The Nephilim Posted February 9, 2010 Author Share Posted February 9, 2010 Ultra-swanky new update on post #2. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280263 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Apostle Thirst Posted February 9, 2010 Share Posted February 9, 2010 You still said Glaives :( Seriously, this is something I would like to have officially added to the B and C's roster of ITs. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280457 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted February 9, 2010 Author Share Posted February 9, 2010 Yes, but I changed their description as well. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280547 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Leebe Posted February 9, 2010 Share Posted February 9, 2010 Love the choices of treacherous quotes and character name choices (cough Samael). I especially like the land raider variant. Totally doodling that. Seems pretty polished. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280568 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted February 9, 2010 Author Share Posted February 9, 2010 Leebe, if you doodle it, I might be able to get it colored and would love to through it up on here as part of the article. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280627 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Leebe Posted February 9, 2010 Share Posted February 9, 2010 (edited) http://i93.photobucket.com/albums/l62/liebebebe/noiseraiderdoodle-1.png Have some noise raider goodness. Edited February 9, 2010 by Leebe Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280758 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted February 9, 2010 Author Share Posted February 9, 2010 That's freakin' awesome. Are you willing to make a revision? The Cacophonic varient actually has six sonic blasteres on the sponson. That's so awesome... Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280767 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Leebe Posted February 9, 2010 Share Posted February 9, 2010 Done. Original image edited so as to avoid image spam. Heh. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280789 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted February 9, 2010 Author Share Posted February 9, 2010 Done. Original image edited so as to avoid image spam. Heh. That's awesome. Thanks so much. I'm on my phone right now. When I get home, I'll see if I can get it colored and added to a battlefield backdrop. Well, not me personally, I'm about as artistic with photoshop as a vegetable. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2280800 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted February 18, 2010 Author Share Posted February 18, 2010 The coloring of the Cacophonic land raider is still WIP. I'm looking for a bit more feedback. I think this is fairly polished and I'll be submitting it soon. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2290546 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ace Debonair Posted February 19, 2010 Share Posted February 19, 2010 Nice. The bit right before you detail the tribes, though, I think a sentence along the lines of: "Although The Nephilim recruit any worthy warrior from the Naergoni tribes, two clans in particular are noteworthy." Would make it flow better. Looking forward to seeing that very cool land raider design all coloured in. :devil: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2291384 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted February 19, 2010 Author Share Posted February 19, 2010 Added. Thanks Ace. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2291497 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Argon Posted March 8, 2010 Share Posted March 8, 2010 Quick question: Where did you get that picture of Naergon? I've been wondering where people where getting those pictures of planets for their Indices Astartes/Tratoris. It would add a nice touch to some ideas I had. Also, that Noise Raider is very, very nice. I'd love to see it as an actual model. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2309375 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reyner Posted March 9, 2010 Share Posted March 9, 2010 I sent him a link to the coloured version of that Land Raider but Neph hasn't been online since 20th February last I checked. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2310120 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dosjetka Posted March 10, 2010 Share Posted March 10, 2010 Quick question: Where did you get that picture of Naergon? I've been wondering where people where getting those pictures of planets for their Indices Astartes/Tratoris. It would add a nice touch to some ideas I had. I was wondering the same. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2311605 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Walter Payton Posted March 10, 2010 Share Posted March 10, 2010 Quick question: Where did you get that picture of Naergon? I've been wondering where people where getting those pictures of planets for their Indices Astartes/Tratoris. It would add a nice touch to some ideas I had. I was wondering the same. What I do is go on Lexicanum, find a planetary image, download it then upload it to imageshack/photobucket/whatever, then add it into the IA. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2311661 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted July 14, 2010 Author Share Posted July 14, 2010 Holy crap... He's back! This unfortunately isn't an update, but I have returned. Sorry I've been gone for a while and missed the competition. Life took some interesting turns for the worse and then the better... Anyways, I'm back. I'll be working on this when I have time now. Hopefully, I'll be able to finish it all up before the fall semester. The picture of Naergon came from DeviantArt. I don't remember what I was looking up, but I when I saw it, I knew it fit perfectly. LandRaider completed by Reyner's awesome girlfriend will be posted laterish. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2461897 Share on other sites More sharing options...
