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I know its the wrong topic and wrong day of the week, but I decided to throw my R&H story out to give the mortals of chaos some more love. For those curious this is about the Fiends of the Apocalypse, my warband I made for the Liber challenge. Sorry if its a big long winded, I had a lot of fun writing this

 

The Spawn Sentinel

 

 

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I'll throw my attempt at the space wolf one even though it's really late

 

Red Ones

 

"Hold him down!"

The unarmored warrior thrashed wildly as the members of 4th claw held him in place, his long hair draped over his enraged features. His struggle was fruitless, his gene-enhanced might was no match for the armor enhanced version of theirs. He was bare from the waist up, except for his gauntlets, and cuts and gashes coated his body. Another member of fourth claw brought a vat of what smelled like blood forth and set it below the Space Wolf. The leader of the claw waited by the door, he stared at the wolf with his bottomless black eyes. The Wolf finally relaxed from his struggle and met the Nostroman's gaze. In the darkness of the torture chamber, both of their natural low light vision allowed the exchange.

 

"Pale filth! You were never warriors!"

"Quiet"

"You cannot order me traitor"

"I am in a position to do whatever I want Fenrisian. You'll wait for the flaymaster in silence."

 

The wolf fumed as the Night Lords tightened their grips on his arms and the sergeant punched him in the face. He vowed to gather all their heads in retribution. As he plotted his escape the doors opened. From the blackness of the hallway emerged a warrior in ancient mark five plate, a narthecium attached to his left arm and an array of surgical tools on robotic limbs emanating from his power pack. A cloak of skin covered the right half of his body, obscuring it to the wolf.

 

The newcomer hissed in delight, "You've brought in a good specimen Zadak." He walked forth and grabbed the wolf's face, turning it left and right. The wolf spat in his armored helm, the paint quietly sizzling from the acid. "His fury will be readily accepted in 8th claw". He tapped some buttons on his narthecium and injected the wolf with an unknown concoction in his neck. The wolf howled in pain.

 

"Dunk his head in, follow with his gloves, then dump him with the rest of the 8th."

 

The flaymaster stalked out of the room and Zadak stepped forth. The wolf's vision narrowed to a pinpoint as his adrenal system went into overdrive. He began thrashing and biting at Zadak in an uncontrollable rage. Zadak grabbed his hair and looked in the yellow eyes of the wolf.

 

"Welcome to the Eighth traitor."

Zadak dunked his head in the blood and the wolf's muffled roar was heard as they branded the symbol of the eighth in his left arm. They raised him out of the blood and then dunked his gauntlets in. An old tradition marking traitors and criminals with red gloves for eventual execution by the primarch.

 

Fourth claw then dragged the howling warrior through the darkness of the cruiser. They reached a bloodstained door with an 8 painted on, and Zadak opened it and ordered his men to toss the wolf into the darkness.

  On 2/23/2016 at 8:13 PM, MyD4rkPassenger said:

I'll throw my attempt at the space wolf one even though it's really late

 

Red Ones

 

"Hold him down!"

The unarmored warrior thrashed wildly as the members of 4th claw held him in place, his long hair draped over his enraged features. His struggle was fruitless, his gene-enhanced might was no match for the armor enhanced version of theirs. He was bare from the waist up, except for his gauntlets, and cuts and gashes coated his body. Another member of fourth claw brought a vat of what smelled like blood forth and set it below the Space Wolf. The leader of the claw waited by the door, he stared at the wolf with his bottomless black eyes. The Wolf finally relaxed from his struggle and met the Nostroman's gaze. In the darkness of the torture chamber, both of their natural low light vision allowed the exchange.

 

"Pale filth! You were never warriors!"

"Quiet"

"You cannot order me traitor"

"I am in a position to do whatever I want Fenrisian. You'll wait for the flaymaster in silence."

 

The wolf fumed as the Night Lords tightened their grips on his arms and the sergeant punched him in the face. He vowed to gather all their heads in retribution. As he plotted his escape the doors opened. From the blackness of the hallway emerged a warrior in ancient mark five plate, a narthecium attached to his left arm and an array of surgical tools on robotic limbs emanating from his power pack. A cloak of skin covered the right half of his body, obscuring it to the wolf.

 

The newcomer hissed in delight, "You've brought in a good specimen Zadak." He walked forth and grabbed the wolf's face, turning it left and right. The wolf spat in his armored helm, the paint quietly sizzling from the acid. "His fury will be readily accepted in 8th claw". He tapped some buttons on his narthecium and injected the wolf with an unknown concoction in his neck. The wolf howled in pain.

 

"Dunk his head in, follow with his gloves, then dump him with the rest of the 8th."

 

The flaymaster stalked out of the room and Zadak stepped forth. The wolf's vision narrowed to a pinpoint as his adrenal system went into overdrive. He began thrashing and biting at Zadak in an uncontrollable rage. Zadak grabbed his hair and looked in the yellow eyes of the wolf.

 

"Welcome to the Eighth traitor."

Zadak dunked his head in the blood and the wolf's muffled roar was heard as they branded the symbol of the eighth in his left arm. They raised him out of the blood and then dunked his gauntlets in. An old tradition marking traitors and criminals with red gloves for eventual execution by the primarch.

