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About this blog

I'm going to use this to document the slowly-building Genestealer Cult uprising on Prawa V. I am grateful for the opportunity to show off my models and a little bit of my storytelling. I hope you enjoy.

 

For the time being, all models are painted to 'battle ready' standard while I get my painted army assembled. I intend on going back over them to do the finer details once my painting goal is achieved.

 

I welcome all constructive criticism on both the painting and the writing!

 

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Audio

Another experiment

I've been tinkering with the audiobook again.   I've had may offers of help with it from all manner of friends both here in the UK and abroad to voice certain characters, and so on. Always open to new ideas, guys.   In the meantime, I have been friends with a singer since high school. She does alright for herself and I'm going to call her Victoria, her real name. Sh'es done a couple of samples for me she's happy for me to use at the end of chapter and all that.   Th
Comes the Sandstorm

Back from the desert sands

I've been away for a bit and am so glad to be back in my own home, my own bed, with peace as I drift to sleep at night. Long story short - I have been a bit unwell. Things are sorta on the mend, but it'll be a long and dusty road before I reach that ridge and see the world laid out before me again. In the meantime, I enjoyed reading the boards while I was away but struggled to write. Though, that said, there were some real, uh, 'characters' on the ward I was on. I will write about them later. Pe
The gathering storm

A little fun

So, I've been far too serious with my writing. I wanted a little fun. This is a passage about 329. It's as cheesy as you like. It was quite fun to go all in, full bore, to absolutely ham it up with the best of them. It was quite enjoyable.   So, take it for what it is - an overblown passage glorying in the totally over-the-top narrative. Thoughts most welcome!   =====    The first sign was the light.   It came on above the bunker doors without warni
The first steps toward freedom

329 Awakens

I will be the first to admit, 329 is my pet tank. I try not to let it be the case, but I love the monster I have created. Unfeeling, unknowable, unpredictable. It is my Beast in the Basement.    I wrote this short scene a few days ago while I was away. It'll not likely be included in the story, but was a fun exercise. Krystan is reviewing camera footage from the previous day. He's trying to work it out. 329, the unknowable puzzle. He doesn;t like missing pieces and he's trying to wrk i
Misc

To stand up to a tyrant

Firstly, mods, please deal with this in any way you deem appropriate. The passage below is loaded with my thoughts on the current situation and I wish not to disrespect my fellow Fraters.   I wrote this late night in a moment of frustration, of anger, at things going on the the world at this time. For context, for those who have not followed my stories, the sound of a grenade launcher cocking comes from his Corporal, Łaska. =====   "Who the Hell do you think you are to co
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GSCUprising in Misc

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The gathering storm

The rewrite

Well, the rewrite is going well. It has given me the opportunity to revisit characters who need a little more polish and to drop those who are unnecessary. It has also given me the opportunity to add in characters I had in mind but couldn't quite work in.   For those following the story, it's gone way off WH40K as to be almost unrecognisable. It was never the intention, but it feels like the right move. Certainly the bones are there, but everything built off it is different.  
Prawa V Background

Comes The Sandstorm - Chapter Two

So, here's chapter two. Firstly, my apologies for the formatting. Apache Office and this forum really don't like playing ball together and it seems to remove all the line breaks, etc. Constructive criticism is as always most welcome.   =====   The carrier left the district roads behind before dawn and kept going until the sky paled from black to iron grey. I must have slept in snatches, because I remember the engine note changing more than I remember the ground we crossed. So
Comes the Sandstorm

Comes The Sandstorm - Chapter One

I've been tinkering with things on this. Things like music and a little background ambience.  I've recorded this as an audio (link at the bottom) and would welcome any feedback you may have. This is the story of how the Narrator comes to be a part of the 280th Sunward Watch. I won't say any more so as not to skew opinion. All I ask is constructive criticism. Thank you!   =====   I gave a reluctant nod, jaw clenched, lips tight, and glanced at the orderly. He carefully replace
Misc

