Wade Garrett Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 I, Wade Garrett, am kicking off my pledge to the Liber's "Create An Adeptus Sororitas Order" challenge here and now. Criticism and the pointing out of egregious fluff butchery is welcome. The tales of the triumphs and tragedies of these devoted servants of the God Emperor will be up soon enough, but for now, here's the color scheme I plan to use. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blagon Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 · Hidden by *Furyou Miko, March 18, 2015 - Tidiness - poster informed. :) Hidden by *Furyou Miko, March 18, 2015 - Tidiness - poster informed. :) It's beautiful. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3980007
Wade Garrett Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 Reserved for putting all the everything in a well organized and easily readable format once I work it all out. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3980035 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade Garrett Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 "Lest You place me in chains I shall never be free, nor ever whole, save You shatter me." -excerpt from A Sinner's Entreaty to the Emperor by Saint Bhatia The story of the Order of the Threefold Chain begins in the most unlikely of places, with one of the most cutthroat Rogue Trader dynasties to ever plunder their way across Segmentum Obscuras. The Arthash family made their fortune dealing in mercenaries, assassins, slavery, and piracy, and held on to it by the same methods, earning a fearful reputation....which is perhaps why no one was overly concerned when they were targeted by the Chaos warband known in Imperial records as "The Dead Kings". The story of the larger conflict between the ruthlessly pragmatic Arthash and this cabal of sorcerers, while of great interest to students of economics, guerilla warfare, and lyric poetry, is beyond the scope of this chronicle. Suffice it to say that in the end, Arthash were thrown down from their lofty pedestal and exterminated root and branch...all save one. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3980407 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade Garrett Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 "Noo, I'll nae sae tha Cardinal dinae hear tha voice ae tha holy God Emperor thrae yon lassie when she turned oop at his coourt in sackloth an aeshes. I weel sae twas a wee bit...convenient, ya might sae, that he gets tae send all the armored maidens off with Blessed Bhatia to cleanse thae Hulk right after thae Canoness saed she'd thrae off the top o'the Starspire if thae rumoors aboot him dealing with th' Eldar daevils were troo. Which goes tae show the God Emperor lacks a good joke as much as the next fellow, y'ken?" -Deposition of Guthrie MacTeague, member of the "Chapel Mastiffs" Death Cult. Sequestered by order of the Inquisition. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3980429 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade Garrett Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 Bare Bones: -Founding Saint was Bhatia Arthash, a former Rogue Trader who claims that the Emperor appeared to strike down the Chaos Marines who attacked her ship. -The Order is based out of a Space Hulk they purified themselves. -Hulk serves as a movable prison for extremely dangerous heretics, including Traitor Space Marines. "To take a world in the God-Emperor's name is praiseworthy. Yet I tell you this: She who redeems even one soul from the darkness shall be praised as she who conquered an entire solar system." -Canoness Kaede Ulthuar Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3980642 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bjorn Firewalker Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 The fluff looks okay so far. The idea a Rogue Trader may be named a saint- to find redemption before the Emperor's eyes, even after all the sins she committed- is nice. The colors are too colorful, in my opinion- I think the number of colors should be reduced, so they don't diminish each other's visual impact. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3980719 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade Garrett Posted March 19, 2015 Author Share Posted March 19, 2015 You have a point. Going to just the either white and red or purple and black works, all four together is a bit gaudy, which doesn't fit the "feel" I want for the Threefold Chain. Let's try something else: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3981028 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bjorn Firewalker Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 The new colors are okay. With the old, I liked the red robes, but the white arms and legs felt out-of-place. Maybe the colors should be white robes (including the sleeves around the armored arms, and the loincloth), black armor (including gauntlets/hands and sabatons/feet) with purple pauldrons and facemask, and gold trim (the Aquila, fleur-de-lis, and Inquisition symbol)? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3981692 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aqui Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 Definitely prefer the latter scheme, although my preference would be to have a slightly darker shade of purple. Looking forward to seeing more Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3981859 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duke Danse Macabre Posted March 20, 2015 Share Posted March 20, 2015 Second is definatly the better. Good work on the fluff so far, looks liek I may have to joinj the masses on this one sooner than thought. :P Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3982747 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Conn Eremon Posted March 22, 2015 Share Posted March 22, 2015 I agree with Aquilanus on the purple being a bit more muted. Not sure about what you have of the Rogue Trader. It isn't that I don't see it as impossible (it truly isn't), it's just that I can't help but think of all the reasons why one wouldn't do this, not the least of which how much more a Rogue Trader, as typically depicted, can accomplish in the God-Emperor's name in comparison to even a Canoness Superior. However, not all Dynasties are created equal, I am sure, and perhaps this one was on the decline (perhaps because of this attack). Even then, why choose the path of the Sisterhoods over an Inquisitorship within the Ordo Malleus, which is more directly responsible for that type of thing? Again, I'm not saying don't do this, it just raised a lot of questions in my mind. Aside from that, the Scottish accent, which I know you like to use and has been done well, felt rather more forced than usual this time around. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3984531 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade Garrett Posted March 24, 2015 Author Share Posted March 24, 2015 I appreciate the questions and the "this bit doesn't make sense to me, elaborate further, please?" But as far as darkening the purple, I personally like lighter/brighter color against the black for contrast. *Sits down to begin answering questions and elaborating further* Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3986024 Share on other sites More sharing options...
depthcharge12 Posted March 24, 2015 Share Posted March 24, 2015 So this is where you've been hiding Wade :P I like the paint scheme and the brogue! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3986053 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade Garrett Posted March 31, 2015 Author Share Posted March 31, 2015 It was called the Nonesuch. Possibly the Explorator-Magos who designated the Space Hulk with such a whimsical name did so as part of esoteric Mechanicus fate-calculation. Or possibly he did so out of the simple human belief that such a name would somehow lessen the superstructure's malevolent presence. If it was the latter, he was sadly mistaken. Nonesuch became a byword for calamity and misfortune in every system that the blighted mass of wreckage passed through. Disturbingly, this was even the case in isolated systems which had no access to the Mechanicus archives that named the disaster which had passed over them. A thousand legends sprang up around the Hulk. Stories of ghosts, monsters, of entire civilizations of pale blood drinkers birthed in the vessel's bowels. The Astartes and naval battlefleets that tried to purge it met disaster as surely as the Rogue Traders and pirates who tried to plunder it. That such a horror could exist was enough to shake one's faith in the benevolence of the God Emperor... And it was to this abomination that the Cardinal dispatched Bhatia Arthash, with instructions to purify it for the Emperor. For the sins of her family had been great, and only a great penance could atone for them. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-3993166 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ace Debonair Posted April 7, 2015 Share Posted April 7, 2015 I like it so far. Definitely interested to see how this develops! Also throwing in another voice of approval for the second colour scheme, for what it's worth. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304771-order-of-the-threefold-chain/#findComment-4000166 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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