Librarian- Melechor Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 Hello everyone, been a browser for a while, decided to join the great B&C! Heres my new chapter, the steel eagles CHAPTER NAME- STEEL EAGLES CHAPTER FOUNDING-23rd CHAPTER GENESEED- DOOM EAGLES/ULTRAMARINES History- The years passed in the imperium to what would become the 23rdfounding. Little known to the rest of the imperium, the heretic Ardor Coarsen had slowly gained power over the agri world of Tanis in the eastern fringe, and when his army finally took control of the government center in Tanis City, he raised a massive 8 pointed star in the center of the city. A few government officials who escaped sent a desperate plea for help in the form of a transmission that was sent every way out of the planet. The plea was answered by the Doom Eagles strike cruiser His own Blade, and the Doom Eagles space marines dropped onto the planet, right on the massive 8 pointed monument to chaos that Ardor had made. An entire company battled endless hordes of heretics and demons, and after 8 days of fighting, the Doom Eagles won the day, but with many losses. After they restored control of Tanis to the Administratum, they left, but not after sending a request to the High Lords of Terra, insisting that a chapter be created to watch over this planet, as Ardor Coarsen had many children and he himself had disappeared. The HLOTS agreed to the request, and after finding a suitable zygote, created the Steel Eagles from the geneseed of their parent chapter, the doom eagles. The blood of Robutte Guilliman now flowed in their veins, and they established a fortress monastery on the ruins of Ardor Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/77063-steel-eagles/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Kantor Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 First off, welcome to the B&C. As for your fluff, it leaves a lot of time between your descriptions. Your start is good, but after the thousand sons battle you kind of skip up to 999.41 Good start though, keep it coming Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/77063-steel-eagles/#findComment-886190 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ferrata Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 The 1st co is led by a captain, not the chapter master, who usually accompanies different companies to battle. This is normal. All Chapter's First Company is led by a Captain, and the Chapter Master doesnt have a company of his own. The Chapter seems good ^_^ I would leave the part out about the Doom Eagles requesting the chapter to be built, rather the HLOT decided to send on of their newly founded chapters out to a troublesome part of the Imperium to give the Doom Eagles more breathing space Ferrata Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/77063-steel-eagles/#findComment-886253 Share on other sites More sharing options...
jimmythemoose Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 I agree with Ferrata (never thought I'd say that) about the request of the doom eagles. Also the name is either already used by Migsula for his chapter or already a GW chapter that he uses. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/77063-steel-eagles/#findComment-886267 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ferrata Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 I agree with Ferrata (never thought I'd say that) I feel dirty and unclean, must go wash ;) ^_^ I dont think its a GW chapter, but it does seem like it would be a common name. Ferrata Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/77063-steel-eagles/#findComment-886290 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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