So, I have joined a writing group

So, I have joined a local writing group. They meet in the library about four minutes' walk from my house, which is rather convenient. It is a little intimidating having all these pros around me while I whitter on about my stuff. However, I got some good, constructive criticism. I think half the problem with the feedback is that, due to my time in radio and language skills, I can inflect better than most when I read. I think I should get someone else to read my stuff next month, rather than have
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GSCUprising in Misc

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Comes the Sandstorm

The 'Informant'

This is a passage from earlier on in the first story, Comes the Sandstorm. It shows Kaśnyk's day-to-day work and why, when the Resistance begins showing up, he switches on to their activities. It also shows a brief slipping of the mask. He is a true believer in the Imperium. Earlier on, he corrects a worker for slipping into the local tongue, "Gothic only. I will not listen to anything else."   This scene is a little mundane, but I feel it sharpens the facelessness of the authorities a
Hades Rising

Prologue - Hades Rising

I've set aside Comes The Sandstorm and  One More Mile for a week or so. Bit mentally frazzled, so I needed a break before I went back to them and added final polishing for the stories to be added here in a more full format.   So, because I cannot keep my hands off the keyboard, I've taken an earlier short story I wrote and did extensive background work on, Hades Rising, and decided to fold it impetuous young nature into the more mature background of Prawa V.   Below, I've posted
Comes the Sandstorm

The Night Rovfugl and the Eland - redux (edited)

So, I wrote the original text and pasted it here (link below), but, on re-reading it, found it entirely too shallow. The win was way too easy for the Night Rovfugl. The idea was that the fight between she and the Eland would showcase two entirely different doctrines: the Night Rovfugl relying on stealth, with her modified airframe, to get in, stand on station, and get out without been detected. The Eland is its doctrinal opposite, blazing lights, massed rocket and laser firepower, she and her cr
Prawa V - 50 Years On

Almost done

I've almost finished the first edit and pass across the first story, Comes the Sandstorm. I am very eager to either paste the whole thing here or pop a link in for your opinions.   This passage is from the next story, One More Mile. It's just a teaser. I'm probably going to be giving away a little too much with this, but it's, to my mind, a powerful scene, when you understand the context (which I am not going to tell you, right now!). Czajka is probably my favourite supporting characte
The gathering storm

The Night Rovfugl and the Eland

OK, so I said I'd work a little on the Night Rofugl, but got entirely distracted by the encounter at Nowa Avestia after she drops off Barcza and his spec ops team, seen here:      There is a little foreshadowing I have not covered, and that's showing the Valkyrie LV-426, the Eland, resting on a landing pad the day before, so please bear that in mind. Nowa Avestia is the Resistance's headquarters. I know GSC cannot take the Valkyrie, but I think the model's great, so going to bend
The gathering storm

The Night Rovfugl's insertion

OK, OK, I pledge to get the Night Rovfugl and get some decent pics this weekend. I've been sitting on it for long enough. I apologise, family commitments over the holdays and the joy of being in hospital for a few days (yay?) somewhat threw me off track. Below is a passage about the Night Rovfugl, the Night Bird of Prey.   She's a predator. She will only attack if she is sure of a kill. Under other circumstances, she will flee. If cornered, she is like a cat, she'll put on a show al
The gathering storm

Zofia & Róża

I've never really turned my hand to 'romantic' scenes, but thought I'd think a little ahead in this small scene between Zofia Malmgren, the 280th's medic and Róźa Makówska, Sergeant of the 265th, from Comes the Sandstorm. I've sprinkled little hints in the text that there's an unspoken spark between them, but never made it blatant. I like my readers to fill in the gaps. That said, I've not posted any of this, yet! Haha   I believe the question I am asking is, 'does this work for you?'
Prawa V Background

