Son of Iron Posted February 13, 2012 Share Posted February 13, 2012 Fists of Dorn Founding: 8th Founding Geneseed: Crimson fists Homeworld: Darkhelm Motto: Fight for the Living, Fight for the Dead History The 1st Chapter Master of the Fists of Dorn was Etheon Runeatos, a former 1st Company Senior Sergeant of the Crimson Fists. He and Chaplain Herman Gortrord, Epistolory Likon Fentorn and Techmarine Jovian Hortol became the leaders of the Chapter, replacing their old crimson and blue livery with the white and black trim of their new chapter. The fledgeling Fists participated in various battle in support of other Dorn descendant chapters, and then eventually, when their numbers became large enough, went off on their own. They carved out a legend for themselves, even inadvertenly aiding Grand Master Loken of the Grey Knights, who decided against mind wiping the entire chapter, and let the Fists know of the existence of the Grey Knights. Both chapters have since fought alongside each other various times. When the Fists of Dorn aided the Black Templars in purging an Ork infested world whose name is now lost to history, the chapter lost their Chapter Master. The Templars, sighting the Ork Warboss, charged into the horde, leaving the small force of Fists alone and surrounded. Much of the chapter were away aiding the Ultramarines in a distant sector, leaving Runeatos and his small half company against a horde of Greenskins 100 times that number. As his men died around him Runeatos sent a vox message to the Freedom's Hope, the Chapter's only Battle Barge at the time. The Captain of the Battle Barge sent in all the gunships he had at his disposal, some even sent in with human serfs at the controls as he had so little marines left to him. The gunships stove off the Orks around the Chapter Master's body. The apothecary Thunderhawks landed, retrieving the bodies of the fallen, and to their delight, the still living Chapter Master. The Thunderhawks lifted off, ordering an orbital bombardment on the Greenskin horde. The Chapter Master lived on in the chapter's only Contemptor pattern Dreadnought, and still leads the chapter in major engagements. The Fists have never forgiven the Black Templars for abandoning Runeatos, and have refused to aid them on a number of occasions. The Chapter's homeworld of DarkHelm is a heavily forested planet, dotted with independant Hive-Cities that supply all of the recruits for the Chapter. many of an aspirant's challenges to become a neophyte involve the jungles, which have been kept teeming and deadly by the chapter's wish. One of the aspirant's tasks is to help the local Arbites in aprehending a hive gang, showing combat skill and helping keep down crime. The Chapter Fortress Monastry is known as The Veiled Keep to many of Darkhelm's human inhabitants. It is deep in the jungles of Darkhelm, hidden by deadly predators, the carniverous plantlife, and the sheer size of the jungles on Darkhelm. No one who wasn't allowed to know the location of the Keep does know it, preventing any would-be attackers if any did arrive on Darkhelm from finding the chapter's most sacred stronghold. Tactics Each Battle Company in the Fists of Dorn has slightly different tactics when it comes to war. The original Captains had very similar ideas, all coming from the Crimson Fists. However when the children of Darkhelm took command, the tactics changed. Chapter Master Helios gave the new Captains almost free rein with their choices when it came to attacking and defending. As Captains are chosen from the 1st Company only if they came from the Company were the vacancy is, so each Company sticks with the tactics it was taught as a newly raised brother. These tactics have been perfected over time, and as such each company has different attitudes to war. The 2nd Company, for example, prefer the Drop Pod assault with outflanking heavy armour and combat units. It is from this Company that the now Chapter Master Dornian Elioth was Captain of before he was raised to become the Lord of Battle, and as such that is usually the tactics he chooses when he goes to war. When a Chapter Master, with his large contigant of Honour