Mogsam Posted April 28, 2013 Share Posted April 28, 2013 <p style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:24px;">Angels Descendant</span></p> <p style="text-align:center;"> </p> <p style="text-align:center;"><a href="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274677-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-first-5-marines/"><span style="font-size:24px;">Link to blog of army progress!</span></a></p> <div style="text-align:center;">]<img alt="angledecending.jpg" src="http://i290.photobucket.com/albums/ll277/mogsam_moogle/angledecending.jpg" /></div> <div> </div> <div><img alt="gallery_26_6416_525.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1357035815/gallery_26_6416_525.gif" /></div> <div> </div> <div>The Angels Descendant are from the 23rd founding. When the Imperium found itself in turmoil and weakness after years or war and attrition it was judged that more Astartes needed to be made to counter new threats. The chapter are a product of this endevour. </div> <div> </div> <div><img alt="gallery_26_6416_1516.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1357035815/gallery_26_6416_1516.gif" /></div> <div> </div> <div>The Angels Descendant draw their recruits from the world of Multalun, a world in the Galactic west. During the 37th Millenium the entire Imperium was found wanting in its defence and enemies poured forth from what seemed like every crack. Thinly stretched Imperial resources saw that many regions were left to fend for themselves, near abandoned or neglected in favour of the latest great calamity. The Patrican system was one so ignored.</div> <div> </div> <div>During the turbulent times following the Age of Apostasy the system had existed largely Independently from the Imperium of man. With various invasions and the civil war the well being of a poor and backwards system had been low on the agenda of the administrators. The planets and their governors eventually discovered they had simply been forgotten about in the grander scheme of things. Never a wealthy or prosperous collection of planets their contributions had been considered too small to draw any conscious attempts to enforce their tithes when there had been far greater prizes to win. Taxes no longer went to the Golden Throne, instead they lined the pockets of the self styled King who used the PDF forces as his personal thugs.</div> <div> </div> <div>When the Age of Apostasy was over the Imperium eventually began to refocus its efforts and bring order back to the Empire and in response created the 23rd founding of Astartes who were created to plug the gaps left by the civil fighting. The Angels Descendant were established and when they reached fighting strength were promptly sent out to the Galactic West. Originally a space based chapter the Angels fought the enemies of man for roughly fifty years before arriving in the Patrican system. What they found as they arrived surprised them to say the least. When their ships arrived they found themselves met by a fleet and threats. Largely used as a tool to maintain power the fleets were manned by poorly trained sailors and the Patricans soon found themselves outmatched. </div> <div> </div> <div>Multalum was a planet covered in large cities surrounded by massive fields of agriculture, the greatest of which formed the capital and what was the seat of the previous governor who had now styled himself as royalty. In the dead of night dozens of drop pods rained on the city - The honour of assaulting the King himself went to the first company who teleported directly into the grounds themselves. </div> <div> </div> <div>With the inevitable death of the King the entire planet was thrown into turmoil. Rumours were abound of his defeat and others scrambled to take his place as the new leader. Whilst the Angels Descendants could have subdued the rebels it was instead decided to make an example of a city and turn the entire planet in one single display of strength. The Angels leveled a city in a single massive bombardment.</div> <div> </div> <div>Declaring that the governors were not to be trusted the chapter announced that they would take the planet as the chapters homeworld and rule it in the Emperors name. Each company was given a city and set to task to covert it into a loyal and productive center for the chapter. Completely taking over the settlements they imposed strict rules onto every facet of the peoples lives. Whilst this has led the society to be highly specialised and very capable at the tasks required of them it does create issues with creativity and ingenuity. Indeed it has been said that Multalun is one of the more dreary places in the Galactic West.</div> <div> </div> <div>The chapter built its monastery at the bottom of the crater that they had created in its pacification of the planet. The unimpressive structure shows only a massive flat pad with the chapters symbol on a door and from the top it appears unimpressive. However within the structure it is a massive sprawling complex that can house many hundreds of marines at any time. </div> <div> </div> <div><img alt="gallery_26_6416_678.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1357035815/gallery_26_6416_678.gif" /></div> <div> </div> <div><em>"When Auralius jumped from the highest lip on his waxen wings he fell into the very center of the earth. Through his show of faith he found the true haven of the Angels."</em> - The Book of Auralius - Chapter 19 verse 2. </div> <div> </div> <div>Part of the final test of a potential Astartes is to find a way to descend to the monastery which was named 'The Descent'. Each recruit spends years learning survival skills, physical strength, bravery and faith in the Emperor on the throne. Each of these talents is required to progress to becoming a member of the Angels Descendant.