DIY Chapter -

[Reimer]

(first of all sorry, English is not my first language)

 

Name: I have had a bit of trouble with finding a good name .. but I have used the Priory as a working title (Priory of the Blood, of the Heart, or maybe Vitae) I would like to get some connection with blood as I would prefer to use a drop of blood as on of their symbols (it is classic, relatively easy to paint and so on)

 

Theme: Mesoamerican, sacrificial, cannibalism, ritualistic, see them self as gods amongst men.

 

Colour scheme: black or a very dark blue with a red shoulder pads (and red for other secondary things), add in a bit of silver for a full space marine and a bit of gold for space marines with terminator honours). (I'm a fairly bad painter, last time I tried to paint was 10 years ago as a 12 year old kid... is this a bad colour scheme for a new painter, also on this subject does any has some good ideas how you best remove old paint from an old model)

 

Geneseed: undetermined

 

History: The history of the priory has been connected to the dual planets of Moahon I and II and the destruction of the former at the hand of the traitor warlord Jhalin.

As far as all remaining records state was the priory first created to support the scores of lightly defended planets at the outer rim of the known imperial space.

The dual planets of the Moahon Sun was selected to house their chapter monastery as both had an already feral human population ideal suited for recruiting base for the imperial finest and natural resources to keep the advanced technology of the adeptus mechanicus running.

Within the first 500 years was Moahon I colonized and large Pyramid Temples was erected to the glory of the great sunfather and his chosen children, the living gods. Every 3 years was a holy ceremony held where young men fought to ascend to godhood, for every thousand who fought only a dozen survived. The ancient tradition of the original Moahon tribes combined with the mortal lust for immortality created a society where violence was the greatest virtue, where mercy was frowned apon and blood a coin for a better life. When a child got chosen for godhood was the family elevated to noble status for 12 years. The unfortunate strived to get elevated and the privileged to stay privileged.

 

At the time Jhalin critical attack was Moahon I a thriving heavily industrial planet and Moahon II supported most of Moahon I needs with a heavy agricultural and mining community.

 

Moahon I gets orbital bombed

[Ferrata]

I'm liking the end product so far, but I feel that the destruction of one of the worlds is not nessacary and adds little to the chapter. Personally, I think the heart eating thing should come about from the population of the planet, being passed onto the Marines. Firstly it was just a ritual practice, believing they would inherit the knowledge of the dead, but it has now turned into a little more. Then the organ mutates but only some of the memory is passed onto the eater.

 

The destruction of the Fortress Monestry I feel also detracts from the feeling of the chapter, with them just becoming another Chapter who had everything destroyed which changed their organisation, be a little more creative. How about the need of Marines in the area was at an extreme high, so they begun to deploy faster and operate faster, thus Bikes, Assault Marines and Transported Squads became normal in many of the Chapters. My Chapter's Combat Doctrine of Drop Pods, Assault Marines and Speeders started off very similar, with them being the only Marine Force in the area they needed to get in and get out fast.

 

As for names, I would say something like Blood Jaguars, but that could be a little too obvious.

[schoon]

Welcome to the Forums Reimer!

 

Your english is actually fairly good - I've seen posts where even figuring out basic intent is pretty difficult.

 

A few thoughts for you:

 

While there's nothing wrong with using "Priory" in your name, it tends to be associated with Sisters of Battle more than Space Marines. Might I suggest one of the following alternatives - abbey, friary (I like this one best), or monastery.

 

I agree with Ferrata that the destruction of one planet seems unnecessary, and would add that the destruction of the orbital Monastery might be a bit much as well. If the orbital facility was the Fortress-Monastery, then this loss would cripple their forges (and the ability to produce/repair equipment) and possibly destroy much of their geneseed.

 

One interesting thought would be to have the genetics of the natives cause the alteration of the Omophagea, which combined with their traditions have thus influenced the chapter.