Liberalia Martiale 2017 - Collaboration - Discussion

[Damo1701]

Hope this one is ok.  Kind of felt discussing minor things here was better than cluttering up the threat with non-story parts.

 

I've pulled everything together so far and added a little extra ;) lol.

 

Is this something you would like me to do, periodically?  Just to keep everything updated in a quote bubble?

[Olis]

Consolidating the story up to the current post every so often sounds like a decent idea, brother. Good initiative. :tu:

[Damo1701]

Thanks.

 

If you've ever taken part in a Facebook chain story, you'll know that not everybody follows where we are up to. Lol.

 

I'll try and keep on top of it. Though, if it gets away from me, people are free to jump in. lol.

[Claws and Effect]

Quick question: Which of Brother Corwin's arms has which weapon? It hasn't come up yet, but it would be good to know.

[Race Bannon]

I assume: left = Power Fist, right = Lightning Claw

 

Why?

 

Because I assume he is right-handed (no offense to the lefties), so the "faster" weapon would go to the dominant hand.

 

Then again, maybe Space Marines are always ambidextrous.

[Damo1701]

I figured whoever brought it up would decide.  Lol.

I couldn't use Vanguard Sergeant Bannon, as I believe he is in a Dreadnought currently LOL.

[Race Bannon]

Wouldn't that be ... you Damo?

[Damo1701]

Lol, I never said which was which, just what he had lol.

[Race Bannon]

Time to decide then because Corwin's fate depends on it man!

[Damo1701]

Left Power Fist, Right Lightning claw :)

[Claws and Effect]

I didn't actually care, but when I'm writing fight scenes with characters I didn't initially create I like to be consistent on what weapon is where. 

[Claws and Effect]

Given what he's done already, I suspect we'll be calling him Sergeant Corwin at the end of this. 

[Damo1701]

Given what he's done already, I suspect we'll be calling him Sergeant Corwin at the end of this. 

 

Lol, at the very least.

 

Until there is another Shadow Captain opening... lol

[Race Bannon]

Technically 3rd Co is open ;)

[Claws and Effect]

Technically 3rd Co is open

Not in my canon.

Shadow Captain Keles Rook leads the 3rd in my version.

Interesting factoid: Keles is an alternate spelling of the Latin word for "claws", which is cheles.

[Machine God]

Any chance of any more input to the Story then?

 

Or is it only Moderati and followers of the Xth!?

[Damo1701]

Any chance of any more input to the Story then?

 

Or is it only Moderati and followers of the Xth!?

 

Anybody is welcome to contribute.

 

I'm about to collate the story so far, and post it up so there isn't hundreds of posts to read (ambitious i know LOL).

 

You'll find out the story so far, and if you want to add to it, go for it :)

[Claws and Effect]

I'll contribute a bit more. Been busy with work and haven't had more than a few minutes at a stretch to post.

[Shadow Captain Vyper]

For whoever follows my post, my intent is that Corwin would open up with a shoulder charge fueled by his jump pack, a la Hammer of Wrath style. Get the party started in style.

[Damo1701]

Seems like a good plan.  I started reading it, then RL reared its head.  I'll go back to it now.

 

We do seem to have slowed down a bit...

 

Mind you.  We are doing better than the Imperial Fists where I have started the story, and had to do a double post.  Seems like nobody else is interested.  Might just go and finish it off shortly.

[Race Bannon]

 

I can get behind the concussion suggestion for sure. While I am kinda partial to my in-canon profanity, it is fair to say a Marine is less likely to talk like that (and more likely a guardsman) so I can see that being more fitting for the narrative. Thanks for the input!

 

 

 

 

I can get behind the concussion suggestion for sure. While I am kinda partial to my in-canon profanity, it is fair to say a Marine is less likely to talk like that (and more likely a guardsman) so I can see that being more fitting for the narrative. Thanks for the input!

 

Not a problem mate.  