A request for feedback and an apology

Hi all,   Firstly, my apologies for not updating much of late. Both the travelling for the holiday season and being a little unwell has rather knocked the stuffing out of me.   Secondly, a little feedback on my style and where I can improve would be most gratefully received.   I've shown my writing to both yourselves and to some friends I have here. One of the comments was that it is a "little stiff." I can see how this comes about as I tend not convey inner monolog
Comes the Sandstorm

Wójek, the Guardian - take II

So, I thought I'd take another pass at this this evening. Starting a new job tomorrow, so won't likely be on as much. Still, less responsibility, fewer hours, and more pay - who am I to argue with that?   I'll paste the text here and the link to the audio passage. I particularly like this one as I have a weakness for my darling nieces and goddaughter and Wójek is what they call me, meaning 'uncle.' I always melt a little inside when I am called that. It is a very meaningful term of end
GSCUprising

GSCUprising in Comes the Sandstorm

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Comes the Sandstorm

A little experiment

I'm throwing this out there as a little experiment. I am considering whether I should publish my stories as an e-book on Amazon, but also as an audiobook.   This passage is me reading the previous entry to my blog and I'd really like some honest feedback. Even if you say "Shut it, GSCUprsing!" that'd be more than welcome. All feedback and constructive critique I take in-hand and I will thank you for it.   Please bear in mind, this is a pretty rough cut. My smoke detector is g
GSCUprising

GSCUprising in Comes the Sandstorm

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Comes the Sandstorm

The enemy of my enemy is my friend

This passage harks back to the assault on Complex 73. I lost the original text (thank you old hard drive). The Narrator and Kaśnyk find themselves unlikely partners as they both hunt for Barcza, the spec ops commander who commands the Night Rovfugl. Barcza was the brutal soldier who the Narrator's wife, Ida, who sought solace in the arms of another man while he toiled away in the mines. Her murder was at his hands. More below. To Kaśnyk, he is far more methodical. He is an asset that has jumped
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GSCUprising in Comes the Sandstorm

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Comes the Sandstorm

The Warbird

"She's a warbird, and an old one at that, but don't let that fool you, min ven. She is a predator, a night eagle, a Night Rovfugl, and once she has you in her claws, you will never see the morning."   Stenrik looked over to me. I could see in his face that quiet strength I had come to admire in him. But there was something else. Fear, perhaps? I did not ask, I merely kept listening.   "She is like a wild bjergløve. By the time you see her, she has already been watching you f
GSCUprising

GSCUprising in Comes the Sandstorm

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Comes the Sandstorm

Is it secure?

Again, mid-story Comes the Sandstorm, we see three of our main characters interacting with the mechanical beasts they have unearthed. This also features one of only two appearances of the Patriarch. Why so few? I prefer to focus on the human interactions between characters rather than the full, cosmic horror. But, it's important to have him there, always watching, always waiting.   Anyhow, constructive criticism welcome, as always.   =====     The Macharius Vul
GSCUprising

GSCUprising in Comes the Sandstorm

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Comes the Sandstorm

A moment to exhale

So, following @W.A.Rorie's advice, I am going to start tagging these little vignettes and scenes with the appropriate story they are from. I will be going back and ensuring others are tagged appropriately, so there's some consistency and readers do not mix up one with the other.   So, this is from about midway through Comes the Sandstorm, and occurs after the assault on Complex 73. I think this is the first bit I've posted from that particular portion of the story.   I've had
GSCUprising

GSCUprising in Comes the Sandstorm

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The first steps toward freedom

Wójek, the Guardian

Hi all,   I wrote this small scene as an experiment. It features a man guarding the nursery in Nowa Avestia, the headquarters of the Resistance. Now, I will confess, it is a little self-indulgent as the name Wójek is what my Polish little goddaughter and nieces call me - it means "uncle". My heart melts a little when they call me that.   If I decide to include this in the story of Comes The Sandstorm, he'll only appear in this one scene, otherwise I think it'll become redunda
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