The End

[CKO]

Welcome to my tale about 2 Space Marine recruits who work their way up the Astartes totem pole. The story will hopefully improve my writing and show just how amazing Space Marines are! As you read the tale please don't hesitate to PM me or post suggestions, as there is no such thing as bad feedback. It belongs in the Liber Astartes section because you will learn about the Chapter in story form.

 

 

The End Chapter 1

The humidity of the rainforest was not the cause of Kenar’s sweat for once as he quickly applied the anti-venom that was in his backpack. Small beams of sunlight that penetrated the rainforest’s canopy illuminated the massive headless snake whose body twitched even in death. He did not need to scan through Xavier’s survival manual to know that it was the Deji, the most poisonous snake on the planet. He remembered other recruits talking about the snake, “The Deji’s venom slowly paralyzes your limbs and attacks the nervous system causing you to slip into a coma, until finally either your lungs or heart submits to its grasp.”

 

To live he would have to survive the coma, and his only chance of living was to stay above ground away from Xavier’s other predators. He started to climb one of the massive rainforest trees; by the time he found a comfortable branch he had lost feeling in his fingers. He pulled a gold Aquila from his bag, the only thing that separated him from becoming an Astartes was surviving the Deji’s venom and taking the Aquila to one of the Keeps scattered across the planet.

 

His arm lost all feeling as he thought about how close he was. Using his other arm he placed his paralyzed arm and his Aquila in his lap. While losing feeling in his left hand, he grabbed his picture of his family out of his bag and placed it in his lap. The picture of his brother, sister, and ailing mother had been his motivation throughout this trial and he needed it now more than ever.

 

All Kenar could think about is that his twin brother was probably at one of the Keeps by now. Zar was smart; he was the analytical type using information to gain an advantage in any situation. He probably created and executed a plan that got him to a Keep within a week. Kenar’s eye lids closed no longer able to control them, tears started to roll down his cheeks as reality settled in, he had let his family down, he would die a failure.

[DarkLiege]

So far I'm enjoying this, CKO. keep up the work and looking forward to more of it. Not quite sure as how we will learn of this chapter but you somehow surprise us. :)

[Messor]

Well this looks like it'll be a fun ride! Is it already pretty laid out, or are you creating as you go?

[CKO]

*****

As the Master of Recruits for the Undaunted Chapter Balta enjoyed the sound of bolter fire, there was nothing more satisfying to Balta than hearing neophytes training, however something was wrong. The bolter fire was not interrupted and that meant his neophytes were not receiving proper instructions. The Sergeants should be making adjustments to their aim which would result in sporadic gun fire, but he was hearing an almost robotic sound of reload and fire. Balta walked around the exercise hall examining the gun ranges noticing that two of his Sergeants were absent. He sped up his pace to the surveillance area, the one place that continued to be a distraction for his veterans.

 

The discussion between the three Sergeants seized once Balta entered the room. The surveillance area was full of scanners and monitors which tracked the surviving recruits constantly observing them as they attempted to pass the trial. “I thought Oligi was watching the trial, how many Sergeants were assigned to this position?” Balta said looking the two Sergeants in the eye.

 

“One Sir, a rumor was spreading that a prospect passed the trial in 3 days breaking the record in half, sir”, he said in an apologetic tone.

 

If Balta was impressed you could not see it in his face, “The future of our Chapter is not receiving proper training and that is your response. Are we teaching them how to abandon their post?”

 

Abandon a word associated with fear, something that an Astartes in the Undaunted Chapter knew nothing about. A clear insult that made both Sergeants change facial expressions, one managed to squeeze words through his teeth, “Balta, I cannot speak for him but my neophyte was given specific instructions, I wanted a quick glance at the record holder and look” he said while pressing one of the monitors with his finger. “His twin brother is fighting off Deji’s venom.”

 

“Return to your post”, Balta said partially satisfied that he managed to rattle his sergeants.

 

Once they were gone he studied the monitor closely, intrigued by the prospects vital signs. Oligi a Sergeant who was responsible for training three of the Undaunted Chapter’s Captains and the clear successor to Balta, asked “Do you see that?”

 

“Yes, his heart is racing despite the paralyzing venom, while the other ones pulse is calm and steady.” Balta said.

 

‘The Deji’s venom is very potent even an Astartes would struggle against it’ Oligi turn and looked Balta in the eye, ‘His twin pulse has been like that since day 3, calm as if he is ready for anything’.

 

‘It is impressive.’ Balta said while closing his eyes.

 

Oligi was caught off guard by the choice of words, he has never heard Balta give anyone a compliment, it has always been ‘Not Bad’

or ‘Getting Better’.

 

“What is impressive?” Oligi finally said.

 

Balta after half a minute open his eyes and responded, “If his brother makes it to the keep, you are to train them both keep them together for as long as possible. As for your question do you know the worse type of enemy?”

 

Oligi shrugged his shoulders and Balta responded as he left the room, “The enemy that refuses to die and the one who is prepared to die. Something you will not have to teach those two.”

 

*****

 

So far I'm enjoying this, CKO. keep up the work and looking forward to more of it. Not quite sure as how we will learn of this chapter but you somehow surprise us. :lol:

 

Thanks, as the story progresses you will naturally learn more about the Undaunted Chapter. I might start working on an IA if enough people want it, but those can get boring at times. B)

 

Well this looks like it'll be a fun ride! Is it already pretty laid out, or are you creating as you go?

 

I hope to make it as fun as possible. I hope that the story gives everyone an inside view of what the chapter is like. I know the chapter and I know the story line but I am unsure how I want to show it so I am merging as I go.

[DarkLiege]

still loving it, CKO! keep it up!