 

Also, I hate to be the fluff nazi, but "Feth" is the Tanith Tree God (LOL) so, geek alert here lol.  Feel free to come up with some other form of profanity, I mean the swear filter would have a field day if you look at how the Astartes use certain profane words in the Heresy series.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I can get behind the concussion suggestion for sure. While I am kinda partial to my in-canon profanity, it is fair to say a Marine is less likely to talk like that (and more likely a guardsman) so I can see that being more fitting for the narrative. Thanks for the input!

 

Not a problem mate.  

 

Also, I hate to be the fluff nazi, but "Feth" is the Tanith Tree God (LOL) so, geek alert here lol.  Feel free to come up with some other form of profanity, I mean the swear filter would have a field day if you look at how the Astartes use certain profane words in the Heresy series.

 

Realityburn and I were having this conversation in PMs earlier. I really did think that feth had moved out of the Tanith First and translated over to warhammer canon in general. I probably could have used Gakked, Frak, or Throne instead. Whoops!

 

 

 

We are going to attempt a collaborative story. I tried something like this last year with the Chaos subforum with some success, and I hope the Raven Guard will step up to the plate and make Corax proud. So, here's the deal. The first poster will determine the character involved and where the story goes at the start. Each person will write one paragraph to advance the story. And... that's it. All you have to do is try not to double post (although posting every other reply in the thread is permitted). 
 

Should a full story play out, with a decent number of replies (let's say at least two pages), then the people who join in will be given a badge to display in their signature space, to prove their participation.

 

Setting the scene:
So, let us assume that you were part of the mission to Kastorel-Novem. Gargants, meks, stompas... the lot. It has not gone well. In fact, you are the last survivor of your squad. For the rest of the survivors of the task force to get off-world, you must intercept, disable and/or destroy a gargant. If you succeed, you must then attempt an extraction yourself. 

 

Just emphasis of the OP Olis' rules.

 

After placing the charges and setting the timers, Corwin moved through the doorway the greenskin had come through. He had a rudimentary understanding of how these machines were laid out, and he knew the lowest levels contained troop holds from which hordes of greenskins would come surging forth. Going through the hatch he could see a jagged set of stairs that descended down to the lowest levels of the Stompa. He began his descent, and at various irregular intervals, the stairwell would have offshoots where Corwin could hear the report of gunfire. Knowing the outside of the Stompa was festooned with gun nests manned by a few Orks each, Corwin could deduce that is where these side gantries lead. Knowing once the Stompa was disabled all of these Orks would be as good as dead, he choose to move silently past these gun nests to make his escape with the time he had left. Coming to the bottom of the stairwell there was another hatch. Extending his lightning claw, Corwin delicately sheared off the locking mechanism on his side of the door, slowly swinging the door outwards.

@itvyper - Nice 7 paragraphs there!

 

Did you get a bit carried away with the story momentum and so ignored Oli's the OP's rules? Easily done.

 

Bold addition to the first paragraph so that it reads better.

 

Edit: Clarity and an errant double space.

 

 

 

Eh, I applaud the effort.

The rest of us hsve slacked off on it.

 

Please post here for discussion ^_^

[Shadow Captain Vyper]

Yea, I completely ignored the rules, didn't I? I am sure when I read the OP when it went up I read that. I was sitting there at work re-reading the story thus far thinking to myself "Man, I feel like this needs a jumpstart, maybe if I write out a good chunk I can put the story someplace where someone else will be eager to take off after that".

Now I feel like a complete idiot

Feel free to uh, just ignore everything after my first paragraph. Sometimes I herp and derp at the same time, at the cost of those around me.

Edit: I edited my post as well for the correction SoF suggested too. I also opted for the "Throne" change instead of Feth!

Edited March 31, 2017 by ltvyper

[Race Bannon]

I say let's leave it as is as keep going ^_^

 

Anyone object?

[Damo1701]

Not at all.

 

I've attempted to follow it up, but can't quite get it right.

[Olis]

What's done is done. Although I asked for a paragraph at a time, any input is ultimately welcome. Just, you know, let's keep things consistent and make it a paragraph at a time from now on, eh? ^_^