 

Fourth claw then dragged the howling warrior through the darkness of the cruiser. They reached a bloodstained door with an 8 painted on, and Zadak opened it and ordered his men to toss the wolf into the darkness.

welcome brother. Glad you decided to join us 

Since I already submitted one story, consider this out of competition, it's better than my first one though.

 

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I thank you all for your excellent entries in The Primordial Annihilator versus the Vlka Fenryka over the last two weeks.

I’ll leave proper commentary to our judge Teetengee, but a few comments on entries which struck me...

Captain Malachi I particularly liked your entry, though I’m sure that daemonette’s intentions weren’t entirely kind. I look forward to reading more about Aeolus.

Scourged, I was glad to see the omophagea in use! I loved that the Blood Claw, shall we say, `bit off more than he could chew`?

Carrack. On your first piece: Damn that was good. Really good. I want to read more of Paimun. More!

Warsmith Aznable that too was fantastic and completely unexpected. Outstanding work. I even felt sad at the end.

I hereby close that topic for the purposes of rewards (though, as always, if you have more tales to tell about the Space Wolves and the forces of Chaos, feel free to post them at any time).

And here begins our sixth challenge of Inspirational Friday 2016:

Chaos Campaign: Opening Moves

Today begins the first part of a new series in Inspirational Friday. A campaign. Over the years that IF has been running in its various incarnations we have seen many groups of renegades and traitors waging war. In this series I want us to focus on one war. From its initial stages through to its climax. The setting, foe, forces, purpose, all are up to you. I plan to have four episodes in the campaign (though might increase it depending on how it goes), spread throughout 2016.

And we begin with...

I – Opening Moves

Your warband is preparing for a large-scale engagement. The deployment of almost if not actually all of its forces.

Whether this initial step is reconnaissance of the enemy positions, infiltration, sabotage, kidnapping or some other sneaky, nefarious deeds...an engagement in orbit or an all-out bombardment...is up to you.

Inspirational Friday: Chaos Campaign - Opening Moves runs until the 4th of March.

And who shall judge this new challenge? That decision lies with our current judge: Teetengee. And to the victor chosen by Teetengee, step forward to claim your Octed Amulet:

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Let us be inspired.

Stand forth and be judged, aspirants!
 

Son of Carnelian: A Wolf’s Luck
A good story of chaos hubris, perhaps a bit predictable, but well done.

Thedarkprincesnun: A wolf and the Plague Lord

A foolish witch relying too much on his force sword. I think it might have been better served by just telling the story of the dual. Perhaps including some of what they said, insults and such thrown back and forth.

 

Kierdale: Blood on the shoulder of Orion

Great scenery as always. The descriptions were great, but the pacing of the battle just felt not quite right. Maybe more back and forth was necessary. Also, it seemed like too many wolves died getting to the walls to have put up such a large threat once reaching them.

 

Captain Malachi: [untitled]

Possessed are fun! I wish there was a bit more though, still, well done with the space you used, lots of different emotions.

 

Scourged: Red Snow

But what happened to the other!?

 

Carrack: For the Throne
The Emperor Protects Indeed!

 

EesiOh: Silence of the Lambs(in wolves clothing)

The good old black and white. I found some of the action hard to follow though, and it overall seemed a bit rushed.

 

Warsmith Aznable: [a different kind of battle]

Every week I dread reading yours due to length, but I know I will regret it if I don’t, curse you foul temptor! I liked this one, although I am unsure as to why Hakon (of the Hounds) let it get to that point, when he knew what was coming.

 

MyD4rkPassenger: Red Ones

I think I know where this is going, but I feel it needs just a bit more to really solidfy it.

 

Carrack: Hunters  (You sly dog you)
The ending seemed abrupt, but I liked the fighting. I wish I had seen more of the chaos bits though.

Winner is Carrack with For the Throne. I liked how it made use of the differing combat strategies of the factions involved while also hinting at Paimun’s issue. In fact, on second reading I noticed some foreshadowing I had at first missed. Well done.

  On 2/27/2016 at 4:39 AM, Teetengee said:

Stand forth and be judged, aspirants!

 

Son of Carnelian: A Wolf’s Luck

A good story of chaos hubris, perhaps a bit predictable, but well done.

Thedarkprincesnun: A wolf and the Plague Lord

A foolish witch relying too much on his force sword. I think it might have been better served by just telling the story of the dual. Perhaps including some of what they said, insults and such thrown back and forth.

 

Kierdale: Blood on the shoulder of Orion

Great scenery as always. The descriptions were great, but the pacing of the battle just felt not quite right. Maybe more back and forth was necessary. Also, it seemed like too many wolves died getting to the walls to have put up such a large threat once reaching them.

 

Captain Malachi: [untitled]

Possessed are fun! I wish there was a bit more though, still, well done with the space you used, lots of different emotions.

 

Scourged: Red Snow

But what happened to the other!?

 

Carrack: For the Throne

The Emperor Protects Indeed!

 

EesiOh: Silence of the Lambs(in wolves clothing)

The good old black and white. I found some of the action hard to follow though, and it overall seemed a bit rushed.

