raptor1199 Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 God knows what the emperor's heart beat is..... 1,337? very good update :) dont you followers of russ do nothing but howl and drink? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheWulfen123 Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 Of course we dont for we are space vikings! :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 22, 2010 Author Share Posted April 22, 2010 Hi heart beat is probably like 3? We may drink, we may howl but you cannot deny our ability to slaughter the enemies of the Emperor, for do so would be at your own peril. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antique_nova Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 it seems like a familiar destiny for any that is chaos related. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 4! :) UPDATE!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Custodian Athiair Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 hey calgar have you made a decision about which 11th legion primarch/legion you going to use. sorry to sound annoying but i really want to know what the chosen legion is like :) great preview. keep going i'm loving it Athiair :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 22, 2010 Author Share Posted April 22, 2010 Yes i have, the winner will be revealed once i add the chapter :P Thanks Athiair, im trying to progress the plot line but its not working :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 22, 2010 Author Share Posted April 22, 2010 The figure landed with a ground shaking ‘thud’, his face twisted into a vision of terror; lightning played around his deadly talons. “Run little Tau, run for your dearest lives” the figure roared with laughter, his tone malicious and filled with terror. The Fire Warriors training and discipline fleeing them as they fled the Night Haunter. The darkness was penetrated only by Konrad’s Talons and the Tau’s torches, like oppressors the Imperial buildings rose up around them; their ugly faces leering down at the fleeing Xenos, acting like shepherds herding them to their deaths. A Fire Warrior fell to the floor, his comrades ignoring his pleas for assistance. Curze merely laughed. “Pathetic creature, you and your kind can run but you can never hide!” Curze mocked, his tongue lashing out at the air as he spoke. The Fire Warrior was now in the foetal position, his urine pouring out on the cold road surface. This caused the Night Haunter to laugh even more, his very presence caused terror; the Fire Warrior let out cries of help. Konrad hauled his prey into the air, its urine and faeces splattering on his feet. In one horizontal swipe Konrad sliced open the Fire Warriors armour and stomach with his Talon, the Tau’s innards spilling out over Curze’s armour and the floor. He dropped the dead body; the weakness of the Tau sickened him. Konrad would teach them the meaning of Terror, he smiled at the prospect. The Night Haunter looked towards the sky, wondering how his brother Corax was fairing. Corax was in a crouching position as he stalked the patrolling Fire Warrior unit. Using his subconscious he was convincing the Tau that he was not there, their weak and feeble minds easily fooled. He watched them go about their patrol; his Corvus pattern helm gave him an avian like appearance. His ancient and bespoke jump pack roared into life, twin tails of flame streaming from its engines as Corax was propelled into the air. The sound of armour buckling, bones snapping and flesh being pulped replaced the Jump packs engines as Corax landing atop a Fire Warrior. The remaining nine Tau spun around in confusion and readied their weapons. “Ps.. Psyker?” one of them stuttered. There would be no replies, Corax extended the Raven Talons; the very weapons he crafted. In a flurry of death Corax slashed in a myriad of directions, with each slash a Tau was felled. Xenos blood spurted every where, limbs and bodies decorating the floor. Satisfied with his work Corax carried onwards his jump pack once again carrying him forwards through the air. He landed softly and retracted the Raven Talons, he looked from left to right, surveying his surroundings; yet more buildings. His helmet told him that the power of his jump pack was at 18%, enough for one last jump, it also told him that his heart rates were at a steady 21 beats per minute, the ‘combat’ he had just been engaged in not even raising it. Corax unclipped a cylindrical object from his waist and set it on the ground and pressed the top inwards. Like a blooming flower the objects side opened to reveal a pulsating blue light from within. The stench of ozone filled filtered through his helm and a dazzling display of lightning flashed before his eyes. Dozens Raven Guard Terminators appeared before Corax’s eyes, the sight warmed his hearts. Across the city dozens of other locator beacons were going off, some were for Terminator units such as the ones in front of the Raven Guard Primarch, others were for Night Lord and Raven Guard drop pods alike. Orange lights began to light the upper atmosphere, the once dark sky now blotted with speeding drop pods. Streams of blue light shot up towards the sky, the Tau were futilely trying to shoot down the drop pods with their rail guns, this made Corax chuckle slightly. “Captain Tavyr, lead the Terminator Assault in my absence, may the Emperor guide you”. A Terminator who’s huge bulk was evident through his suit of Tactical Dreadnought Armour stepped forwards; his armour was pretty plain save his golden Corvus pattern helm. He put his arm across his chest in a salute, “As you command Corax so shall it be done” his deep voice cutting through the air. Pulse rifle shots bounced like rain drops of his armour, Konrad laughed as he felt the Fire Warriors fear build. Their shots stopped and they became transfixed upon the charging Primarch, like trees they had become rooted to the spot, desperately they tried to scream and move as the menacing figure of the Night Haunter came ever closer, his deadly Talons ready to kill. Curze kept running, his outstretched Talons slicing their torsos from their legs; a fountain of blood erupting from their fatal wounds. The Night Haunter continued running forwards, waves and waves of fear emanated from him like ripples in water. ++“How is the plan coming along brother?”++ Konrad asked as he ran his breathing controlled. ++“Very well, your ’distractions’ have achieved their aims. The locator beacons are in place and the assault has begun” Corax replied. ++“Excellent, now we can truly teach these Xenos Terror”++ the delight in Curze’s voice was undeniable. ++“Captain Zarus report in”++ Konrad barked over the comms. ++“I am leading the 7th in an assault on their orbital relay station now Primarch.”