Guard crash through the enemy's flank, the battle has yet to be lost. The 3rd Company prefer a more ranged approach to war, often requesting high amounts of Sternguard Veterans which are worked into a fire line alongside the Companies other Battle Brothers, with heavy armour in support The 4th Company usually use a mounted assault, with tactical marines mounted on bikes or in Rhinos and Razorbacks, cutting the foe down in one area, then moving to the next before any responce can be made. The 5th Company are siege-specialists, using high amounts of flamer and melta weaponry from Drop Pod or Rhinos. Titles There are many different honourary and awarded titles in the Fists of Dorn. Some, like Master of the Watch or Lord of Battle is awarded for being promoted to certain positions. Other titles are awarded for in-Chapter competitions: Lord of Battle - Chapter Master Master of The Veiled Keep - Chapter Master Champion of Dorn - Top 3 Honour Guard Fighters, similar to Chapter Champion Lord of The Tempest- Chief Librarian Lord of The Sanctity - Chief Chaplain Lord of The Blood - Chief Apothecary Lord of The Armoury - Master of The Forge Honoured Ancient - Dreadnought Blessed of Dorn - Longest Serving Brother Knight Lord of Darkhelm - Top Captain Fighter, awarded every decade Champion of Runeatos - Most Victorious Captain, chosen by Honoured Ancient Runeatos, awarded every decade Champion of the Crimson Hunt- Most enemy Commanders killed, awarded every decade Lord of the Void - Most enemy Capital Class ships destroyed, awarded every decade Lord of the Clenched Fist - Awarded for surviving hopeless situations. Last awarded to 5th Captain Davidon Hortloth for surviving in the jungles of Hordinoth Prime, a world overun by Orks, with nothing more than 25 brother marines and his power fist when all the Companies Thunderhawks were shot down. Also awarded the Fist of Hortloth, a specially forged Power Fist to commemorate the award Relics As an 8th Founding Chapter, The Fists of Dorn don't have too many Relics from the Horus Heresy, but many things have been passed down the Chapter from Heros of Old, and are considered to be Relics of the Chapter: Plate of Runeatos - Terminator Armour of Runeatos, awarded to the Chapter Master Fists of Dornioth - A pair of Power Fists granted to the Chapter by the Crimson Fists, awarded to the Chapter Master Dorn's Fury - a pair of highly powered bolt pistols worked into the Fists of Dornioth Staff of Varros - A Force-Staff crafted by the 1st Chief Librarian, awarded to the Chief Librarian Hood of the Tempest - The Phychic Hood of the 1st Chief Librarian, awarded to the Chief Librarian Sanctity's Might - The Crosius Arcanum of the 1st Chief Chaplain, awarded to the Chief Chaplain Armour of The Emperor's Strength - The Chaplain Armour of the 1st Chief Chaplain, awarded to the Chief Chaplain Hammer of Runeatos - The Thunder Hammer used by Runeatos, awarded to the Knight Lord of Darkhelm Shield of the Righteous - Runeatos' Storm Shield, awarded to the Knight Lord of Darkhelm Halberd of the Primarch - Gifted to The Fists of Dorn by The Imperial Fists, awarded to the Champion of Runeatos Armour of Darkhelm - The first suit of Power Armour forged on Darkhelm, awarded to the Champion of Runeatos Blade of Midnight - A Power Sword made of a black metal that seems to glow from with-in, wielded by the first 1st Captain, awarded to the Champion of the Crimson Hunt Plate of Terra - Armour forged on Terra as a gift to the Chapter for it's Founding, awarded to the Master of the Void Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/247153-fists-of-dorn/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Son of Iron Posted February 15, 2012 Author Share Posted February 15, 2012 Fists of Dorn organisation as of 999.M41 Chapter Master Dornian Elioth, Lord of Battle, Captain of Freedom's Hope, Master of The Veiled Keep, Heir of Runeatos, Lord of The Fist Plate of Runeatos Fists of Dornioth Dorn's Fury 3 Champions of Dorn 24 Honour Guard Chief Librarian Ezekiel Elsion, Lord of The Tempest Staff of Varros Hood of the Tempest 3 Epistolaries 8 Codiciers 6 Lexicanums Chief Chaplain Gordion Forloth, Lord