 

Warsmith Aznable: [a different kind of battle]

Every week I dread reading yours due to length, but I know I will regret it if I don’t, curse you foul temptor! I liked this one, although I am unsure as to why Hakon (of the Hounds) let it get to that point, when he knew what was coming.

 

MyD4rkPassenger: Red Ones

I think I know where this is going, but I feel it needs just a bit more to really solidfy it.

 

Carrack: Hunters  (You sly dog you)

The ending seemed abrupt, but I liked the fighting. I wish I had seen more of the chaos bits though.

Winner is Carrack with For the Throne. I liked how it made use of the differing combat strategies of the factions involved while also hinting at Paimun’s issue. In fact, on second reading I noticed some foreshadowing I had at first missed. Well done.

teetengee not pulling any punches ;) . I can only speak for myself on this but your comments seemed pretty fair. I'll go ahead and reread my submission now and see if i find the same problems. I agree with the rushed bit. Everyweek I keep thinking the challange only runs until the next week not two weeks, so i normally rush and do it on the single friday. However I also find it enjoyable doing it in such a way. Thank you for the comment anyway, next week i will attempt to give myself more time and maybe pace it a little better to. Any other advice on improving the overall quality would be much appreciated if you have the time  

Warsmith's was a cool story, but I think it slightly missed some of the opportunity to show the contrast between the two factions (although them being so similar was cool in and of itself) but mainly it was because it seemed a bit off how Hakon walked into that, there wasn't enough for me to justify his dying in the bombardment. Definitely a nice story though.

In Scourged's story I wanted to know what happened to the other brother, recruited? dead? insane? I just felt it needed a touch more.

Both were close to it as well. (And kierdale's too, that was mainly because I felt that fighting the wolves would have had more back and forth, and it wasn't clear how two flyers carried enough to threaten the sizeable Psychopomp presence, particularly with so much firepower. Some reference to scouting may have been warranted.)


EesiOh, by rushed I didn't mean your working on the story, I meant that the story itself seemed like it was rushing, the pace was off. Sorry about the confusion.

  On 2/27/2016 at 2:59 PM, Teetengee said:

In Scourged's story I wanted to know what happened to the other brother, recruited? dead? insane? I just felt it needed a touch more.

 

Oh, come on now... you all should realize I enjoy my use of open-ended cliffhangers. The fate of Edvard is for you to decide, not me. Maybe he did get recruited. Or maybe his mind broke from the assault and he was left to die. Or maybe the sorcerer put a mass-reactive round in his skull to end the misery. Or he found the resolute strength to overcome the mental assault and fight back.  I've got my own conclusions about his fate (and I'm not tellin'). 

 

Regardless, congrats to Carrack

@Kierdale: Any chance we can know what the other steps to this campaign challenge will be? For planning purposes really as I assume everyone is gonna follow the same warband throughout the campaign

 

Love the idea though, think I might cover a  story of fighting Eldar pirates

 

I didnt read all stories this week but I really enjoyed the Warsmiths. The Iron Hounds are a pretty interesting force as far as warbands go

First off, congrats to Carrack.

Second, I agree that my last entry really should have been longer, but sadly the words just weren't coming, I'm sure we've all experienced that once or twice. tongue.png Hopefully this entry makes up for it.

Not entirely sure this is quite what Kierdale had in mind, since he seemed to be aiming more at the initial engagement of the war, but then again, war begins long before the armies meet. Plus this is the idea I had so it's what I wrote. Anyway, my first few entries were focussed on troop level characters, and while they're fun to write about, I wanted to show more about the leadership of my warband.

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  On 2/27/2016 at 6:23 PM, Scourged said:

 

  On 2/27/2016 at 2:59 PM, Teetengee said:

In Scourged's story I wanted to know what happened to the other brother, recruited? dead? insane? I just felt it needed a touch more.

 

Oh, come on now... you all should realize I enjoy my use of open-ended cliffhangers. The fate of Edvard is for you to decide, not me. Maybe he did get recruited. Or maybe his mind broke from the assault and he was left to die. Or maybe the sorcerer put a mass-reactive round in his skull to end the misery. Or he found the resolute strength to overcome the mental assault and fight back.  I've got my own conclusions about his fate (and I'm not tellin'). 

 

Regardless, congrats to Carrack

 

To be fair, that was a very slight drawback to your story, but I can only choose one winner. It wasn't so much the open ended ending, it was that it didn't feel to me that you had hinted enough at what might occur to make it feel intentional. Idk, at that point I was picking apart hairs to decide who should win.

I had kind of the same idea as you did Captain Malachi. More the initial planning of an operation.

 

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The first part of the campaign is 'Opening Moves'...think planning, recon and laying the path. Initial sabotage and strikes too if you wish.

The second part will be 'Assault'. How you read this is entirely up to you.

When we do the second part I'll reveal the theme for the third part.

 

Is that okay? :)

 

 

EDIT: on second thought, I'm not going to reveal the 3rd part until it comes up. I want it to be a surprise.

  On 2/28/2016 at 8:39 AM, Kierdale said:

The first part of the campaign is 'Opening Moves'...think planning, recon and laying the path. Initial sabotage and strikes too if you wish.

The second part will be 'Assault'. How you read this is entirely up to you.

When we do the second part I'll reveal the theme for the third part.