</div> <div> </div> <div>Each candidate is required to make a pilgrimage to the monastery and find a way to the center of the crater. Whilst it is possible for the candidate to physically climb down to the goal it is incredibly demanding and most who attempt it fail. Instead the candidates are expected to use their ingenuity to achieve their goal. Several of the texts they are taught as part of their studies tell of men mimicking angels and descending from the heavens. Those who absorb such ideas inevitably try to recreate the decent on wings they have designed themselves, though with significant subliminal help. </div> <div> </div> <div>Those who survive the decent are taken into the scout core and implanted to begin their training. The scout core spends much of its time practicing drills designed to assist with drop pod assault. </div> <div> </div> <div><img alt="gallery_26_6416_81.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1357035815/gallery_26_6416_81.gif" /></div> <div> </div> <div><br /> <div>Like most Astartes the Angels Descendant do not believe in the Emperor as a God. Perhaps it is a product of being raised after the Age of Apostasy however they are particularly uninterested in the Emperor as a spiritual figure.</div> <div> </div> </div> <div><br /> <div>The Angels Descendant are believers in the rule of law and organisation to the point of obsession. Their entire entire culture is designed around maintaining an effective fighting force and efficient society deeming it an insult if their planet was unable to provide for the Emperors needs. This has resulted in a efficient if incredibly dreary society of origin. </div> <div>Multalum has little in the way of natural resources so instead provides the Imperium with what it can - manpower. The Angels Descendant oversee the training and recruitment of thousands of soldiers to fight for the Emperors armies. Indeed they see it as an additional duty to ensure that the world they protect matches the required tithes. </div> </div> <div> </div> <div><img alt="gallery_26_6416_950.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1357035815/gallery_26_6416_950.gif" /></div> <div> </div> <div><br /> <div> <em>"They claim to be sons of Guilliman like us, but they do not follow the Codex as strongly as they suggest. For every company might as well just be the assault company." - Captain Patrolcus of the Novamarines.</em></div> <div> </div> </div> <div>The chapter is very straight forward in its approaches. Nearly every battle they fight on their own terms involves drop podding directly into the midst of their enemies to disrupt and demoralise their enemies. As a result of this aggressive approach they maintain many more 'assault' companies than other chapters. Similarly the increased casualty rate of such aggressive tactics has resulted in a great emphasis being placed on the Apothecary core. Indeed it has been known for an Apothecary to rise through the ranks and even reach the position of Captain. The current Captain Ahusaka of the second company began his career in the Apothecary core and near every squad has a soldier with fundamental healing training.</div> <div> </div> <div>Due to the chapters preference of direct assaults they keep few squads of devastators and relatively few tanks.</div> <div> </div> <div>Every company is responsible for sending recruits to 'The Decent' but they will receive new brothers who have come from anywhere on the planet. This is to break down loyalty to one location and instead ingrain it on the overall needs of the chapter and planet. </div> <div> </div> <div><img alt="gallery_26_6416_122.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1357035815/gallery_26_6416_122.gif" /></div> <div> </div> <div> <div>The geneseed used in the creation of the Angels Descendant was that of the Ultramarines. Whilst the chapter has never embraced its heritage as most Ultramarine descendants do they acknowledge that Guilliman is their Primarch. Indeed during the Altarian Crisis the chapter near came to blows with members of the Novamarines when the Angels did not accept an Ultramarine captain as the leader of the forces gathered claiming their own chapter master was of a greater rank. </div> <div> </div> <div>As with most Ultramarine descendants their geneseed remains pure and all of the functions work as they should. The one quirk that marks an Angels Descendant marine is one caused by the planet of their origin and the sun it orbits. All the people inhabiting Multalum have skin that appears as a shade of copper. </div> <div> </div> </div> <p><span style="font-family:arial, helvetica, sans-serif;"><img alt="gallery_26_6416_122.gif" src="http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/uploads/1356968836/gallery_26_6416_122.gif" /></span></p> <p> </p> <p>The Altarian Crisis.</p> <p> </p> <div>- The planet of Alteria once bore the brunt of a two year long Ork invasion. The mighty Waaagh of a Blood Axe Warlord known as 'Olgaf da Kunnin'' stumbled on a collision course with the planet and forced its way onto the surface. Whilst the panicked governor sent out a distress beacon upon first sighting the beasts and their ships it took several months for the Imperial forces to arrive, delayed by other campaigns and the turmoil that is the warp. None the less the local PDF valiantly fought against the Orks. Unfortunately it was a losing battle and despite inflicting casualties on their opposition the planet was falling into greenskin hands at an alarming rate. Olgaf da Kunnin' was certainly living up to his name and whilst the PDF forces were defending as best they could too many Ork forces were attacking simultaneously the Warlord having managed to get his forces into an unusual level of co-ordination and unity. After losing over half of the major cities the planet was facing a severe refugee crisis. Shanty towns erupted like boils around those cities still standing. It was around this critical moment that the Angels Descendant arrived, a full four companies and two regiments of Multalum guardsmen - including the first company lead by the Chapter Master Helaku himself.