Bluddragonn Posted April 22, 2009 Share Posted April 22, 2009 I think the change to the story is much better, in the previous version the death of both of them was too quick and the necrons seemed too easily subdued (my friend playing necrons i know this is much harder than it seems) keep up the good work and maybe write it word first then paste it in because i think that might help with the spellings..... :lol: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1963890 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 23, 2009 Author Share Posted April 23, 2009 Yes, I am a very bad speler. Note, that was a joke, right there. As for the Doctor Who music, that was very off-topic, it was just because there was that weird DW music whenever there was a To Be Continued... at the end. Just ignore. The next instalment...how would Khan die...Oh, I got it!!!!! :o Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1964492 Share on other sites More sharing options...
antique_nova Posted April 23, 2009 Share Posted April 23, 2009 was it my idea ealier? or you could lead him into a cave and blow it up :) thanks antique_nova Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1964701 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 23, 2009 Author Share Posted April 23, 2009 No, but I don't want to give away any clues. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1964979 Share on other sites More sharing options...
antique_nova Posted April 23, 2009 Share Posted April 23, 2009 lol thats the SKIRAX i know, or was that Captain SKIRAX :(. lol jk. gl Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1965031 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sons of Horus Posted April 24, 2009 Share Posted April 24, 2009 i still think i know who the assassin is :P Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1965693 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tutteman Posted April 25, 2009 Share Posted April 25, 2009 I can remember somebody making one of the mandatory Crimson Fists/Last stand on a hill jokes...Maybe Kantor leads a defence on a hill...Which has a large mine under it. POP! :ermm: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1967219 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terrible_Trygon Posted April 26, 2009 Share Posted April 26, 2009 The assassin is Clagar's evil twin, which looks like him but has a top hat, a evil moustache, a goatee and a monocle. He also passes his time on a swivel chair behind a desk in front of a giant surveillance screen, stroking a fluffy white cat. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1968148 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brother Captain Andrecus Posted April 27, 2009 Share Posted April 27, 2009 Suddenly a sound came from behind him, and a menial of the Chapter came up behind him. Ah yes, sweet, sweet redundancy. I can tell you mean well with these, but the DA SW one was pretty bad. The above quote is one of several big mistakes that I saw. Anyway. I really like the first one though. Everybody hates Marneus! :P Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1968268 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 27, 2009 Author Share Posted April 27, 2009 Of course, however I have had stick off the SW DA one, just trust me, tat one was a little sucky. So, on with the next update! Khan looked on in horror as blood seeped from the gaping wound in Dantes head. All combat between the Blood Angels and Necrons had ceased, at least on the Blood Angels part, as they stood, transfixed for the longest second of their lives as their Lord and Commander died, and there was nothing they could do about it. For a single moment, nothing but pain flashed through the minds of the Angels, before something phenomenal happened. Nought but blind anger and rage seared hot through their minds, and all were gripped by the uncompromising embrace of the Black Rage. One hundred marines, all at once, fell into a state of repressed memories from the Primarch himself. As one, they roared praise to the Immortal Emperor of Mankind, and set about their foes with a natural hatred rarely seen amongst Astartes. Metallic xenos fell all around Khan, and he was snapped back from the awe of so many Astartes all gripped by the same madness at once. He looked around, and he saw the Necrons, and thought how simple it would be to break their metallic spines now, but no. His true target lay ahead of him, Dantes severed head in his hand. Looking at Khan, the assassin made a split decision. He turned. And ran. Igniting Moondraken, he sped forth on his beloved bike. The assassin moved at unnatural speed, his legs a blur as his long cloak billowed in the desert wind and the air resistance from his run. Sharp blades glinted in his view, and Khan ducked to avoid two of them just in time. Suddenly the assassin stopped, and Khan spun his bike as we whizzed past to face him, just in time. He dismounted, drawing Moonblade as the assassin drew a long spear from his back holdall. The heraldry on it was clearly recognisable, a Dragons head wreathed in flames, and the Spear of Vulkan glinted in early afternoon sun. Khan narrowed his eyes as the assassin activated the spears power supply, and lightning ran up and down the deadly weapon. Knowing he wouldn’t have much longer before the assassin struck, Khan leapt forward, attempting to bring down his sword on the assassins head. The killer ducked, bringing the spear round to strike Khan in the side. Khan parried, his lightning fast reactions allowing him to block the murderers blows. He backed up, knowing that, although Khan was holding his ground, this opponent was a far better swordsman. This hunt would have to be continued another time, as he could not leave his Chapter hunter-less. Alas, this would end, but at a different time. Turning to mount his bike once again, he saw a flash of steel pass his shoulder. He breathed a sigh of relief, but he saw too late that the killers target wasn’t him. The steel met hard ceramite, but with other-worldly strength, the knife hit the fuel supply. And Khan suddenly heard faint ticking, increasing by the second. As oil and promethium spread around his feet, he realised to late that the assassin had planted a bomb on his beloved bike. The relic of the chapter exploded in a hail of fire and rockrete. Flames licked around his body, and his armours paint blistered and split, and finally the fire took him, burning his life out. The hunt was over, and now he could see a great war coming, one that would ravage the Imperium, one that would end all life in reality. However, it was far too late. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1969178 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sons of Horus Posted April 28, 2009 Share Posted April 28, 2009 he bombed the bike ;) that was nice :P btw was that spear the same one that he took from vulkan? Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1969626 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sempronius Posted April 28, 2009 Share Posted April 28, 2009 UBBT FTW! (Under Bike Booby Trap ^_^ ) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1969658 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 28, 2009 Author Share Posted April 28, 2009 @Sons of Horus: Yes, I will edit it to make that slightly more clear. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1969737 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hubernator Posted April 28, 2009 Share Posted April 28, 2009 Now that is serious irony -_- Bike go boom! Big boom! :tu: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970104 Share on other sites More sharing options...