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EDIT: on second thought, I'm not going to reveal the 3rd part until it comes up. I want it to be a surprise.

Sounds great to me, love this idea!

Pilum

 

 

Author note: I recently started a new campaign in the fan fiction section of this board. It's called the Shield, and it is about an invasion of a sub-sector. I intend for it to be epic in length, if not quality. I wrote one before, The assault on Calebra Hive, that ended up being 81 pages (and killed 22 named characters :) ) I don't think I can handle writing two campaigns at a time, so I'm going to try to use stories from The Shield for these challenges, only edited down for length. This week's is still going to be long though, so I broke it into three parts. I suggest reading it one part at a time if your interested, but whatever works for you.

 

 

Signs and Portents

Part 1.

 

The Eye Will Blink

 

Aspis, sub-sector seat

 

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Ready

 

Calimyr, Aspis sub-sector

 

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Right and Proper

 

Morber, Aspis sub-sector

 

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Carrack

 

Judgment's End, Aspis Sub-Sector

 

Excerpt from the Narrative Section (Section C) of incident report 16-888-G46

 

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The Triple Spear

Part 2.

 

Pillars of Fortitude, Aspis Sub-Sector

 

 

 

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Horror

Part 3

The Pillars of Fortitude, Aspis Sub-Sector

 

 

 

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  On 2/27/2016 at 2:59 PM, Teetengee said:
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Warsmith's was a cool story, but I think it slightly missed some of the opportunity to show the contrast between the two factions (although them being so similar was cool in and of itself) but mainly it was because it seemed a bit off how Hakon walked into that, there wasn't enough for me to justify his dying in the bombardment. Definitely a nice story though.

 

Fair enough. I almost included Geirvaldr adding extra comments about either the time table being moved up or their having been wandering in the fog for too long. It's hard to know what to include and what not to when your stories are already notorious for running long. Goodness knows I could always make a story longer; keeping them as short as they are is the challenge. I've also started assuming at least a passing familiarity with the Iron Hounds, not because I expect anybody to actually remember details from earlier entries or to have bothered to read my IA, but because I don't want to restate the same things every time I write about them (which would have been especially awkward in this one where the point of view was an outsiders.)

 

One of these days I'm going to straight up write an entire novel length story about them.

  On 2/29/2016 at 5:07 PM, Warsmith Aznable said:

 

  On 2/27/2016 at 2:59 PM, Teetengee said:

 

  On 2/27/2016 at 2:59 PM, Teetengee said:

Warsmith's was a cool story, but I think it slightly missed some of the opportunity to show the contrast between the two factions (although them being so similar was cool in and of itself) but mainly it was because it seemed a bit off how Hakon walked into that, there wasn't enough for me to justify his dying in the bombardment. Definitely a nice story though.

Fair enough. I almost included Geirvaldr adding extra comments about either the time table being moved up or their having been wandering in the fog for too long. It's hard to know what to include and what not to when your stories are already notorious for running long. Goodness knows I could always make a story longer; keeping them as short as they are is the challenge. I've also started assuming at least a passing familiarity with the Iron Hounds, not because I expect anybody to actually remember details from earlier entries or to have bothered to read my IA, but because I don't want to restate the same things every time I write about them (which would have been especially awkward in this one where the point of view was an outsiders.)

 

One of these days I'm going to straight up write an entire novel length story about them.

Your stories might be long, but they are by no means too long, in my opinion. As far as keeping the tale of your Grand Company moving, I'm not sure what the right balance is. For myself, I want my stories to be self contained, but I'm using some of the same characters and there is a progression of the timeline, so I don't want to repeat every aspect of a character's background with every story, not just for the added length, but it's not as much fun to rewrite the same story over and over.

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  On 2/27/2016 at 2:59 PM, Teetengee said:

 

In Scourged's story I wanted to know what happened to the other brother, recruited? dead? insane? I just felt it needed a touch more.

 

 

Oh, come on now... you all should realize I enjoy my use of open-ended cliffhangers. The fate of Edvard is for you to decide, not me. Maybe he did get recruited. Or maybe his mind broke from the assault and he was left to die. Or maybe the sorcerer put a mass-reactive round in his skull to end the misery. Or he found the resolute strength to overcome the mental assault and fight back.  I've got my own conclusions about his fate (and I'm not tellin'). 

 

Regardless, congrats to Carrack.

To be fair, that was a very slight drawback to your story, but I can only choose one winner. It wasn't so much the open ended ending, it was that it didn't feel to me that you had hinted enough at what might occur to make it feel intentional. Idk, at that point I was picking apart hairs to decide who should win.
That's actually a good point. Thanks. I'll keep an eye out for that next time. Split all the hairs you like.
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Campaign: Opening Moves

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It had begun with the farseer Emrana’s vision. A prophesy. He had seen a chapter of the Mon Keigh’s gene-enhanced warriors assaulting a planet enthralled by She Who Must Not Be Named. He had seen their initial forces - the finest of the chapter - fall, overcome with bloodlust, kneeling before the lord of rage upon his throne of skulls. More had come seeking their lost kin only for them to fail against the Dark Prince’s slaves. Doctrines long honed, souls scourged of emotion and all but devotion to duty could not stand against the madness they faced on that world. Old oaths and the foundations of the chapter were broken, whispered lies believed and the enemy’s ways taken as their own.