</div> <div> </div> <div>With the situation on the planet rapidly collapsing the Angels quickly took stock of the situation. Olgaf appeared to be an unusual Ork in that he did not lead from the front. Instead the Warlord seemed to be playing his underlings off against one another and had each lead assaults to outshine the others. This proved to make it difficult for the Angels to use their usual strategy of cutting off the beasts head and instead they were forced into a strategy against the core belief they relied on - defence. For nearly a year the three line companies led the defence of the remaining cities waiting for Oglaf to emerge but he never did. Before long they were forced to abandon the outer most due to overwhelming attrition. </div> <div> </div> <div>Eventually only three major cities remained on the planet with each more resembling a slum than a city. Faced with more Ork attacks the PDF, Multalum regiments and the Angels Descendants fought on with grim determination. It is at this time that reinforcement finally arrived. A company each of Novamarines, Ultramarines and Night Hawks and four entire regiments of Imperial Guard arrived in the system. With a great haste the new arrivals deployed on the front lines and gave the defenders a much needed rest. With the new allies arrival the commanders of all the forces gathered in the capital to discuss how the war could be fought and won. It was at this time that it was decided that there should be an overall commander assigned to the war to ensure unity for the forces. The newly arrived Novamarines, Night Hawks, Ultramarines and Guard captains immediately declared their preference for the commander of the Ultramarine forces, the Captain of the seventh company. The Angels Descendant forces took this to be an insult. For near a year their forces had held the line against the overwhelming Ork forces and now their Chapter commander himself was being ushered out and replaced unceremoniously. The discussion soon became heated and for the sake of unity Master Helaku chose to relinquish his claim and accept the Ultramarine in his place. To add a perceived insult to the injury the Multalum soldiers were re-assigned to the main guard command. His own men were placed in charge of the smallest of the cities and charged with its defence. </div> <div> </div> <div>For several more weeks the combined companies of Angels Descendants and what little remained of the PDF fought over the walls of the city and held the Orks at bay. The smallest of the cities had become the worst for refugees. It was at this time that the combined Imperial forces finally managed to positively identify that Oglaf himself had entrenched himself deep behind the Ork front lines and was finally vulnerable. Chapter Master Helaku immediately sent requests through to the commander that an assault should be launched immediately on the Warlord, citing that with the leader dead the Waaagh would decapitate itself with the removal of Oglafs head. He was met with denied requests and responses that the chances of casualties to the citizens was too high. He was furious. For over a year the Ork had managed to maintain a war that had pushed Imperial forces to the edge and the chance to end his threat was being squandered. He decided to act. Withdrawing his men from the city walls he abandoned the city and prepared to launch at the head of the Ork forces.</div> <div> </div> <div>A massive coordinated drop pod assault saw the Ork warlord slain and his hold over the army broken. The true threat of the Waaaagh was broken with his death however it was not the end of the story that day. With the Angels abandonment of their post the city walls had been breached and Orks had rampaged through the slums that littered the location causing many, many people to be slain. Whilst the Novamarine forces had managed to redeploy preventing a wholesale slaughter more than half of the city had been killed. When what remained of the Angels Descendant returned to their post they found the Novamarine Captain waiting for them. A physical confrontation was narrowly avoided by better sense however it was not long before the Angels Descendant left the war for Altaria altogether. Since then the relationship between the chapter and both the Ultramarines and the Novamarines has been strained to say the least.