imperium decide to quarantine the sector to contain the spread of the plague, cutting the Crypt Keepers aid. The infected continue their assault and kills every last marine except for the chapter master himself. He retreats to his personal armory for his final stand when he hears a women laughter behind him. He turns around to see a robed women who simply introduce herself as "The Mistress". She gives the chapter master a choice: The means to destroy the attacking horde and save his chapter or die like the rest. He agrees and a spire risen from the ground, transforming him into a Daemonic Prince of The Mistress(lesser god of Chaos). He is release against the horde and is assisted by his former dead marines, who has risen as revenant seeking revenge for their death. The infective force was completely obliterated but their home world is lost. The chapter is sadden for the fate of their world and anger by the imperium lack of aid in the chapter time of need. They did find one thing after the war: "The Mistress". She bought peace and salvation for the chapter in their time of need. They leave their home world to spread this peace to those they once protected. Unfortunately the Crypt Keepers don`t know she was the one responsible for the infection that led to the chapter fall. Crypt Keepers(Need new name): Current time Escaping the quarantine zone, the Crypt Keepers rename themselves the(name pending) and change their colors. They remove the symbols of the imperium and infestation grew on their deforming armor. They decorated their helmets with skulls of the slain and symbols of the spire covers their armor. Their bodies became modified to become more impenetrable and resistance then their marine counterpart. They move in the dead of space spreading "The Mistress" plagues and virus causing others world to suffer the same fate as the chapter home world. Color Scheme I thank you for reading and this thread is just a rough draft to get my ideas out. If you have any idea or criticism please tell me, i am always open to other`s opinion. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/243546-dead-space-theme-renegades/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rylanor Posted December 15, 2011 Share Posted December 15, 2011 It's an interesting concept and I quite like it. One word of advice would be to not use the word marker, but to come up with your own name. Try not to use and terminology from the game as well. As for their name after.... The Deathless, The Risen, Revenant Dead (or Wraiths) Hope it helps, Rylanor Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/243546-dead-space-theme-renegades/#findComment-2944591 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uprising Posted December 18, 2011 Author Share Posted December 18, 2011 It's an interesting concept and I quite like it. One word of advice would be to not use the word marker, but to come up with your own name. Try not to use and terminology from the game as well. As for their name after.... The Deathless, The Risen, Revenant Dead (or Wraiths) Hope it helps, Rylanor Thank you for your advice and i decide to have spire equal marker in my diy. I know using terminology from the game is bad but would it be ok if my chapter master is name Isaac? To everyone else: Is the rough draft good equal for me to go into detail? I don`t want to start typing up the story and have it shoot down, Again :P ? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/243546-dead-space-theme-renegades/#findComment-2946406 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegad3 Posted December 20, 2011 Share Posted December 20, 2011 It's an interesting concept and I quite like it. One word of advice would be to not use the word marker, but to come up with your own name. Try not to use and terminology from the game as well. As for their name after.... The Deathless, The Risen, Revenant Dead (or Wraiths) Hope it helps, Rylanor Thank you for your advice and i decide to have spire equal marker in my diy. I know using terminology from the game is bad but would it be ok if my chapter master is name Isaac? To everyone else: Is the rough draft good equal for me to go into detail? I don`t want to start typing up the story and have it shoot down, Again :huh: ? I would think it would be quite funny actually.... Use it! Renegad3 Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/243546-dead-space-theme-renegades/#findComment-2948186 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uprising Posted December 24, 2011 Author Share Posted December 24, 2011 Update: I add a brief description of them pre fall like the one you will find in a codex. I am trying to make the first part like a cover up report while the second part is the truth. I will continue working on this on by break but i need your help. I have problems with names. I need some ideas on their name after the turn(plague/decay word following by spirit/revenant/wraith is what i am after), a name for the planet and their fortress. Thanks for reading P.S. Can you find the Easter Eggs? ;) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/243546-dead-space-theme-renegades/#findComment-2950777 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Razblood Posted January 3, 2012 Share Posted January 3, 2012 Read through it again and I still think you have a strong start here, which now just needs tightening up. As for names: Children/Sons of the Phage, Spire Keepers :lol: , Keepers of Morbus. Thats all I can come up with at the mo. I look forward to seeing more soon. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/243546-dead-space-theme-renegades/#findComment-2957000 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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