They eventually fell under the sway of the Great Corruptor.

Emrana had informed the ever-autarch, Qarasion, that fiery warrior queen who bridled against Carth-Lar’s seer council and their conservative ways, and she was quick to launch their fleet. To intercept the Stygian Guard before they set out to the world of cults. A harbinger of doom with a message of salvation.

 

Alas they had been too late. The Stygian Guard were already the pawns of Slaanesh and, adding insult to injury, they took the autarch’s parting curse as their new name.

Psychopomps.

 

 

A number of Eldar had been captured as their fleet had fled the Astartes homeworld and the renegades, having turned from the light of the Master of Mankind, were enlightened by a herald of She Who Must Not Be Named. The herald had already touched their chief librarian and was all too willing to further their corruption. The Eldar captives were experimented upon. Tortured. The Psychopomps learned of the ambrosia of Eldar souls. The exhilarating heights and terrifying depths of the xenos’ emotions, a spectrum far exceeding the sensations experienced by dull human minds. They became addicted. Obsessed. And through their vile acts the Dark Prince was empowered.

 

Direct confrontation having failed, the wily Qarasion chose subtle paths to counter the renegades, who still wore a veil of loyalty to the Golden Throne. Eldar pathfinders spied upon them and sabotaged the Psychopomps’ efforts whenever possible. Over years a proxy war was fought against these new pawns of Slaanesh, and the aliens attempted to draw the attention of the Imperium to the cancer within the chapter. But human minds are dull and a great many foul acts are dismissed as the most pious of loyal sacrifices.

But in time retribution came. A trident’s strike: agents of the Emperor’s Most Holy Orders gathering those still loyal upon the Astartes homeworld as a fifth column, the elite of the Guard: the Tempestus Scions taking out key sites paving the way for the hammer to fall...the Black Templars.

Fellow sons of Dorn, the Templars had fought alongside the Stygians on countless battlefields, shedding the same blood in the same mud, yet relations had become embittered during the Nantesi Insurrection: the Stygian librarians’ interfering in a climactic duel betwixt the Templar champion and an Enslaver. Years later, after their fall, the Templars suspected the slaying of one of their sword brethren at the hands of the Stygians, and descending upon their homeworld of Fulcrum the Templars at last had their vengeance.

 

Satisfied that the fates would be righted, Qarasion and craftworld Carth-Lar turned their gaze from the Psychopomps, to their folly for much of the fallen chapter, aided by daemonic allies, escaped.

 

 

Like the more famous yet more warlike Biel-Tan, Carth-Lar was dedicated to the rebuilding of the Eldar race and its empire. They seeded worlds across the galaxy, tending them and building paradises for that day when they might once again rise to supremacy. One such world was Mesusid, and it was Mesusid which the Psychopomps first discovered.

Now nomadic reavers, the rogue Astartes fell upon the arcadian maiden world, slaying many of its tenders and taking a terrible number of captives. Thus did the autarch learn that her nemesis, former chapter master and now lord of Chaos Sophusar the Facinorous, had survived.

And so the war continued over the following decades, the Psychopomps chasing any whisper of Eldar settlements and sightings be they of Carth-Lar or other, and the Eldar combating the renegades both directly and indirectly. When raiding forgeworlds for supplies the Psychopomps found themselves facing not only the Skitarii of the Mechanicus but also Striking Scorpions attacking from the shadows, unknown to the warriors of Mars. Eldar ghostships harried the marines’ battleships countless times over the years, appearing from the void unannounced. But in each action autarch Qarasion lost forces and the seer council called impotently for her to step down. Impotent for they knew that she had the loyalty of the Exarchs.

 

Viarphia.

A twin to Mesusid and the fairest child of Carth-Lar.

An Eden, a Zion, a Shangri-la...betrayed to the renegades by she chosen millennia before as protector of all Carth-Lar’s souls and lands. The most valuable and dangerous gambit Qarasion could make.

She gathered her aspect warriors to her - for the council, in horror at her actions, forbade all the craftworld’s guardians from following her - and upon Viarphia she made her stand against the massed forces of the Psychopomps, their daemonic allies and twisted, braying servants.

But Qarasion had not only taken the craftworld’s elite with her, for she had stolen that most precious and ancient treasure: the incarnation of Kaela Mensha Khaine. The avatar.

While their forces clashed in the flawless city, autarch Qarasion had lured Sophusar to the innermost chambers of the planet’s shrine. Her closest friend and comrade in millennia of war gave her life to awaken the god of war, unleashing its bloody wrath upon the Chaos lord.

 

Sophusar was lain low, Qarasion mortally wounded and the avatar, the spirit of Carth Lar, destroyed.

 

 

Months later

The farseer shed no tears at their parting for he had no more to shed. While the Psychopomps had been driven from Viarphia, the price had been devastating. The theft of the avatar’s cask had been discovered too late, when Qarasion’s ships had already departed into the webway for Viarphia and the council had beaten themselves, torn at their robes and faces in anguish and fury at her actions. And now it was gone, never to rise again.

