Alpha Eagles

[sammy2020]

Alpha Eagles

Geneseed: Unknown

 

Founding: 3rd

 

Chapter Symbol/Colour scheme: Symbol is the wing with a sword from the transfer sheet colour scheme is largely Enchanted Blue armour, with Midnight Blue shoulder pads and Space Wolf Grey on edge of the shoulder pads.

 

Homeworld: Alkansais is an aquatic deathworld

 

Where in Imperium are they based: They are based near the segmentum obscurus between fenris and medusa

 

Combat Doctrine: The Alpha Eagles are a fast attack close combat force. They are masters of boarding actions forcing them to fight in close proximity to the enemy therefore making them prefer close combat to ranged attacks. They are also masters of sea fighting as they have plenty of practise at it because of the nature of their homeworld

 

Organization: The organization of The Alpha Eagles is largely that of the codex except for there use of more fast attack (Be swift as the wind) and their preference for close combat (blessed be the warriors). They also prefer fast tanks lightly armoured tanks so find little use for land raiders and land raider crusaders (Flesh over Steel)

 

Beliefs: The Alpha Eagles believe the best way to fight a battle is with a quick, hard close combat attack to smash the enemy and to make them leader less

 

Battle cry:

[Ferrata]

You seem to have some of the basics down, but I think your lacking one main thing, a theme through the chapter. You have several answers, such as traits and their founding, but you seem to lack a lot of why's. Why have the set up home on an aquatic world, surely an aquatic world has a small population (if any), thus won't offer that many good recruits. Why do they like riding bikes if they come from an aquatic world, same goes for Assault Marines. Why are they masters of boarding actions, is their a large traffic way near by?

[sammy2020]

Ok...well, that was a brief thing. But thanks for giving me something to work with.

[Severus6]

Yeah,...I am going to jump on board with that. Why the Alpaha Eagles when they come from an aquatic deathworld. Possibly the Sea Hawks, Sea Eagles, Ocean Eagles,....just a thought.

 

Severus6

[sammy2020]

Ok, I'll change the name and stuff. I need to re edit the fluff anyways as well. Thanks a lot though, I can see how to make it better now

[sammy2020]

Ok here is the actual fluff to answer all the whys

 

The Ocean Eagles set up their fortress monastery on a aquatic deathworld because their was a lot of hunter tribes on the nearby islands to take their pick for recruits from. Also because they could have a large water based navy to train on. This meant that there was not that much room for heavy tanks and not too much room for bikes and land speeders ( although when they can the Ocean Eagles like to utilise them). So the primary forces were tactical squads and assault marines. The tactical squads would lay down a hail of suppressive fire whilst the assault marine squads would get up close and personal and take down the enemy in the true eagles honour of close combat.

 

The Ocean eagles are also masters of space craft boarding actions as they can once again utilise the technique of the tactical squads and assault marines moving in for the kill. It also helps a lot that there is a big traffic way nearby to transport goods to the nearby worlds of Medusa and Fenris. When the Ocean Eagles to fight in open terrain they do like to use bikes and land speeders but they will still most often use the same approach they use for boarding actions that of the sea based kind or that of the star based kind.

 

The traits are now as follows Take the fight to them, blessed be the warriors and the drawback flesh over steel

All i posted before still counts except for the traits as you may have noticed

I hope its better :ph34r:

[Bernhard Terroristos]

Greetings,

 

I'd like to congratulate for displaying your work, and initiating constructive criticism from the fellow members of the board. One idea that did pop into my head was the use of ancient "trireme's", ancient ramming seagoing vessels used by the greeks. It would fit very well into your fluff, but if you choose to use and do with it, is up to you. Go type "trireme" on google, and see if that does not go terrificly well with your fluff. Cheers and happy hunting!!!

 

Bernhard Terroristos

[Berevius_the_Justifier]

Under Water Hives. It would give you a large pool of recruits who are used to fighting in tight places. Also it's something I haven't seen a lot of in the fluff.

[Severus6]

Exactly; huge underwater Hive Cities that are attached to the sea bottom or have become monsterous artificial reefs. The inhabitants are part of huge fisheries / kelp farm co-ops that export a great deal of the harvest off planet. Additionally you have aggressive underwater hunters that lurk in the depths. Possibly even pirate/ganger type groups that attack smaller settlements. You could go a different route and say that the Hives mine the ocean floor and get a large part of their power from huge thermal vents from underwater volcanoes. A great many different directions you could go with this. Plus the whole feel of the planet doesnt have to be entirely on just the fact that its a water planet. It could be cold and artic like with great ice continents streching across the planet. A stormy planet with waves that constantly crash against the upper levels of the Hive. Maybe a dark planet that rarely sees the sun due to the monsterous clouds that cover the atmosphere,...bioluminescent fish/krill/waterplants that sparkle across the dark water with an eerie glow. Just a few thoughts, hope they help.

 

Severus6

[sammy2020]

Thats a great idea thanks a bunch gonna go and put that stuff i my fluff now :)

[sammy2020]

Ok guys hee is the version i have worked on a bit

 

The Ocean Eagles set up their fortress monastery on a aquatic deathworld because their was a massive underwater hive city on this deathworld. These Hive cities have become monstrous artificial reefs. The in habitants are part of huge fisheries and kelp farms that export a great deal of the harvest off the planet. There is also aggressive underwater hunters that lurk down in the depths. There has been a few reported incidents where small pirate or ganger type groups have been known to attack small settlements. When looking at the planet from afar you just see a massive ball of blue and black. The blue representing the sea and the black representing the terrible ocean storms that occur almost everyday. When these storms occur the citizens if the Hive cities always seem to be on edge as the storms have been known to get particularly violant crashing against the upper levels of the Hive. This meant that there was not that much room for heavy tanks and not too much room for bikes and land speeders ( although when they can the Ocean Eagles like to utilise them). So the primary forces were tactical squads and assault marines. The tactical squads would lay down a hail of suppressive fire whilst the assault marine squads would get up close and personal and take down the enemy in the true eagles honour of close combat.

 

The Ocean eagles are also masters of space craft boarding actions as they can once again utilise the technique of the tactical squads and assault marines moving in for the kill. It also helps a lot that there is a big traffic way nearby to transport goods to the nearby worlds of Medusa and Fenris. When the Ocean Eagles to fight in open terrain they do like to use bikes and land speeders but they will still most often use the same approach they use for boarding actions that of the star based kind.

 

The traits are now as follows Take the fight to them, blessed be the warriors and the drawback flesh over steel