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Hey there Liber! I decided to have a good go at DIYing a Chapter, I mean how hard can it be? :) With the critics in this forum it would appear to be rather difficult...

 

So here are my initial ideas!

 

Chapter name: Mortifica Umbras (deadend shadows)

 

Gene heritage: Dorn

 

Excecution of War: Codex Astartes

 

War Cry: "Pain is in the mind!"

 

Origins: During the cursed founding the Adeptus Biologus were carrying out many tests on gene seed one of these was an attempt to make even tougher Astartes by increasing their pain thresholds despite the fact that it was allready huge. The result was the Mortifica Umbras a Chapter like all others except for the fact that approximately one in every thirty of the Astartes in the Chapter inherit 'The Fade' which is the loss of all physical feeling alltogether. Those that have the defect are placed amongst the rest of the Chapter as inspiration as this can lead the individuals to carry out heroic feats that a normmal battle brother would be hard pressed to achieve , the first company being the only part of the Chapter to feild entire units of the afflicted marines.

 

Open for C&C, Tom

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Not a bad start but you need more "con" than "pro." The Cursed Founding is called that for a reason, most Chapters from the 21st failed miserably, and those that survived have suffered permanent bad luck and degeneration.

 

Here's some ideas to consider:

Your character's bodies appear "dead." Corpse like. Skin shrivels and becomes waxy and leathery. The lips peel back to reveal rictus grins. Eyes become glassy, rheumy and milk-white, the extremities begin to darken, etc. Have them walking amongst the dead and diseased like plague doctors, with the familiar beak-like helms. They bear torches to burn corpses in their wake and leave fields of ash. They wear heavy cloaks to hide their appearance and never take off their helms. They all speak with a raspy, wizened voice as though their lungs are full of dust.

 

2- They are loyal, but Nurgle "loves" them and tries to cajole them into serving him. They are resistant to disease but plagues tend to cling to them, carried on bodies that ignore disease instead of fighting it. This makes them a target for the Inquisition and the Chapter avoids engaging in battles near population centers, preferring to go into the worst kind of environments (like those already plagued) to fight enemies who think themselves safe within.

 

3- Their Chapter is nomadic, but visits grave worlds (where the planet is literally covered with mausoleums and crypts and catacombs from neighboring worlds) to find recruits. They take their recruits from those who seem to have a morbid interest in death, including death cults of all kinds that visit these planets.

 

4- They believe that when the Emperor is reborn, they too will be.

 

5- Some Inquisitors believe the Chapter may engage in cannibalism to "stave off" the effects of their rotting bodies, feasting on the corpses of the dead they gather from battlefields and their homeworld.

I wouldn't go with the "zombie" reccomendation.

 

Just do what you feel right for your chapter. Doesnt' matteri f oyu have more pros than cons or more cons that prones.

Just because the founding is called "cursed" doesn't mean everything and everything there went 100% wrong.

 

There have been Chapters that didn't have any real cons (other than being attacked by he inquisition, like the Flame Falcons)

Having your chapter name in latin, is usually not the best idea... Since people don't know what it means.

That being said, names are a matter of personal preferance, so if you really love it, hang on to it.

 

I think you need to tell us about how the marines of your chapter think about their situation.

Do they feel blessed, or cursed? Are they ashamed, or do they think themselves superior to the 'normal' space marines? Etc, etc.

 

Then you can expand on how they think about everything else, later :huh:

 

Cheers

I think you need to tell us about how the marines of your chapter think about their situation.

Do they feel blessed, or cursed? Are they ashamed, or do they think themselves superior to the 'normal' space marines? Etc, etc.

 

Also, how do the marines not branded by The Fade feel about the whole situation? Do they look up to their Faded kin, or feel pity for them?

 

Also, because the idea is now floating around in my head and I must share it before I forget it: Do they have any crazy rituals which they think effects the chance of the Fade occuring in a marine? (whether it does make a difference or not isn't as important as the marines thinking it does :) )

I think you need to tell us about how the marines of your chapter think about their situation.

Do they feel blessed, or cursed? Are they ashamed, or do they think themselves superior to the 'normal' space marines? Etc, etc.

 

Also, how do the marines not branded by The Fade feel about the whole situation? Do they look up to their Faded kin, or feel pity for them?

 

Also, because the idea is now floating around in my head and I must share it before I forget it: Do they have any crazy rituals which they think effects the chance of the Fade occuring in a marine? (whether it does make a difference or not isn't as important as the marines thinking it does ;) )

Well I haven't had much writing/thinking time (DAMN GCSE'S) but I think they would serve as an example of true devotion, the reason being chapters like the Imperial Fists think feeling pain is purity (I mean they have a pain glove!) So the infected individuals would see themselves as being diminished compared to other battle brothers. Those not infected would see them as equal but have immense respect as most who have 'The Fade' often try and redeem the fact that they don't think they are pure by insane acts of heroism (tasty opportunity for IC's fluff! :P)

Not keen on @SnakeoilSage's idea, there will be cons i just want to think carefully about them

 

I'm gonna keep my ideas for future use then because I like 'em.

 

Just a little advice: they call it the 21st Cursed Founding for a reason. It was the F.U.B.A.R. Founding. Your free to use it, but it exists so players can give their Chapters an air of tragedy and/or horror: 21st Chapters are the crippled underdogs who's tenacity we cheer for, or the wretched mutations we fear/pity and pray for their extinction/salvation.

Don't use the 21st Cursed Founding to make your Chapter "flawed awesome," as if to say "yeah, my Chapter is from the 21st, but it's too cool to be affected by it."

If you can't, then just make them another Founding, one that feels more natural and doesn't diminish the flavor and impact the 21st Cursed Founding has.

Respect the canon, is all I'm saying, and I'll finish raving now.

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