How many of their aspect warriors had been lost? The best of a handful of the craftworld’s shines had been lost and with them the knowledge of techniques handed down from master to master since before the Fall. The craftworld’s blades had been blunted and she who might have honed them once more had been exiled upon her recovery. As soon as she had been able to walk she had been stripped of her armour, weapons and her title. Only now, when she was too frail in body and still reeling with the mental shock of how events had unfolded, only now had the seer council succeeded in removing her from power.

Emrana himself had approved his beloved’s banishment.

Carth-Lar would finally follow a course entirely plotted by the seer council. A course of evading the warlike races of the galaxy. Biding their time and tending their worlds. Rebuilding.

Perhaps Qarasion would find...what? Peace? That was not what she sought...retribution, then...and welcome upon one of their fellow craftworlds. Biel Tan, perhaps, or Ulthwé circling so close to the Eye and the center of their race’s old empire. Yes. By her will she would have seen Carth-Lar fight and rule as their race once had. And perhaps so close to the graveyard of their species she might learn temperance.

Perhaps then they might meet once again.

 

Emrana turned his thought from the exiled autarch and departed from the houses of healing, tired in both body and mind from endless hours lending what aid he could to the butchered and maimed warriors of Carth-Lar.

 

 

 

Holusiax, the Naga Lord, chief librarian and first blessed of the Psychopomps watched smoke curling from the sticks of incense before him, watching the shapes forming in the wisps as they rose and coiled. He ignored the sounds of preparation about him but the smell of ozone, growing in intensity and drowning out the sweet scent of the incense, was impossible to ignore.

The incense sticks wavered as the surface beneath them moved. The six-times-six sticks were each stood in individual silver holders, balanced upon the naked, prone form of an Eldar laid upon the deck. Slimmer and longer of limb than a human, with high, sharp features and almond eyes – now shut tight in a pained visage – the alien appeared pathetically weak in comparison to the gene-bulked and power armoued astartes. Holusiax pushed deeper into the alien’s will and the tremors faded. He exerted his mind over that of the Eldar, paralyzing her, a task which was growing easier with each attempt both due to his growing power and the tortures which had eroded this one’s will since her capture on Viarphia. This banshee had screamed until she could scream no more. Her psyche, her very existence, everything from her birth to the moment she had been taken alive on the maidenworld, had been laid bare by him. And through her, through the bond she shared with her kin, forged over centuries of combat and training, the fall of craftworld Carth-Lar would begin.

He took his eyes from the Sahasrara tattoo upon her shaved crown to look over her body, checking the incense sticks had not shifted from their positions over the lines of nadi confluence where he had tattooed. Over the Ajna, the Vishuddha at her throat, the jade Anahata -all markings he had carefully inscribed upon her- and down to the six-petalled orange Svadhishthana. A meeting of several meridians. Here, over her abdomen he had not balanced an incense stick but rather a severed hand lay over it. A trophy from Viarphia. The right hand of this banshee’s own exarch.

The reek of ozone grew as actinic arcs lapped between the claws of those stood about the sorcerer and his sacrifice. The Erinyes, the warp-hunters, breathed more rapidly as they felt the ritual gathering power. A relatively new sect of the Psychopomps, drawn from the elite of the old companies, the Erinyes were sensitive to the ebb and flow of the sea of souls in a way no common astartes could be. This boon had been bought via various pacts master Sophusar had forged with the neverborn. Their first outing had been an act of vengeance on the dark apostle’s part, their second a failure…and this third a chance for redemption. And more than that, this would be the opening move of an all-out assault upon the Eldar craftworld. The Eryines would pave the way for the rest of the Psychopomps, so Holusiax and Angra had decided.

 

Master Sophusar would not be the one to dispatch them on this mission.

In the time following their retreat from Viarphia, the Psychopomps were led by both the dark apostle Angra and the sorcerer Holusiax, for lord Sophusar lay in his chambers attended only by the herald Nal’eru and the Keeper of Secrets Ki’ma’gureh. None knew if he would rise once again, transformed as Angra and Holusiax had been...or he would perish and the chapter would likely go to war, marines flocking to the personal banners of the chapter’s strongest: Chief librarian Holusiax, Master of Sanctity Angra, senior captains Castor and Dophesia...the first was serpentine in form and complex in mind; the second as devious as a snake and all too often his personality was split, like his face, between his astartes and his daemonette self; and the two captains bitter rivals. Castor the cold, calculating killer, Dophesia the peacock duelist. Who would side with who? If Angra opposed the sorcerer then likely each would attract a captain and the chapter would be plunged into war, half against half, if they allied then it would mean the death of Castor or Dophesia, whichever made their move too late. The lesser captains would move with the balance of power.

Until the gates of the master’s chamber opened there was the semblance of harmony.

 

The Erinyes in their twisted armour and bulky, barbed jump packs knelt around the Eldar, the five of them taking up positions the sorcerer had marked out for them, carved into the deckplates of their arming chamber with his crimson-bladed force daggers. With him they were six. The divine number.

 

The assault on Viarphia, despite having ended in a bloody retreat, had been far from fruitless: the Eldar’s avatar had been destroyed. This alone was a monumental feat and a terrible blow to the xenos. Sadly the Psychopomps had been unable to take many of the Eldar alive; the aspect warriors fighting to the very death, but a great many had been maimed. The familiar Trinehorn Smutgrind and a dozen of the Exalted Fecund’s cultists had been tasked with the gathering of limbs during the battle, for these trophies -this flesh- would be the key to the downfall of craftworld Carth-Lar...