</div> <div> </div> <div>Forge World Umaga</div> <div> </div> <div>- The Imperium is far from immune to civil disputes. When the forge world of Umaga erupted into full blown violence between rival factions of Mechanicus the Magister Yulov who ruled was forced to request urgent aid to stabilize his regime. When the Angels Descendant arrived they found the two factions fighting in the streets, each using machines and their peons to inflict damage on the other and weaken their strength. Despite the Magisters desperate pleas the forces of the third company did not seem inclined to suppress the rebellion with the haste at which they had been requested. At this point in the civil war the two sides were roughly equal, whilst the Magister Yulov had technical legal control over the planet he had no way of enforcing it and a long war suited his opposition more than himself. Whilst he had invited the Angels Descendant to his world he now found himself in a bit of a predicament since they did not appear to act. Bemused he called his 'allies' to his palace to ascertain why they sat so idle in the time of need. </div> <div> </div> <div>The Angels Descendant had recently found themselves in a unfortunate position. Due to their high risk strategies and assault orientated methods the rate at which their equipment began to degrade had been a considerable hindrance and the parts to replace damage armour had become short in supply in sufficient quantities. The civil war had given the marines the opportunity they needed. It was such that the magister soon found himself being forced to 'persuade' his allies to his side. In return for a constant supply of armour and equipment the Angels Descendant would pacify his opponents. </div> <div> </div> <div>The war was short and bloody with the marines utterly crushing the rebellious Mechanicus faction in brutal raids that showed no mercy. Within a few months the planet had been quelled and order restored. To ensure that no such problems could arise once more the Angels Descendant declared their intention to assign a squad to the protection of the head Magister. In return the planet Umaga began to churn out new parts for the chapter that had so reluctantly helped support it. Unfortunately Umagas forges could only adaquately supply suits of the older Mark IV armour rather than the modern Mark VII suits that most chapters wear. As a result the Angels Descendant now primarily take to the field in the older suits.</div> <div> </div> <div>The Aquilla</div> <div> </div> <div>- The Angels Descendant do not wear the Imperial Aquilla on their armour. Nor do they display it on their equipment. Two hundred years ago the chapter deemed itself to have failed the Emperor and that they would not wear his symbol until they had corrected this slight - and what was this failure? The world of Lulor.</div> <div> </div> <div>Lulor was a shrine world that housed the Sisters of Holy Terra and it was consumed by a swarm of Tyranids. The site of the monastery that the sisters called home was the sight of the single greatest loss in Angels Descendant history for the entire fourth company was destroyed in its defence. With their deaths and the deaths of many others the Chapter Master declared that the Angels had failed the Emperor in his task and no longer deserved to wear the Aquilla. To this day the marines do not display the eagle, nor will they until they have atoned for their failure. Though quite how they can ever atone is perhaps the greatest unanswered question.</div> Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted April 29, 2013 Author Share Posted April 29, 2013 Some changes to grammar and word usage! I've been thinking about the Geneseed and whom would be most appropriate. Raven Guard - Assault and precision strikes are what the chapter is all about. But the fluff is quite clear that Raven Guard successors are quite rare and very unstable. Blood Angels - Aggressive tactics but the everyone turns insane part puts me off somewhat. Similarly no one wants to use Blood Angel geneseed by the Sentinel Foundings. Ultramarines - The choice I'm most reluctant to do. My idea of this chapter is one of brutal domination and take the most efficient route rather than the most appropriate. Dark Angels - Can't achieve the combination of troop choices needed to field the army so using them would be awkward for the book choice. Iron Hands - Nothing particularly appropriate between the two. Salamanders/Space Wolves - Neither has successor chapters really. White Scars - Could theoretically use them however one of the few models actually in this army so far is a dread which is abhorrent to the descendants of Jagahtai. Imperial Fists - Too defencive really to be an option. ------- So realistically the best potential options are Blood Angels, Raven Guard or Ultramarines without the compassion. Simultaneously a second problem is the prevalence of Mark IV armour in this army which would need explaining! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3360464 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Malthe Posted April 30, 2013 Share Posted April 30, 2013 I think it needs to be established; the Ultramarines don't play nice. And even if they did, their successors don't have to. If your chapter's gene-seed is not terribly important, going with the big G i usually a good idea :) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3360680 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted April 30, 2013 Author Share Posted April 30, 2013 I suppose a Ultramarine successor could work if it seems as though they've taken the core tenants and warped them. Instead of following the Codex they can pick and choose the bits they like. Instead of loving the Ultramarines and going for tea and crumpets on Macragge like some of the GW chapters do they can be unimpressed. The thing I've always disliked in the Ultramarine fluff is that they are supposed to be so superior etc, I think they'd come across like that too in the 'real' world of 40k. If they were an Ultramarine successor then perhaps something along the lines of a joint campaign where several chapters gather. Then the other chapters place the Ultramarine captain as the chief in command despite the Angels Descendant one having seniority - causing them to feel disrespected. Something along those lines? I still need to work out a reason for them to wear Mark IV armour and older suits though. