Grimgorr Posted June 11, 2012 Share Posted June 11, 2012 (Last updated June 13, 2012) Here's what I've come up with so far for my main Space Marine army. This is by no means concrete nor finished, and I will update this as I think up more info. Tell me what ya think! The Knights of The Ebon Blade Founding: 3rd Founding Primogenitor: Imperial Fists Homeworld: Korvellis Prime Battlecry: "We are the Emperor's eternal sword" Overview: Knights of the Ebon Blade Heraldry Chapter Master: Alekandros Targosian (dec.) Master of Sanctity: as of 988.M41, None Chief Librarian: as of 988.M41, None 1st Company: Captain: Knight-Captain Varok Drogoth, The Iron Fist of Korvellis Chaplain: Knight-Chaplain Taanax Krall 2nd Company: Captain: 3rd Company: Captain: 4th Company Captain: 5th Company: Captain: Knight-Captain Darius Lykandros, Warden of Korvellis Chaplain: Knight-Chaplain Novos Arkantis, Savior of Sarmatia 6th Company: Captain: 7th Company: Captain: 8th Company: Captain: 9th Company: Captain: 10th (Scout) Company: Captain: History The Knights of the Ebon Blade were created shortly after the Horus Heresy, as a Third Founding chapter of the Imperial Fists. Initially fleet-based, their original purpose was to protect the strategically important Elysian trade route from marauding Orks and Eldar pirates. After their valiant defense of a Mechanicus forge-ship carrying newly discovered STC data, the Knights were rewarded with the Korvellis system as their homeworld. Being a close successor of the Imperial Fists, the Knights will often send a sizable delegation to the Feast of Blades, to both win honor for their chapter and maintain relations with their brothers. Twice has a Knight won the hallowed honor of bearing the Dornsblade, most recently in 988.M41 when Knight-Captain Lykandros proved victorious. Homeworld While the Knights of the Ebon Blade recruit from all worlds around the Korvellis system, their main recruiting grounds are their homeworld of Korvellis Prime. It is a world of constant cold, of glaciers the size of continents, frozen seas, and jagged mountains of black granite. The planet's only resource, besides recruits, is the rare karonium ore, used in armor plating and spaceship hulls. The planet's only large settlement, Barathos, serves as the world's hub for trade, as it is one of the few areas that is both safe from glaciers and has a stable temperature. Organization Even though they are no longer a fleet-based chapter, The Knights still keep a large chapter fleet, as they are often called to eliminate pirate lairs and xenos ships. The chapter is arrainged in standard Codex Astartes organization, with a few notable exceptions. Due to ancient oaths and ties with the Adeptus Mechanicus, the Knights have a higher then average number of vehicles, weapons, and equipment at their disposal. this is all I have so far, I'll add more when I get the time. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/254032-index-astartes-the-knights-of-the-ebon-blade/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Olis Posted June 11, 2012 Share Posted June 11, 2012 Chapter Master: as of 988.M41, NoneMaster of Sanctity: as of 988.M41, None Chief Librarian: as of 988.M41, None Quick question: Considering the current year in 40k is 999.M41, why are these positions still empty? Eleven years is a long time to be completely leaderless. :) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/254032-index-astartes-the-knights-of-the-ebon-blade/#findComment-3083246 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grimgorr Posted June 11, 2012 Author Share Posted June 11, 2012 Chapter Master: as of 988.M41, NoneMaster of Sanctity: as of 988.M41, None Chief Librarian: as of 988.M41, None Quick question: Considering the current year in 40k is 999.M41, why are these positions still empty? Eleven years is a long time to be completely leaderless. :) You bring up a good point, I may change that. The fact that the Knights are currently engaged in a campaign to defend their homeworld might explain the gaps in their leadership, but as i haven't added that in I can see how it is confusing. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/254032-index-astartes-the-knights-of-the-ebon-blade/#findComment-3083266 Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChaptermasterDemon7 Posted June 12, 2012 Share Posted June 12, 2012 I like the Chapter name and the Color scheme. But, not reall much to comment on. Do you have ideas for there Orginization, Beliefs and Combat Doctorine? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/254032-index-astartes-the-knights-of-the-ebon-blade/#findComment-3083392 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haywire Posted June 12, 2012 Share Posted June 12, 2012 Forgive me for saying but, right off the bat, all I'm seeing within this Chapter is a series of constant copy & pasting of names and terms from Wrath of the Lich King. My first piece of advice would be to remove these terms. I can understand the desire to really like a certain group in a game, but you need to keep in mind that you will want to suspend the disbelief of the reader. As someone who has played Wrath of the Lich King (For longer than I really should have done, but let's not go there.) my own suspension of disbelief was very much broken. Please don't take this as a personal attack against you. The main purpose here is to help you to create an original piece of work. By all means, be inspired by the Wrath of the Lich King, but don't copy things word for word. As a possible barebones to begin with, what about calling them the Ebon Knights, and having them as a very ruthless and grim Chapter with what might be an unhealthy obsession with death? You can keep the spirit of your inspiration, but you can keep it as your own work. Best of luck! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/254032-index-astartes-the-knights-of-the-ebon-blade/#findComment-3083573 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grimgorr Posted June 13, 2012 Author Share Posted June 13, 2012 Forgive me for saying but, right off the bat, all I'm seeing within this Chapter is a series of constant copy & pasting of names and terms from Wrath of the Lich King. My first piece of advice would be to remove these terms. I can understand the desire to really like a certain group in a game, but you need to keep in mind that you will want to suspend the disbelief of the reader. As someone who has played Wrath of the Lich King (For longer than I really should have done, but let's not go there.) my own suspension of disbelief was very much broken. Please don't take this as a personal attack against you. The main purpose here is to help you to create an original piece of work. By all means, be inspired by the Wrath of the Lich King, but don't copy things word for word. As a possible barebones to begin with, what about calling them the Ebon Knights, and having them as a very ruthless and grim Chapter with what might be an unhealthy obsession with death? You can keep the spirit of your inspiration, but you can keep it as your own work. Best of luck! I realize that many of the chapter background and details are based on a certain game (*cough*worldofwarcraft*cough*) and that I may have been rather heavy-handed in my references, but keep in mind any of the names and other details are merely placeholders until I can think of better ones. As for the chapter name, I personally feel that Knights of the Ebon Blade can be suitable, as long as, like you said, the video game references aren't overdone. As someone who plays a lot of video games, they kinda get ingrained into mah head sometimes. :woot: Anyways, I truly appreciate the advice, and I'll see how much I can put it to use :) (Edit: I've already taken some of your advice, and replaced many of the more overtly WoWish names/facts with stuff me and my slaves assistants thought up. :) ) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/254032-index-astartes-the-knights-of-the-ebon-blade/#findComment-3084424 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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