 

At a signal from Holusiax the Erinyes’ champion carefully took the severed hand from atop the alien’s belly. Alecto was now his name; not that which he had been born with but that which Angra had given him upon his elevation. The dark apostle had explained their names as being those of the furies their unit was named for, a bastardisation of ancient legends. That those mythical beings were female mattered not. The astartes, asexual in all but form, had since their fall learned the ways of Slaanesh: form and indeed gender was mutable. Like so many other shackles, such ideas had been cast off lest they restrict the Psychopomps in their exploration of debauchery and sensation.

Alecto raised one of his lightning claws and with a dexterity one would not expect possible with such a large blade, he sliced the fingers from the hand, dropping one into the open maws of each of his brothers.

The 8th implant an Astartes received was the omophagea, which enabled him to essentially learn via eating: via the ingestion and absorbing of genetic matter. The 15th was the neuroglottis, which heightened his sense of taste so such a degree that he could identify many chemicals, and even track targets by taste. In the Psychopomps these two implants had been enhanced further, by the work of chief apothecary Podalir and the arts of the herald, Nal’eru. And in the Eryines this twisted, diabolical genengineering was combined with their preternatural hunting instincts. While the assassin Jinx could with her athame and extreme concentration cut the very fabric of existence, chief librarian Holusiax had trained the Erinyes to traverse the warp with greater ease. To traverse it seeking their quarry...

 

 

Shidheme opened her eyes slowly at the growing ache. A veteran of centuries of combat, she immediately recognized that the numbness in her limbs was not that of paralysation and surmised it had to be the result of medication. That she was alive was a great relief. She was a Banshee exarch and had no desire to awaken within a body of wraithbone as one of the craftworld’s constructs seldom roused from their timeless slumber.

She found she was sat relined in a bed within the craftworld’s houses of healing. Never had she seen the houses so full. Every visible bed, table and even floorspace had injured Eldar laid upon it. The extent of the injuries she could see with even a cursory glance at the nearest fellow patients shocked her and quickened her breathing with a growing rage. Such was the way with warriors of her Aspect. She attempted to sit up but her body all but refused to respond and she felt the ache turn to a pain growing within her chest. She reluctantly relented and lay back upon the soft cushions, fearing she might undo what good work the healers had managed since their return to the craftworld, though her blood still raced. She was incensed.

And how long ago had it been that she had returned to the craftworld? How long had she lain here? How many of her comrades had perished in the beds and upon the floor about her whilst she had lain unconscious? She knew not.

Had Carth-Lar been victorious on Viarphia? Dare she dream that they had wiped out the Psychopomps? She knew that Iuseri, exarch of the rival temple of the Riving Wail, had given her life to awaken the Avatar...surely Iuseri’s sacrifice had not been in vain? How could the pawns of She Who Must Not Be Named have stood against the might of Kaela Mensha Khaine?

And what of her own sacrifice?

It was then that she noticed the extent of the damage to her own body. Bandages crisscrossed her torso, but more shocking than this was that both her arms terminated in stumps at the wrists. She opened her mouth to scream but no sound escaped. She hoarsely roared her anguish and, despite the sluggishness of her limbs, she thrashed upon the bed. The pain in her chest grew acute, recently set ribs breaking once more but she cared not. Mantras to calm the spirit were the art of the Scorpions and the Dire Avengers. Not the Banshees. She wept and attempted to scream again and again, remembering the legend of her aspect’s origins: the Crone Goddess Morai-Heg’s desire for the knowledge within her own divine blood. Her sending her daughters to torment the war god Khaine, he being the only of their pantheon capable of harming another. His eventual severing of her hand to end his own torture and her subsequent supping of her own blood from the severed limb. In her delirious state Shidheme began gnawing upon the stumps of her arms, worrying the scarred flesh with her teeth like a maddened animal. The pain within her began to flood from her torso through her limbs, her blood ran hot as it spurted from her wrists as her teeth tore at them.

Healers cried out as they spotted her writhing upon her bed and raced to her side, hands trying to hold her down, calming words falling on deaf ears.

Even in her crazed state she could see the sorrow and exhaustion in their eyes. How many deaths had they seen? She could see how deeply their spirits were traumatized. There had been no victory on Viarphia. This sole fact made it through her hysteria. And fed it.

She felt the calming presence of their minds touching upon her own and then as one they reeled back away from her.

At the same time blood jetted from her sternum as arcing blades punched out from between fractured ribs. With a grunt of post-human exertion the lightning claws scythed outwards, opening Shidheme from chest to pelvis. But within her body the healers saw not the gory innards of an eviscerated comrade but the madness of the sea of souls. The mad empyrean realm of Chaos.

The Banshee’s body widened impossibly, layer upon layer of flesh peeling back as the portal expanded and five armoured figures decanted once more into the mortal realm upon pinions of baleful green fire. All who saw their arrival turned their faces from the aberration of the Warp and screamed as they felt as much as heard the hungry call of Slaanesh, come for their souls.

With a psychotic roar the warp talons, the Erinyes set upon all those within the houses of healing.