RagingGriffon Posted July 14, 2010 Share Posted July 14, 2010 I really liked some parts, some parts were average, and I only didn't like a couple things... good job! I will re-attack this tomorrow because it is bed time. However a couple quick things: - I think the mentioning of art should be a sidebar - I thought the Eldar attacking and then your guys winning was glossed over and could be more in depth - I like how you view the Black Legion... you are honest about it - I felt like bouncing between two worlds in two sections was a bit much. How would you feel about it being condensed onto one planet? - I feel like your guys should have a Daemon Prince OK. Enough for me. I look forward to more PS. Slaanesh is a skirt wearing fancy she-male! :D Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2461984 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Apostle Thirst Posted July 14, 2010 Share Posted July 14, 2010 I always liked this IT. When you update it, I'll look it over. BTW, welcome back. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2462029 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted July 15, 2010 Author Share Posted July 15, 2010 I really liked some parts, some parts were average, and I only didn't like a couple things... good job! :P I will re-attack this tomorrow because it is bed time. However a couple quick things: - I think the mentioning of art should be a sidebar - I thought the Eldar attacking and then your guys winning was glossed over and could be more in depth - I like how you view the Black Legion... you are honest about it - I felt like bouncing between two worlds in two sections was a bit much. How would you feel about it being condensed onto one planet? - I feel like your guys should have a Daemon Prince OK. Enough for me. I look forward to more PS. Slaanesh is a skirt wearing fancy she-male! ;) Thanks. I agree about the planets thing. They have a daemon prince. He wasn't mention due to the same reason as the briefness of the Eldar incursion. I was under the opinion that the Indexes were to be briefish and I didn't want to go into more detail than required for two reasons. One, I want the reader to want to know more. Two, I intend to write my own fanfic for the Nephilim. I always liked this IT. When you update it, I'll look it over. BTW, welcome back. Thanks Thirst. I've always appreciated your feedback. It's constructive and helps me out a lot. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2463035 Share on other sites More sharing options...
RagingGriffon Posted July 15, 2010 Share Posted July 15, 2010 Thanks. I agree about the planets thing. They have a daemon prince. He wasn't mention due to the same reason as the briefness of the Eldar incursion. I was under the opinion that the Indexes were to be briefish and I didn't want to go into more detail than required for two reasons. One, I want the reader to want to know more. Two, I intend to write my own fanfic for the Nephilim. I think a Daemon Prince is a big deal. I know what you mean about wanting the reader to know more, and that is the trick of an IA. You want to put pretty much all of the big info in there, and leave the narrative story for the fanfic. I think you will have enough room if you condense your story to one planet. Remember: The body of your IA is pretty much facts. Side bars are teasers of the fluff. Your fanfic can get into the nitty gritty story. I want to hear they battled Eldar, uncovered ancient rituals, have a Daemon Prince, their world, etc. I think a sidebar of how they still get into art is great, and it whets the appettite for your fanfic. The the fanfic really creates their story. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2463393 Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nephilim Posted July 15, 2010 Author Share Posted July 15, 2010 Thanks. I agree about the planets thing. They have a daemon prince. He wasn't mention due to the same reason as the briefness of the Eldar incursion. I was under the opinion that the Indexes were to be briefish and I didn't want to go into more detail than required for two reasons. One, I want the reader to want to know more. Two, I intend to write my own fanfic for the Nephilim. I think a Daemon Prince is a big deal. I know what you mean about wanting the reader to know more, and that is the trick of an IA. You want to put pretty much all of the big info in there, and leave the narrative story for the fanfic. I think you will have enough room if you condense your story to one planet. Remember: The body of your IA is pretty much facts. Side bars are teasers of the fluff. Your fanfic can get into the nitty gritty story. I want to hear they battled Eldar, uncovered ancient rituals, have a Daemon Prince, their world, etc. I think a sidebar of how they still get into art is great, and it whets the appettite for your fanfic. The the fanfic really creates their story. Eventually, Samael ascends to daemonhood, but I didn't know if I should have had the IA progress that far. Should the IA be a current snapshot of where the warband is presently? How would I incorporate that into what I have without furhter damaging the continuity? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2463466 Share on other sites More sharing options...
RagingGriffon Posted July 15, 2010 Share Posted July 15, 2010 IMHO, I think they IA should be a completed projectof where they are right now. I don't think you rob anyone of anything if they know he ascends to Daemon Princedom. Everyone reads the HH novels and we ultimately know what happens. The devil is in the details and other cliches about writing. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2463506 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ace Debonair Posted July 15, 2010 Share Posted July 15, 2010 (edited) Eventually, Samael ascends to daemonhood, but I didn't know if I should have had the IA progress that far. Should the IA be a current snapshot of where the warband is presently? How would I incorporate that into what I have without furhter damaging the continuity? Hey, I was just wondering what happened to these guys. :P Good to see you again, Neph. As for your question, I think the IT should at least show something of where the Warband is in the present. You've still got a lot of history you could work with for your stories, and knowing about Samael's ascension beforehand isn't going to detract from any of it. EDIT:, well, that took a long time to post. RG got there before me, and said everything I wanted to say, only more detailed and sensibly. Good job, that man. :P Edited July 15, 2010 by Ace Debonair Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2463553 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Apostle Thirst Posted July 16, 2010 Share Posted July 16, 2010 I'll third that idea of the IT/IA should be a snapshot of where the Warband/Chapter is now - although that could depend on who's point of view your writing it from. IE, my Wraiths of Darkness IT is from the point of view from a scribe writing a basic history of the Wraiths of Darkness, with all the biases and lack of (or restricted and unknowable to anyone else) information. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/189149-index-traitoris-the-nephilim/page/4/#findComment-2463881 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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