of The Sanctity Sanctity's Might Armour of The Emperor's Strength 10 Chaplains Cheif Apothecary Cato Herculon, Lord of The Blood 10 Apothecaries Master of The Forge Yort Volkon, Lord of The Armory 10 Techmarines 28 Servitors Chapter fleet 2 Battle Barges Freedom's Hope, The Eternal Warrior 8 Strike Cruisers Dorn's Fist, Pride of Runeatos, Heretic's Bane, Xenos Doom, Primarch's Blessing, Void Master, Flaming Truth, Imperial Might 22 Escorts Honoured Ancient Etheon Runeatos, 1st Lord of Battle, Master of the Contemptor, Blessed of Dorn, Son of Crimson 1st Captain Marnius Sicaron, Knight Lord of Darkhelm Hammer of Runeatos Shield of the Righteous Honoured Ancient Jorkal, Honoured Ancient Hersul 2nd Captain Arzek Helios, Master of the Watch, Champion of Runeatos Halberd of the Primarch Armour of Darkhelm Honoured Ancient Titus, Honoured Ancient Umbrix, Honoured Ancient Garthan 3rd Captain Matteus Helican, Master of the Arsenal, Champion of the Crimson Hunt Blade of Midnight Honoured Ancient Tarlon, Honoured Ancient Mickron 4th Captain Darkon Torlin, Master of the Fleet, Lord of the Void, Captain of The Eternal Warrior Plate of Terra Honoured Ancient Cortlord , Honoured Ancient Yarhic 5th Captain Davidon Hortloth, Master of the Marches, Lord of the Clenched Fist Fist of Hortloth Honoured Ancient Borodin, Honoured Ancient Umbrol 6th Captain Gallen Fortol Honoured Ancient Jaloken 7th Captain Gart Korloth Honoured Ancient Borthol 8th Captain Han Goldorn Honoured Ancient Vorxin 9th Captain Korlon Abidol Honoured Ancient Nalthon 10th Captain Kayvern Pikal, Master of the Recruits, Lord of the Shadow Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/247153-fists-of-dorn/#findComment-2993332 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Son of Iron Posted February 15, 2012 Author Share Posted February 15, 2012 -reserved- Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/247153-fists-of-dorn/#findComment-2993447 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andrew J Posted February 15, 2012 Share Posted February 15, 2012 Sorry didnt get past the first paragraph. As far as I know the chapter master comes first. He would not walk into a room with a fully assembled chapter at his disposal. He is the first one tasked with building the chapter, giving them their name, etc. I would suggest looking over this quickly to make sure you are as close to the 40k fluff as possible. Other than that I like the name. I would check to make sure it has not been used though. Dornian names pop up all the time. Also read through the rest quickly and it seems to be more of a battle report. An IA is supposed to give an overview of your chapter through various sections and give the reader an idea of the character of your chapter and why they do what they do. You have some of that already in there but you just need to refine it in my opinion. Hope that helps. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/247153-fists-of-dorn/#findComment-2993482 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Son of Iron Posted February 17, 2012 Author Share Posted February 17, 2012 The entire thing has been redone, so what do u think now Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/247153-fists-of-dorn/#findComment-2995058 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andrew J Posted February 17, 2012 Share Posted February 17, 2012 Read through it. It fits a little better now. You make a reference in the tactics section to how the inhabitants of Darkhelm change the character of the chapter, yet you dont tell much about the planet, its people, or how they do things. I think you could do well fleshing this out. Other than that you do a good job of coming up with names of titles and relics. I would try to focus more on the beliefs and origins more too. What makes them different from IF of CF? Or are they really similar? Why do they do what they do? Is there some interesting characteristic about them? Hope that helps. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/247153-fists-of-dorn/#findComment-2995116 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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