So, um... hey. I kinda feel like I should apologize because this is... long. Now, in my defense, this was a concept I've been wanting to make into a novella anyway. And the four-part structure of this topic is making that a much easier pill to swallow. So yeah... this week and the subsequent weeks will be lengthy from me this time around. But hey, it's good! Plus, I took the liberty of cutting it up into chapters. The whole narrative doesn't have a title yet (seeing as it's only 1/4 done), so I present:

 

Ophiuchi Campaign Part I - Opening Moves

 

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The vast menace of Fragment slipped into the frame of the vidscreen as the Bitter Hope translated out of True-Warp, fading tendrils of the transition sliding wetly from its hull. It was the first time Calliah had been given permission to see it, having been but a little girl when last Escharon had assembled his forces here. It was a sight she would never forget.

Calliah remembered that some scholars believed that Fragment was born of a similar process as those that birthed space hulks. She simultaneously understood why they thought such a thing and that such a system could never have birthed the fell presence she saw before her. Hundreds if not thousands of masses floated amongst eddies of warpfire and void throughout the stratified layers of the “planet.” They ranged in size from as small as a podium to behemoths larger than a continent in all the different materials one could, and could not, find throughout the galaxy. The intricate dance of the swirling sections paid little heed to the laws of reality, sections phasing through each other as often as they twirled to avoid colliding.


Upon each moving section was a pillar of black so dark an observer would  be forgiven for believing them to just be holes cut out of reality. Each of these pointed straight down towards the core of Fragment. Calliah stared through a fleeting gap in its shifting armour straight into the monster’s core; Insane Janus it was called, and it stared straight back. With a shout, of pain Calliah pulled her eyes from the hungry burning malevolence and flicked off the screen.


***


Calliah stood behind King Escharon in the council room as began to make preparations, her mind wandering along the path that had lead her there.
 

“Ptolm, take your Nightseers through Janus first. You will be our eyes and ears. Map the system and system defenses and report all you find to Myself and Ty Ranan. Once you have finished that, move on to reconnaissance on the planets beyond the second to let us know what resources and obstacles they represent. Do not engage with any enemies that you do not absolutely need to unless you can guarantee they will raise no alarms. If you come across enemy Astartes jam their signals and pick off isolated groups. I want you to run false flag operations once we hit the second planet, or the first if the Astartes do respond quickly.”


Ptolm stood hooded and cloaked at nine feet tall, a bright yellow beak jutting out from a star filled robe to respond “Yes your grace, as it was foretold.”

“Ty Ranan, let the Centaurii know they will follow the Nightseers through Janus. They are responsible for scouting out the planetary defenses of the closest two planets to the rift. Have them copy their reports on the first planet to the Dread Sky so that Ambulon and his Shamblers can make planetfall as quickly as possible. I want his festering boots to reach their hospitals as soon as possible. Once you finish the preliminaries, send half your men back to the first planet to bolster the Shamblers. The rest should separate amongst the other captains and support Mab’s blood rain operations.”
 

“My blade thirsts to do your bidding, King of Scars,” said the white armoured Ranan, resplendent in furs and filled with mirth.


“Balgo, you will take your Thrice Cursed to consolidate the gains on the first two planets. I have assigned three companies of auxiliaries to you for that purpose. Go organize them as you see fit.”


“Yes, Captain, right away.”

“Calliah, are the Iron Hounds and Black Wrath legios fit for service.”

Calliah spoke without hesitation as cogitators snapped her out of reverie, “The Iron Hounds are. The Black Wrath is at under strength after Incendus Filius malfunctioned and damaged his three neighboring warhounds and one reaver. We haven’t had time yet to repair the damage or fully diagnose the failure.”

“Very well, once we take the first two planets, I will make planetfall alongside the titan Legio and with two companies of the Tide into the closest major center. The remaining Captains are to coordinate with me to determine how best to take pressure off of my assault. Half the Spoils from each planet you take are to go to your warband alone.”

“Understood!” echoed out amongst the remaining lords.


“Now to your stations; I will relay more fine timing information once I consult the Prognosticum.”

***


Calliah stood aboard the bridge adjusting the holomap of Fragment. Servitors and ur-cogitators swirled around her and the attending psykers, a net of information flowing into her via dozens of her dataspikes.

“King Escharon, the final continent will be locked into place in 32 plus or minus 2 minutes. By my calculations we should have two hundred and thirty seven days until it closes, with a margin of error of 5%. my best calculations have us coming out coreward in Pacificus Segmentum.”


“Very well, send your updated estimates to the astropaths.”

***

Calliah looked out once more on the Janus, now shielded by a specially warded observation deck.

Escharon spoke, more to himself than his attendants, “Six hundred and twenty six years can never come soon enough.”

At that moment the final continents of Fragment came into alignment. A path opened directly into the Insanity Janus and a psionic scream issued forth from whatever hellspawn powers that infernal portal. A seam appeared in the Janus, splitting from one edge to another, like an eye slowly opening. Through it could be seen nothing, as the black of its center brooked no inspection. Something ancient and alien was at work, and all who looked upon it felt a primal urge to run.

“Luther, give the order. Send through the Tide to crash once more upon the coasts of humanity.”

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