Crimson Scorpions Chapter

[dothac83]

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Crimson Scorpions Space Marine Chapter

 

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2nd Company Battle-Brother - 1st Tactical Squad

 

• Chapter Name: Crimson Scorpions
• Founding: Third Founding
• Founding Chapter: Ultramarines
• Chapter Homeworld: New Arizona (Galactic Southwest on the border of the Segmentum Tempestus and Segmentus Pacificus)
• Fortress-Monastery: Segio
• Colours: Bone White and Crimson
• Chapter Master: Lord Commander Ishkahn
• Combat Doctrine: Assault
• Battlecry: Sergeant/Chaplain: "Strike Hard, Strike Fast!" Marines: "Show No Fear, Show No Mercy!"

 

Overview

 

The Crimson Scorpions are a Third Founding chapter coming from the Ultramarines Chapter, they are a loyalist chapter to the Imperium of Mankind and The Emperor.

 

(more info coming soon, just wanted to get the thread started)

[Bjorn Firewalker]

I like the Chapter colors and the Chapter symbol, but as crimson is a shade of red, the name will make people think your Chapter is related to the Red Scorpions. May I suggest the name "Blood Scorpions" be used instead?

[Claws and Effect]

You should also probably go with the 3rd Founding instead of the 2nd.

 

The Second Founding is pretty well established in canon already.

 

The Third Founding is a lot more open, and still leaves your chapter with almost 10,000 years of history.

[Conn Eremon]

Not much yet to go on, but what exactly is your intent in wanting an Ultramarines 2nd Founding Successor? The 2nd Founding means a Chapter that was at least involved in the Scouring, if not the Heresy or the Great Crusade before it. It can also mean a prominence among the ranks of Adeptus Astartes, to have once been of the Legiones Astartes. Why do you want that for the Crimson Scorpions? What does that history and legacy mean for them?

 

• Chapter Homeworld: New Arizona (Galactic Southwest on the border of the Segmentum Tempestus and Segmentus Pacificus)
• Fortress-Monastery: Segio

 

New Arizona feels out of place. While many real world placenames exist in 40k (Segmentum Pacificus, for one), it helps to mess about with the name to make it better fit the setting. I prefer to dive into etymologies, go back far enough, travel down tangents, until something clicks. For example, instead of New Arizona what about Neosonak, or even a more straight forward Neozona? It's not a very deep dive, but Arizona seems to derive from the word "alĭ ṣonak," from one of the local Native American languages.