Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 Cpt. Gracus slams into the mud with a grunt. Pinned by the foot of the iron giant that was once his brother, he struggled to reach his sidearm. The giant's dark steel armour a stark contrast to his golden warplate."This is madness, we were brothers! We unified the galaxy! Why?" he spat through the blood in his mouth." Because, I must. The false Emperor betrayed us, His palace will fall." The giant stated in his monotone voice. He was big, even for an Astartes. His armour, uncharacteristically ornate for a member of the IVth, was covered in a mix of soot, mud, and blood. His blood the Imperial Fist noticed with a sickening feeling."The palace will fall.""NEVER!", Gracus howled. " You may take the outer wall but you'll never reach the Palace." He gasped. He was slipping away, and he knew it."Walls fail, the Fists do not!""Yes, walls fail." the giant droned, lifting his thunder hammer over his head. "and it appears that you do as well". With that, the hammer comes down with the force of a drop pod."WAI..." His last word is cut short. Ended with a wet crunch as his head is obliterated into a crater of mud and gore.The trench, left by the hammerhead dragged through the mud, was filling with blood and water as Commander Bors made his way back to his soldiers." What are our orders, sir?", his master of signal queried."Tell the men full attack, it seems the sons of Dorn are optimistic." He commanded "Show them otherwise."Commander Bors turned and looked at the Imperial palace. The shelling of the outer walls had already been going for two days. He was ready to take the palace. and he knew the Dragoons on the opposite flank were as well."Yes, my little Fist." he whispered."Walls do fail." *edited for grammer so Brother Dallo doesn't hit me* Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 Looks good. A quick nitpick, unless the iron armoured marine is a Blood Angel, you'll want to change IX to IV. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980676 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slips Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 Yeah, it'd have to be Scarlet or other-verb-for-red instead of Iron. Also, with the Angel Leader being referred to as a Giant I got the assumption of a Dreadnought before I did Terminator. Traitor Blood Angels, however, will be very cool to see done; I look forward to this. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980680 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daemon2027 Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 Intrigued..... Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980684 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 Thanks for the nitpick.....don't know how I missed that! don't know if I'm gonna make a whole project out of this, I just had the Idea and I really like painting metal! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980686 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 I am not doing blood angels.....that's my sons project. but I am going to do some IW's, because reasons...... although, I had envisioned a project based on the "nature vs. nurture thread......so you may see some traitorous sanguinites no, you will. that sound too cool to pass up. I'll put it in my future projects list. for now it's fluff. I have a few (ok, 12) commissions to hammer out. for a Warmahordes league coming up. they chose me cause I refuse to use and airbrush for now(i am in the market for one though.) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980693 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daemon2027 Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 Even if it's just a few models will be cool to see you heresy-ing again... Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980696 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 No problem. There are one or two grammar niggles, which I can expand upon if you want, or you can leave it. Mainly capital letters. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980698 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 yeah, sometimes I can't grammar! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980721 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 It's probably just as quick for me to correct it myself, than to identify where each error is. Cpt. Gracus slams into the mud with a grunt. Pinned by the foot of the iron giant that was once his brother, he struggled to reach his sidearm. The giant's dark steel armour a stark contrast to his golden warplate."This is madness, we were brothers! We unified the galaxy! Why?" he spat through the blood in his mouth." Because, I must. The false Emperor betrayed us, His palace will fall." The giant stated in his monotone voice. He was big, even for an Astartes. His armour, uncharacteristically ornate for a member of the IVth, was covered in a mix of soot, mud, and blood. His blood the Imperial Fist noticed with a sickening feeling."The palace will fall.""NEVER!", Gracus howled. " You may take the outer wall but you'll never reach the Palace." He gasped. He was slipping away, and he knew it."Walls fail, the Fists do not!""Yes, walls fail." the giant droned, lifting his thunder hammer over his head. "and it appears that you do as well". With that, the hammer comes down with the force of a drop pod."WAI..." His last word is cut short. Ended with a wet crunch as his head is obliterated into a crater of mud and gore.The trench, left by the hammerhead dragged through the mud, was filling with blood and water as Commander Bors made his way back to his soldiers." What are our orders, sir?", his master of signal queried."Tell the men full attack, it seems the sons of Dorn are optimistic." He commanded "Show them otherwise."Commander Bors turned and looked at the Imperial palace. The shelling of the outer walls had already been going for two days. He was ready to take the palace. and he knew the Dragoons on the opposite flank were as well."Yes, my little Fist." he whispered."Walls do fail." Hopefully that's most of it. Mainly did a bit of comma splicing, and capitalizing where needed. