astartes88 Posted February 8, 2011 Share Posted February 8, 2011 Most very interesting, I didnt expect to see those brought to this story. I wonder what papa smurf will say? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dominicus Posted February 8, 2011 Share Posted February 8, 2011 Excellent addition. Looking forwards to the rest of the plot. You'd better be typing at a speed that would make an Administratum adept proud. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nacho Wolf Posted February 8, 2011 Share Posted February 8, 2011 Very good, finaly someone who can hold a candle to the 13th company :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted February 8, 2011 Author Share Posted February 8, 2011 Thanks very much guys, will add a chapter today hopefully. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother-Sergeant Bohemond Posted June 15, 2011 Share Posted June 15, 2011 A great read, although, one MAJOR fluff discrepency that does not need to be there right at the beggining. In 'Age of Darkness' AD-B clears up the whole is the Lion a traitor or not with a clear 'NO' he is not at all. He says 'loyalty is its own reward' so, I think the bit where he apologises for being kinda traaitorous needs changing. Oh, and more chapters of the Lion please? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted June 19, 2011 Author Share Posted June 19, 2011 Thanks but to clear that up this was written well before Age of Darkness so I was using info I had to hand at the time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother-Sergeant Bohemond Posted June 19, 2011 Share Posted June 19, 2011 I know, :P I was just letting you know in case you hadnt yet read it, or heard it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dominicus Posted June 24, 2011 Share Posted June 24, 2011 Thanks very much guys, will add a chapter today hopefully. Where is this chapter you speak of? I need new reading material. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted June 24, 2011 Author Share Posted June 24, 2011 In my head struggling to get out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dominicus Posted June 25, 2011 Share Posted June 25, 2011 In my head struggling to get out. In that respect, my crozius may be of some assistance. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted August 7, 2011 Author Share Posted August 7, 2011 You may wish to hit me harder Dominicus. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted August 7, 2011 Author Share Posted August 7, 2011 Oh a spiler, I do hope you enjoy. Five Thunder hawk’s in the livery of the Imperial Fists descended toward the drab grey landing platform like carrion upon a prey. Their engines whine loudly as they pilots brought them down in a calm manner, five more gunships sat already upon the landing pad their front ramps down and their passengers already having disembarked; the Martian winds having covered their dull grey sides in the red soil. One hundred Terminator clad Iron Warriors stood motionless as they awaited the arrival of their cousin Astartes. Perturabo stood at the forefront of his Legion flanked by Warsmith Alkaios in his bespoke suit of Terminator armour and Garioch the Master of the Forge clad in a finely wrought suit of artificer armour and wearing a full servo-harness. The backwash of the multiple Thunderhawk engines blew up the red sand and threw it around like a mini maelstrom. Unfazed the Iron Warriors stood to attention. Rogal Dorn and warriors emerged from their gunships, the Black and White of their armour marking them out as Dorn’s personal guard; the Huscarls which also numbered one hundred but wore Maximus power armour instead of Terminator armour. The Templar iconography still adorned their power armour and their zealous beliefs still filled their hearts. Dorn was clad in bronze as ever but a black cross had been painted on his chest plate in homage to the former Templars and their founder. “Greetings Brother” the words were devoid of any emotion, Perturabo also cautious to avoid any weakness. Dorn returned the greeting with a nod, “I apologise for the delay brother but we encountered atmospheric interference. Has Valkpartus hailed you yet?” “No, the Fabricator General knows full well the consequences if he does not show within the appointed time frame” Perturabo replied. “Indeed he does Brother, let us hope he sees sense and needless bloodshed is avoided”. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
astartes88 Posted August 8, 2011 Share Posted August 8, 2011 ROGAL DORN!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackwyvern Posted August 10, 2011 Share Posted August 10, 2011 PERTURABO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted May 19, 2013 Author Share Posted May 19, 2013 Wow I'd forgotten about this... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted May 20, 2013 Share Posted May 20, 2013 Haha, I think we both neglected our threads mate, but now it's time for us to return in force! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wulfkry Posted May 20, 2013 Share Posted May 20, 2013 it lives......? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted May 21, 2013 Author Share Posted May 21, 2013 It clings to existence barely, I may have to breathe new life in to this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Leonaides Posted May 21, 2013 Share Posted May 21, 2013 Bring the crash-cart... STAT! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted May 21, 2013 Author Share Posted May 21, 2013 I face a dilemma; I'm not 100% happy with the previous chapters (the plot is shoe horned...) but I'm loathe to start again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
space wolf of the 13th Posted May 21, 2013 Share Posted May 21, 2013 Its nice to see new life starting to emerge in this thread. What ever your choice I look forward to seeing more from you brother calgar Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted June 8, 2013 Author Share Posted June 8, 2013 I will be posting a new chapter tomorrow or Monday. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NathanielGarro Posted June 9, 2013 Share Posted June 9, 2013 Totally loving this ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted June 9, 2013 Author Share Posted June 9, 2013 Bump. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NathanielGarro Posted June 9, 2013 Share Posted June 9, 2013 Yay!! ...more action to come... don't hold back ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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