paulJam Posted February 19, 2015 Share Posted February 19, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted February 19, 2015 Share Posted February 19, 2015 Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3956582 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted February 20, 2015 Author Share Posted February 20, 2015 thanks brother. Â i probably won't be writng full accounts for each event on their timeline. Â looking at trying to define the marines and chapter's character rather than lots of biffo and gun blast. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3956882 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 8, 2015 Author Share Posted March 8, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3971743 Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted March 9, 2015 Share Posted March 9, 2015 Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3972720 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 10, 2015 Author Share Posted March 10, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3972799 Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted March 13, 2015 Share Posted March 13, 2015 Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3976237 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 14, 2015 Author Share Posted March 14, 2015 thanks deathspectersgt7 Â question if i may, actually two... Â a) i've been avoiding the jargon/in-universe speak semi-deliberately, in order to focus more on the forward movement of each 'plot'. do you think it's too 'generic' and not space mariney enough? Â b) although chapters will vary... does the chapter seem too passive? too friendly? Â Â here's part 2... and part 3... Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3976401 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 14, 2015 Author Share Posted March 14, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3976406 Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted March 16, 2015 Share Posted March 16, 2015 They sound like most of the Marines,Nothing wrong w/friendly. I would try too stay away with the usual over used phrases. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3978500 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 16, 2015 Author Share Posted March 16, 2015 They sound like most of the Marines,Nothing wrong w/friendly. I would try too stay away with the usual over used phrases. appreciate the feedback. friendly it is :) thank you Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3978782 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 22, 2015 Author Share Posted March 22, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3984213 Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted March 22, 2015 Share Posted March 22, 2015 That was really GOOD!!! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3984741 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 30, 2015 Author Share Posted March 30, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3991891 Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted March 30, 2015 Share Posted March 30, 2015 Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3992560 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted March 31, 2015 Author Share Posted March 31, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-3992773 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted April 12, 2015 Author Share Posted April 12, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4005523 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted April 12, 2015 Author Share Posted April 12, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4005526 Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathspectersgt7 Posted April 13, 2015 Share Posted April 13, 2015 Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4007251 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Draakur Posted April 24, 2015 Share Posted April 24, 2015 Hey man - promised I'd try to get in here, finally managed it. Have only read up to the end of the first main entry, with the Orks driven off and a basic base of operations set up on Tue. My thoughts: Â - the writing is obviously much more casual than your other work I've read so far, and just quietly could probably do with some editing for grammar, punctuation etc :p. But it started to grow on me as it went along - it reads like sort of a first hand account from a marine remembering back to the events. The tone is sort of a whimsical musing at times, and emotional enough to, as I said, feel like more of a subjective account than an objective one. Ended up sitting quite well with me. Â - the story itself is nice, flows quite well and all feels like it fits in the 40k setting comfortably. I like that the pacing is kind of slow and meandering, and gives the sense of being out in untouched parts of the Imperium. A lot of 'space' and a certain lazy, uneventful kind of atmosphere, punctuated with the battles and their results. Again, I like. Â - the interactions between individual marines are nicely written; I always like reading this sort of stuff from people who do it well. The idea of getting a window into the actual "real life", day-to-day interactions between the brothers of a space marine Chapter always excites me and adds a lot of substance to the setting. Â - you mentioned in your brief that you wanted to try to use these fiction pieces to really portray the character of the Chapter and its marines - I'm not honestly sure I got that feel from this first piece. A fair amount of generic marine interplay and attitude, but nothing that really characterises them yet. I will, however, assume that more of that is to come :) Â Aiming to read more soon, cheers! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4018870 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted April 26, 2015 Author Share Posted April 26, 2015 thanks draakur. appreciate the pointers very much. the project was only every aimed at being a draft level idea dump, rather than polished literature. i never really locked in a single narative perspective... it was more about describing what i see/imagine. may return and revise after progressing the next stage of the project. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4020721 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted June 5, 2015 Author Share Posted June 5, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4072966 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted August 13, 2015 Author Share Posted August 13, 2015 [redacted] Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4146025 Share on other sites More sharing options...
EesiOh Posted August 15, 2015 Share Posted August 15, 2015 God DAM it i ran out of likes for your final 2 sections ;(. Amazing writing though man keep it up. I love the style you have. Also I remember when you put the idea for this chapter in IA and now look at it with all this epic wrting and everything. good job man keep up the good work Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4147220 Share on other sites More sharing options...
paulJam Posted August 15, 2015 Author Share Posted August 15, 2015 God DAM it i ran out of likes for your final 2 sections ;(. Amazing writing though man keep it up. I love the style you have. Also I remember when you put the idea for this chapter in IA and now look at it with all this epic wrting and everything. good job man keep up the good work thanks EesiOh. glad you enjoyed it. it's been fun exploring the concept and hopefully it's a worthy (if perhaps unorthodox) vision of the Astartes. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/303684-the-wilds-tales-from/#findComment-4147272 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.