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980730 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 18, 2015 Author Share Posted March 18, 2015 LOL, cheers mate! I'll try to do better in the future, I really will. Oh, and props on the Avatar BTW, I love viking stuff. I wish GW would do something properly viking-esque. Space Wolves don't count. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980733 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 Na'y bother. Happy to help out. I look forward to seeing where you go with your Iron Warriors. More ideas to steal draw inspiration from for my own IW are always appreciated. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3980738 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 19, 2015 Author Share Posted March 19, 2015 so yeah, I couldn't sleep well last night! kept dreaming of HUGE cannons, hazard stripes, and metal.......... haven't had obsession like this in a while. actually ordered a 5 man set of MKIII armor with phobos bolters last night. damn, it starts again, don't it. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981481 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 Snap! A single set of Mk III was also how I started out my Iron Warriors. Feel free to check out my thread. I managed to paint an entire model! C&C is appreciated. http://www.bolterandchainsword.com/topic/302878-ferrum-intra-in-the-footsteps-of-giants/?do=findComment&comment=3937630 Can I humbly suggest that you edit your original post to include my grammar fixes? Cheers. Regarding the shield, I'm part of a Scottish 12th century reenacting cell. We're not quite vikings, though there are groups that do that. It's pretty good fun, though my shield is nowhere near as pristine now, as it was when that photo was taken. I look forward to seeing your guys get some paint. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981499 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 19, 2015 Author Share Posted March 19, 2015 wow, I like your take on them. those black and red stripes are pretty killer. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981584 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 19, 2015 Author Share Posted March 19, 2015 First post edited. now, I apparently need to order paint. And as I have lost everything hobby related not once but TWICE, I am in a unique position to start fresh. I'm thinking Vallejo Acrylics. I like them, I was going to stock them in the hobby store i was going to start. but the storage fire obliterated everything. Nerdrage will rise again. (just got to come up with another 150K start up funds) I still have a bunch of Kolinski sable brushes, so I'm good there. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981595 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 You're actually not the first person to say that the hazard stripes are red. They're actually purple in real life, because reasons. Perhaps the picture appears more reddish on some peoples screens? Thanks for the kind words. I hope to get a bit of work done on them at the weekend. Sorry to hear about your hobby related losses. Any reason you're shying away from GW paints? I've only ever heard good things about their metallics. I'm currently being oldskool and using boltgun metal and mithril silver, mainly because I still have them in decent quantities, and it seems a waste not to use them. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981604 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slips Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 Yeah, they appear red on my screen, might be the colour balance of the camera / transition to digital signal is where it gets muddied. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981617 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Dallo Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 Strange.That's something I'll need to look into. It's certainly purple on my screen. Thanks Slips. Anywho, Bloodbath, I'll stop diverting your thread with colour theory. Dallo Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981631 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 19, 2015 Author Share Posted March 19, 2015 but......colour theory is awesome so, the main point of this thread is to gel some ideas for a few projects detailing heroes(and villains) from the siege of Terra. not the the big guys, but the SGT's holding the line and such. so suggestions are welcome and encouraged. If a suggestion is awesome, it may get added to my "must do" list. when I have a good years worth of projects listed, I'll start a "collected visions" thread much like my pal BCK. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981670 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slips Posted March 19, 2015 Share Posted March 19, 2015 You could do the Perspective of a Consul Praevian and his entourage of Robots? I think that'd be cool.. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3981748 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adeptus-Alaska Posted March 20, 2015 Author Share Posted March 20, 2015 You could do the Perspective of a Consul Praevian and his entourage of Robots? I think that'd be cool.. and that's on the list......totally on the list. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/304805-ill-just-leave-this-here/#findComment-3982593 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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