To make up for this egregious sin of not updating us during the ridiculously busy part of the year, we will require you to mail us your beautifully painted Valkyrie as penance. 

Seriously, most of us fall off the posting wagon every now and then. Don't worry about it. We're just glad you are okay now. 

Not sure how much use this is going to be, or if I can convey exactly what I'm thinking, but I think I can understand what is meant by a little stiff. There is a good chunk of the writing is short and sharp, giving the writing a quick pace and moving forward rapidly, at the expense of fluff (character reasoning/world building etc). 
That's not to say this is necessarily a bad thing! I think it works well for the short snippets type of story you have so far. It'd be more of an issue if/when you wanted to write something a bit longer. You'd need to provide a bit more meat on the story bones, give the reader time to digest and take in what's going on and why. 

Like I say, I quite like the quick pace and minimal background information on these really short stories, because as the reader I'm well equipped to make assumptions based on what I'm reading and implied context, so I don't need a deep understanding of the why's, just that a thing needs to happen, and it's happening now! 

Hope this helps.... ? 

Thank you both @Lathe Biosas and @Domhnall. Your time is much appreciated.

I've always been a little spare with my writing. I like the idea of a reader thinking for themselves, as opposed to me spoon-feeding them every detail. I see it as a compliment to my readers' intellect.

That said, I can see there's always room for improvement, to let the mask slip, as it were. 

I'll take both your points into consideration when I pick up the pen and paper (or keyboard and screen).

Thank you very much.

Take a look at the latest entry I penned this eve. Hopefully, it will show another side to the story.

17 hours ago, Lathe Biosas said:

To make up for this egregious sin of not updating us during the ridiculously busy part of the year, we will require you to mail us your beautifully painted Valkyrie as penance. 

 

Seriously, most of us fall off the posting wagon every now and then. Don't worry about it. We're just glad you are okay now. 

 

 

OK, OK! I'll have it done week's end. :P