Sevej Posted May 20, 2006 Share Posted May 20, 2006 UPDATE 15 June '06 - Thanks for the replies! I'm continuing slowly now, still in the first chapter. I need a good name for their home planet, and also a Sister Superior who is also a royal family of the home planet. Should be germanish... :/ UPDATE 31 May '06 - Just found out from Severus6 via PM that the link does not work for some (or most :P) people. I apologize for this. So I just posted them here, I hope it's not too long. Any update will be in this first post with links to the appropriate pages. Also thanks Ferrata for the response, look forward for your reply! Sorry for the long reply, because I can access the forum about once a week (sort of living int he jungle... :D) To Mod: I've been trying to divide the post below into two post but somehow it just join altogether making the post into a behemot of 15k+ character long! Sorry I don't know how to fix it. Trying to delete and add new reply, but it just end up that way. Prologue - Below Chapter 1 (Partial) - Below I'm not a good writer and I'm not very resourceful on 40k fluff/background, so it's kinda hard making a full blown fluff. So instead I just wrote pieces of stories from a limited point of view. The two stories are still mainly battles and no real plot (yet), but I'm trying to get reader hooked (probably failed ;)). I'm also having difficulties with numbers, especially comparison. Like how many Orks needed to overwhelm a company of Marines. English is not my primary language, so grammatical and spelling error are expected. A little information on the Chapter involved... They are originally the Flying Paladins (Silver Armor), but due to the events later in the story, they are hunted by the Inquisitors, and later designated as the Black Paladins (Blue/gray Armor). I also make the marines more humane, because I think it's rather boring to have "Yes, Lord" "Affirmative" or "For The Emperor" only. CC? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/87341-the-black-paladins-origin-fluffnovel/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sevej Posted May 31, 2006 Author Share Posted May 31, 2006 Prologue Brother Captain Zufall lurched forward as the Heilig R Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/87341-the-black-paladins-origin-fluffnovel/#findComment-1019385 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wolfguard Posted June 2, 2006 Share Posted June 2, 2006 A great start! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/87341-the-black-paladins-origin-fluffnovel/#findComment-1021886 Share on other sites More sharing options...
DOGGED Posted June 6, 2006 Share Posted June 6, 2006 You just failed to fail. I love it, keep it coming please. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/87341-the-black-paladins-origin-fluffnovel/#findComment-1024554 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sevej Posted June 15, 2006 Author Share Posted June 15, 2006 Chapter 1 - The End of Tarkan Campaign (cont'd) With a striking exclamation the Master of Sanctity ended the Grand Prayer. The Assimularum was filled with a great cheering. Every Space Marines in attendance shook hands and embraced their battle brothers, even those who were wearing power armour and on guard duty. It was a fasting day, but also a day of celebration Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/87341-the-black-paladins-origin-fluffnovel/#findComment-1030892 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.