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3361413 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Conn Eremon Posted May 2, 2013 Share Posted May 2, 2013 That's a real world (read: ours) view of the Ultramarines, fueled by their place as the Space Marine poster boys and Ward-hate, rather than their actual fluff. If you want a Chapter that's all about efficiency, then you want a strong Codex adhering Chapter. Because that's what the Codex is, a collection of military treatise there for its adherent to formulate the most effective courses of action off of. That's the Ultramarines' thing, efficiency. Hence their high status and success rate. A brutally dominating Chapter fits the Ultramarines more than it does the Blood Angels or Raven Guard. Though keep in mind, gene-seed source does not mean clones. However, your name suggests Blood Angel gene-seed. All of those Angels Verb/Descriptor Chapters are Blood Angels, such as the Angels Encarmine. Not all Blood Angel Successors follow that naming scheme, such as the Flesh Tearers, but all those who do are Blood Angels. Just like all of the Angels of ______ are Dark Angels. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3362240 Share on other sites More sharing options...
CKO Posted May 2, 2013 Share Posted May 2, 2013 It reads like a good story, and its not to flashy. Its not flashy enough though, its hard to make a Chapter cool without making it seem like your chapter is more important than others. At the moment if I was asked about your chapter the only thing I can say is they took over a planet and made it their home world. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3362320 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted May 2, 2013 Author Share Posted May 2, 2013 Thanks for the feedback! It's very much appreciated! Ultramarines would make more sense than Blood Angels in that case. I'm always a bit confused as to how Blood Angels successors would be able to perform at any rate if they are all cursed to fall to insanity. Perhaps a name change might be better then! It is probably a bit cheesy to put Descendants in the title simply because they use drop pods excessively anyway! It's makes not as much sense when you realize they develop strategies after they are made not before. That's a very fair point. It is intentionally a bit light on details of how they perform at the moment, all good fluff starts with a good background! If people like the background then I can move on to some more aggressive information! I'm still trying to think of a good way to get alot of older suits of armour. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3362923 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted May 4, 2013 Author Share Posted May 4, 2013 Updated with a few battle honours! Thoughts? Too much civil war? I'm not sure about the Aquilla story either. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364307 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gripharius Posted May 5, 2013 Share Posted May 5, 2013 However, your name suggests Blood Angel gene-seed. All of those Angels Verb/Descriptor Chapters are Blood Angels, such as the Angels Encarmine. Not all Blood Angel Successors follow that naming scheme, such as the Flesh Tearers, but all those who do are Blood Angels. Just like all of the Angels of ______ are Dark Angels. I don't think that is always 100% true. Angels _________ is not necessarily always a Blood Angels offspring and Angels of ___________ is not necessarily always a Dark Angels offshoot. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364400 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Conn Eremon Posted May 5, 2013 Share Posted May 5, 2013 I went through Lexicanum and the 40k wiki. Its true they're not the truest sources and I may have missed some, but it was either gene-seed unknown or Dark Angels/Blood Angels. That and their respective codices showed that it there is a clear and definite trend. It may not be a rule but changing it up will only confuse. Why is your Dark Angel successor named after the Blood Angels? Do they not know their progenitor and think its the Blood Angels? Are they named differently to avoid the suspicions others have of the Dark Angels as a means to keep close watch for any sign of the Fallen? No? You just named them that way, no other reason? Oh. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364407 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted May 5, 2013 Author Share Posted May 5, 2013 It's hardly massively confusing however. Besides they don't get to choose their own name anyway. An academic on a Terra does for them! I am however considering alternative chapter names. Mostly I want to avoid an animal or colour in the title. The best I've come up with so far is the Pentient Sons but I can't see anyone naming a chapter that to begin with. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364441 Share on other sites More sharing options...
JusticarErictheblue Posted May 5, 2013 Share Posted May 5, 2013 It's Mogsam choice, I'm pretty certain I have seen a blood angels successor called angels of crimson or something like that. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364584 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gripharius Posted May 5, 2013 Share Posted May 5, 2013 I'm pretty sure Abgels of Fury is a Novamarines/Ultramarines successor. And I feel like if it was a hard rule, there would be no Angels of Blank or Blank Angels with unknown geneseed. However, you are right, it is clearly a trend, but one that a Liberite can choose not to follow. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364619 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted May 5, 2013 Author Share Posted May 5, 2013 Thanks. Anyway, naming aside! Is the rest of the fluff good or are there some no no's. I'm relatively new to 40k fluff and I'm unsure of anything is out of place or ridiculous. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364669 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Conn Eremon Posted May 5, 2013 Share Posted May 5, 2013 Aye, it does appear that the Angels of Fury contradicts my claim. Ah well, I was merely pointing out a potential inconsistency. OP can do whatever he wishes with it. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3364757 Share on other sites More sharing options...
