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Void Wardens Fluff [Long]


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Ok this is the fluff I've created thus far for my DIY chapter the Void Wardens. id on't have any marines painted yet as i suck at paintign and don' wnt to sully my baby w/ poorly painted models. Without further adue her it is.....

 

"Successors of the noble blood of Dorn, the Void Wardens were a successful and efficient chapter for millennia after their inception (believed to be 729.M38). The Chapter

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Welcome to the B+C, enjoy your stay :P

 

Approximately every 50-100 years the whole of the chapter
Maybe change it from the whole chapter to those which are avaliable, as it would look back if they would leave campaigns/crusades to go home. I'm sure several other chapter have something similar (I remember the Howling Griffons all going home to celebrate there 5000th Birthday and getting attacked).

 

The Void Wardens are no longer 10 companies following the tenets of the blessed Codex Astartes

 

If their 10 companies, that means that generally nearly all the marines survived which seems a little unrealistic. Maybe say that only half the chapter escaped as some would have fallen with the Libbies and some would have died.

 

perfore=med

 

??? ::cuss: Whats that? Is the whole next paragraph about killing the Navigators. Wouldnt that make it slightly hard to get anywhere?

 

From then on, I get a little confused. So lets break this down into stories

 

1st Story - Quick History about the fall of the Libbies

2nd Story - Techmarine killing Navigators

3rd Story (Chappie) - Them attacking a Libbie prison. Inq. fighting back. All melta bomb themselves

4th Story - Loyal Libbies take 200 men with them. Become something like the fallen from DA

 

Are these correct?

 

Ferrata

I think preforme=ed is supposed to be perfomed. I don't think they kill the navigators, just plant another "v-chip" style thing in them to kill them if they turn traitor.

 

Logos: You refer to navigators as psykers, which they aren't. They're just mutants, there's a difference.

 

Nice fluff.

The chapter doesn't have 10 companies anymore they have 8.

 

Yeah the performed thing was a luittle screwed up.

 

granted that navigators aren't psykers but they are still an open conduit to the warp, thus the fidelitas observitoris. Waht i'mt rying to get at here is that they remants of the chapter realy, realy, realy distrust anything warp related bc of the cataclysmic events on Mishominas. Because of their paranoia the chapter expends psykers (ie. astropaths, navigator, etc..) at a huge rate. Thus the 3rd story comes in, where a strike force is raiding the prison to get more psykers. This whole proccess is kept secret from the inquisitoin bc the inquisition would naturaly wonder why the chapter was using psykers so fast and would get suspicious. I had a series of Inquisitorial transcripts on an ongoing investigatioon, but I lost them.

The chapter doesn't have 10 companies anymore they have 8.

 

Yes, I still think that some more marines should had died with the betrayl. Seems like it wasnt a very bloody betrayl ::cuss:

 

The rest does make sense now. Maybe have them try not to go into warp space as much.

 

Ferrata

granted that only 2 comapnies lost doesn't seem like much but relise that the betrayl happened 3 millenia before the present. Perhaps this needs a "Though the cahpter's numebrs were devestated by the betrayl, the chapter has slowly built it self up to it's preent strength."
"Though the cahpter's numebrs were devestated by the betrayl, the chapter has slowly built it self up to it's preent strength."

 

I would make that become

 

Though the chapter's numbers were devestated by the betryal, they have now built themselves upto full strength, bar the two rogue companies"

 

or something along those lines

 

 

Ferrata

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