antique_nova Posted April 28, 2009 Share Posted April 28, 2009 not bad not bad :P, you could of mocked the guy more, by describing the shock on his honour and face abit more and made him more angry. e.g. While Karn is riding on the bike How could this happen to me? I am a champion of Khorne, the most dreaded bezerker in existance and i let some thin assassin take my kill! ow i will enjoy killing this one. i will rip it limb from limb and personally place its skull on khorne's throne. BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD DEATH TO THE ASSASSIN shouted Karn is a blood crazy voice with that khorne's rage had amplified his bike to breakneck speeds that were unimaginable to most, not even the speed of a thunderbolt could match the speed and fury that was being produced from Karn's beloved bike, as Karn tore through the ranks of the deathless metal warriors and turned round into the ranks of now blood crazy blood angels. what do you think? Khârn also doesn't care if the guy is better than him, it just makes him more angry and deadly, he has never ever run away from a fight ever. however this is still good, not are good as your earlier stories thought but it is good none the less. oops mis-read the story i thought karn was running away not the assassin, i have edited the piece now thanks antique_nova Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970154 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 28, 2009 Author Share Posted April 28, 2009 Yeah, you must have gotten a bit confuzzed, there AN. It's KHAN, the White Scars Huntsman? You know the one with the hunting? And the bike-riding? And the Glaven! Woops, went a little Frinky there. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970207 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Firenze Posted April 28, 2009 Share Posted April 28, 2009 Yeah, you must have gotten a bit confuzzed, there AN. It's KHAN, the White Scars Huntsman? You know the one with the hunting? And the bike-riding? And the Glaven! Woops, went a little Frinky there. Stop with the simpsonyness. Good work as always! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970232 Share on other sites More sharing options...
antique_nova Posted April 28, 2009 Share Posted April 28, 2009 double oops ! XD. lol i liked my little extract any way :) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970250 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 28, 2009 Author Share Posted April 28, 2009 Thanks Firenze, and yes that was a nice extract. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970461 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sons of Horus Posted April 29, 2009 Share Posted April 29, 2009 hmmm, so, who's next >:) Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1970918 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 29, 2009 Author Share Posted April 29, 2009 Helbrat. And Darker Papa Smurf with the bloody hand. Papa Smurf: And I shall call him...*scary music*...Mini me! Kantor: Yeeeeeah! Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1971376 Share on other sites More sharing options...
antique_nova Posted April 29, 2009 Share Posted April 29, 2009 Helbrat. And Darker Papa Smurf with the bloody hand. Papa Smurf: And I shall call him...*scary music*...Mini me! Kantor: Yeeeeeah! noooooo i will kill you myslef if i have to ^^, including the fat assassin :lol:. ps helbretch cant die if you sit on him, father nurgel tried it for msot of his life and it didnt work ^^. thanks antique_nova Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1971403 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sons of Horus Posted April 30, 2009 Share Posted April 30, 2009 :P the more you struggle the better Helbrecht's death will be :lol: Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1972039 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluddragonn Posted April 30, 2009 Share Posted April 30, 2009 lol, good work as usual Skirax are you just doing space marine people? If not kill Eldrad ^_^ Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1972438 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted May 2, 2009 Author Share Posted May 2, 2009 Shadows clung to the corners of the room, darker than possible. It seemed as though a thousand eyes stared from the shadows at the figures gathered around the Black Throne. Abbadon sat atop his dark seat, warp energies waxing and waning around it. In the chamber stood Khârn, Lucius and Typhon. Before these Chaos Champions, knelt the assassin. 'I am nearly finished, my master,' said the assassin, his voice cold and calculating. 'Good, good...' purred Abbadon, stroking his small white warp beast. 'My lord,' spoke up Lucius, 'Let me finish off the last two, my god wishes it.' 'If any should have the honour of slaughtering the last two of the Imperiums greatest heroes, it shall be me!' cried Khârn, raring up at Lucius' interjection. 'Neither Khorne nor Slaanesh is deserving of these kills, however Nurgle does. I shall please my god,' commented Typhon coolly. At this, all the Chaos Champions began bickering at one another. Abbadon sighed, and the assassin smiled with his head in the shadows. ‘Enough!’ roared Abbadon, throwing his warp beast to one side, and the champions stopped, looking up at the Warmaster on his Black Throne. ‘I shall let you all have a chance at killing these two champions of the Imperium. However, if you all fail, you will all die.’ Bit of a James Bond baddie there for you. But gives a little hint. Link to comment https://bolterandchainsword.com/topic/164339-the-return-of-the-warmaster/page/7/#findComment-1974707 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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