JusticarErictheblue Posted May 6, 2013 Share Posted May 6, 2013 Yeah the fluff looks fine, liked the forge world part,though I don't the the head magister would. Wasn't MKIV armour in so,e respect better than MkV or is that just older termie armour? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3365112 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted May 6, 2013 Author Share Posted May 6, 2013 Mark V is the 'bodge' it era. It is when they couldn't produce it fast enough so they had to use patchwork armour and reinforce it all. Mark IV is the last one before the heresy occurred and a couple of chapters still use it. I'm glad the forge world thing isn't over the top. I might go and reword it but the entire chapter is going to use forge world armour classes. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3365183 Share on other sites More sharing options...
JusticarErictheblue Posted May 6, 2013 Share Posted May 6, 2013 Lulor was a shrine world that housed the Sisters of Holy Terra and it was consumed by a swarm of Tyranids. The site of the monastery that the sisters called home was the sight of the single greatest loss in Angels Descendant history for the entire fourth company was destroyed in its defence. With their deaths and the deaths of many others the Chapter Master declared that the Angels had failed the Emperor in his task and no longer deserved to wear the Aquilla. To this day the marines do not display the eagle, nor will they until they have atoned for their failure. Though quite how they can ever atone is perhaps the greatest unanswered question. That bits very good,maybe you could try to show signs of the failure on the models. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3365523 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mogsam Posted May 8, 2013 Author Share Posted May 8, 2013 Thanks! You mean like alternative marks instead of the Aquila? Maybe! Anyone else got any ideas or thoughts? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3366798 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Octavulg Posted May 13, 2013 Share Posted May 13, 2013 Pie is tasty. Oh, you meant useful ideas or thoughts. Darn. First of all, I'd suggest going to the painter and using something other than #00000 for black. Second, Angels Descendant is a weird name. Even if you mean "coming down" instead of "descended from" it's a weird name, and I don't know that the first meaning is the one most people will jump to initially. HOme World"In their youth, the Angels Descendant recaptured the world of Multalum from rebels who had dominated it since the Age of Apostasy. It became the Chapter's home world. " See that? That's all the useful information in the first nine hundred and forty words of this section. The details of battles aren't important or particularly interesting. What matters is what the battles MEAN. PLus, with that 940 words gone you've got more room to talk about what the home world's like now. Every company is responsible for sending recruits to 'The Decent' but they will receive new brothers who have come from anywhere on the planet. This is to break down loyalty to one location and instead ingrain it on the overall needs of the chapter and planet.Descent, dude. The Angels Descendant do not wear the Imperial Aquilla on their armour. Nor do they display it on their equipment. Two hundred years ago the chapter deemed itself to have failed the Emperor and that they would not wear his symbol until they had corrected this slight - and what was this failure? The world of Lulor. Lulor was a shrine world that housed the Sisters of Holy Terra and it was consumed by a swarm of Tyranids. The site of the monastery that the sisters called home was the sight of the single greatest loss in Angels Descendant history for the entire fourth company was destroyed in its defence. With their deaths and the deaths of many others the Chapter Master declared that the Angels had failed the Emperor in his task and no longer deserved to wear the Aquilla. To this day the marines do not display the eagle, nor will they until they have atoned for their failure. Though quite how they can ever atone is perhaps the greatest unanswered question. Hmmm. The one trick with this is that if they're all atheistic and such, should they really care that much about failing to defend some SoBs? * * * Not uninteresting. Major weakness is a thousand words on something that honestly doesn't matter that much and that you need to polish your writing some. They have a unique character and the home world comes across pretty well (and would come across better with less time spent on its capture). I do think a name change would be a good idea (since Descendant =/= Descending in my mind), but I can't think of an alternative. Anything you're trying to accomplish in particular? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/274706-angels-descendant-diy-chapter-ia-version-11/#findComment-3370521 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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