++ The Captain replied instantly. ++“Good, make it swift and brutal, leave no survivors Captain. Whether they are Xenos or human, repentant or not. Kill them.”++ Curze’s voice taking on an altogether darker tone. Zarus withdrew his blade from the Crisis suit, bright azure energies playing across their surfaces. More of the Crisis suits began to land amongst their dead comrades, Zarus smiled, yet more Xenos to vanquish. “Forwards brothers! Let us put the fear of the Emperor into these damned Tau!” he shouted as he began to sprint forwards, his bolt pistol snapping off shots. Missiles and balls of plasma came screaming towards the Night Lords, bolters roared in reply their shells detonating across the Crisis suits, tearing out chunks of metal and flesh. His face was a picture of terror, the Tau tried to activate his suits jet pack but it was too late; Zarus’s power sword plunged straight through the Tau’s head. He carried onwards a look of grim satisfaction across his battle-worn face. Around him Night Lords were tearing into their Tau foe, bolters roared, chainswords whirred; each sound bringing death. The courtyard was littered with dead bodies, Tau and humans alike, Zarus only felt hatred. Like cattle they were slaughtered, “For the Emperor” some had screamed, clutching their Aquila’s. Any human who would work alongside Xenos and could turn on the Emperor deserved death, Zarus spat on the body of a dead human, his acid dissolving its already decaying corpse. Through fear could the Imperiums populace be controlled and kept in line; at least that’s what his Primarch, Konrad Curze preached. That is exactly what he was; an instrument of fear, a weapon of war. Zarus smiled. As ever please enjoy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 Great update :) B) But where's the 11th Primarch????:P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 22, 2010 Author Share Posted April 22, 2010 Haha he will come quick enough, just because i hosted the competition now, doesn't mean he has to come in now ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonas Stromclaw Posted April 22, 2010 Share Posted April 22, 2010 hehe, I love this one! My brother plays tau and the look on his face when he read this was priceless! Bring up the 11th Primarch please! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Custodian Athiair Posted April 23, 2010 Share Posted April 23, 2010 great chapter :). could use a few comma to split clauses as it is a bit confusing eg. “Excellent, now we can truly teach these Xenos, Terror” there was another one but i've forgotten where it was Athiair :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
raptor1199 Posted April 23, 2010 Share Posted April 23, 2010 this is little off-topic but how you old bears find names for your stories? and more tau blood :devil: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 23, 2010 Share Posted April 23, 2010 great chapter :). could use a few comma to split clauses as it is a bit confusingeg. “Excellent, now we can truly teach these Xenos, Terror” there was another one but i've forgotten where it was Athiair :D Actually Athiair, Calgar had it the first time round. "Excellent, now we can truly teach these Xenos terror (Ithink it's better than Terror)" And Raptor, what do you mean? Do you mean, how can we come up with titles for threads? Or individual stories? Because most are just what the story is in two or three words, if you get it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 24, 2010 Author Share Posted April 24, 2010 Story names are pretty easy, just think what the plot is use that e.g. A Imperial Fist strike on a planet called Normi could be Assault on Normi or some such. As for Charater names well thats a bit easy too, take the Salamanders for example, their Chapter Master is Tu'Shan. Most of their names are have 1 or 2 letters followed by a ' and then the rest of their name e.g. Ra'Tur. I just look at existing characters and use those examples and you look at the Legions/chapters history and what period their based off. Athiar, im no good with gramamr. At all and i use a crap version of word(word works) which doesn't even recognise some words and then i have to use online dictionaries ect etc. Im ill today so i doubt very much i will be adding, curse you Nurgle! I will not fall foul to your nefarious charms. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
raptor1199 Posted April 24, 2010 Share Posted April 24, 2010 Normi why does that word seem familiar ;) and you have homefield advantage as native english speaker :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 24, 2010 Author Share Posted April 24, 2010 Normi, i just randomly typed that; was going to put normal but changed it:P Well yes but the english language is one of if not the hardest language to learn in the world. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
raptor1199 Posted April 25, 2010 Share Posted April 25, 2010 btw calgar normi is slang word from normaali=normal ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheWulfen123 Posted April 27, 2010 Share Posted April 27, 2010 Add something your keeping us waiting! its too much to bear!!!! :angry: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 27, 2010 Share Posted April 27, 2010 Yeah, come on Calgar! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonas Stromclaw Posted April 27, 2010 Share Posted April 27, 2010 Bring on the 11th Legion! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 27, 2010 Author Share Posted April 27, 2010 The 11th will be the last legion i do ;) So unlucky. Im trying to think how to do the others as its hard! The Lion is intriquing me right now not sure when i will add and also Nurgle had infected my all weekend but by the power of the Emperor i am free of his nefarious taint now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonas Stromclaw Posted April 27, 2010 Share Posted April 27, 2010 The 11th will be the last legion i do ;) So unlucky. Im trying to think how to do the others as its hard! The Lion is intriquing me right now not sure when i will add and also Nurgle had infected my all weekend but by the power of the Emperor i am free of his nefarious taint now. No 11th yet? ;) Oh weel, so long as more things die, I'm happy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calgar101 Posted April 27, 2010 Author Share Posted April 27, 2010 Oh things will die, that i assure you. I plan to add a chapter tomorrow night, i do need to advance my plot as chapters about Legions and Primarchs killing things is probably boring you guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skirax Posted April 28, 2010 Share Posted April 28, 2010 Not as long as they're different and intruiging(S?!) :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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